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 Posted: Fri May 20, 2011 3:46 am
With these open scars
I've left my heart behind
- dying with you in a lonely room -
With every step the heart grows heavy,
Every inch fills with throbbing memory.
Noise breaks the silence,
As silence shatters the noise
- an endless cycle echoing -
Blending in with the fragmented sounds
Of suffering, muffled with tears.
Dedicated to Chris, RIP
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Posted: Sun May 22, 2011 6:59 pm
I think this is one of your strongest pieces. At least from what I've read of yours. The word play here is great, and the whole poem is very moving. Great job.
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Posted: Mon May 23, 2011 10:33 pm
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