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So now,here's a serious part of the FMG guild. The critiques. As you have read in the Guild Description,me and everyone here is to critique each other's work and help each other improve. I believe in very fair critiques,but not sugar-coated critiques. That being said,don't hesitate to post your art though. Artists need all the feedback they need. So just a hint. I am not a professional mangaka. My skills are far below any of the pros you see around,but I have a broad breadth of knowledge of anatomy,coloring techniques,and extras,such as storytelling and manga page formatting. I will try my best to critique your art in the fairest and best way possible. Aside from me,other people may critique on other member's art.Thanks for taking the time to read this,and let's get started. So without further ado,let the rage begin!


Pointers:
1.Give your best and most recent art. This is so people can see what you can do at your fullest,and how your skills are right now so then people can critique it.

2.Permission to redline. Redlining is the drawing of red lines on your art to point out your mistakes or things you can improve. I don't know much objections that might come up of this other than copying,but I will ask before doing so.

3.You may post your original manga stories here for people to read. We can assist you with plot,characterization,flow,plot twists,and other things to improve your story.

4.Take the critiques to heart. Know what the critics say and use that new learned information to improve improve improve!

Nice work biggrin
I see that the pose was done well,and the limbs seem to be positioned according to the stride of the run.

Head:
Don't know if you wanted it this way,but that depression at the back of the head doesn't feel right :l The head is usually an eggshell shaped object that is larger at the back.
The ear should be placed just a bit above where the chinline recedes into the neck.

Neck:The neck seems iffy. You tried to exemplify the natural curve of the neck when drawing a profile view,however,you have seem to forgotten the neck's actual girth and width. Position the front part of the neck closer to the chin point.

Shoulder:The shoulder is on the same line as the collarbone which is on the same line as the neck. That being said,you should position the shoulder right under where the neck ends.

Torso:
Nice boobs o////o
Keep in mind that the breasts curve down to the ribcage. Show the curve of the ribcage by drawing a curved line that stems from just below the n****e.
The back,you should exemplify a arch of the back and accentuate the girl's curves by adding a curvy-lined shaped back... -errr,it's hard to explain,i will redline it-

Leg:The bent right leg seems to be shorter in length than the less bent left leg. If you outstretched both legs,the knee on the right leg would be higher than the left leg. Make sure that the size of the legs are congruent.

First art post in this guild. xd

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First off, OMG I LOVE OUTFIT blaugh Very detailed, could use some shading, but overall fantastic. 3nodding I wish I could draw clothes as good as you do.

Second, the hair looks rigid to me and doesn't seem to flow naturally. However the design concept of the hair is unique and excellent in my opinion.

Finally the eyes...I don't know what it is about them, but I just don't like them. It might be their position on the face...idk.

What's your art style inspiration?

But overall, whatever it is you do to draw fantastic clothes, keep it up and improve. Just make the hair feel more natural or use your art style inspiration to influence your way in drawing hair. Finally all I can say about the eyes is to try to be careful about positioning. Then again, since this is "kinda old", I don't know if this really is how you currently draw. Perhaps your drawings have improved since you've drawn this piece of art. But even so keep drawing, I think you are a good artist, and with more time and practice, I think you can be pro. wink

Lol Don't worry. I'm like that too. wink Even now, I'm not satisfied with my own drawings. But I think that's the reason why I want to keep drawing and improve to a point that I can be satisfied.

Here is a newer Drawing