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Emmerah
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 22, 2011 3:01 am


The outcome of a very bored and lethargic day rofl read if you dare, enjoy if you wish to, and comment if you manage to do at least one of the previous things 3nodding

Pain

Wonderful, flowing, crimson pain,
With nothing to lose, and nothing to gain.
She slices and cuts at a glorious pace,
She shows off her scars to defy her discrace.
The world as it is now, she begins as they stare,
Is one that won't listen, and one that won't care.
Though you tell them they're wrong, and you show them their shame,
They still cannot hear you, as you lay down the blame.
And it weighs on her heart, as they turn away,
And she smiles very sadly, she'll remember this day.
She sees to their souls, as they go on their way,
She sees that they're faceless, and she knows that they'll pay.
PostPosted: Sun Apr 24, 2011 5:15 pm


Interesting... I seem to be saying that a lot, but it's true. I was confused when I was reading this. Is the girl saying
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The world as it is now, she begins as they stare...
, or what? Also, The end was... vague. It's good, but the second to last line isn't clear. I do appreciate the last line, I think it is very good.

I look forward to reading more!

EstoPerpetua
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