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Kittycquariana

PostPosted: Sun Mar 13, 2011 6:23 pm


I tend to not get a lot of feedback so here is one of my attempts to get some. shot. Anyway, here's a couple of poems for you all to critique/give an opinion on. Feel free to quote one of my poems from the last two contests and give your opinion on those. The first is intended as a haiku and then the second is free-verse.

"The Wind's Promise"

The frigid air moves
pushed by the graceful spring wind,
Singing pleasantly


"Yet to Bloom"

The frigid air impedes me
As I shiver with the fear
That I will freeze
Before I bloom.

But hope persists
In the song of the birds
That dance about the
Blue sky that
Environs us all.

And so I endure
This cruel, dark
Winter before
Spring arrives.

Soon, one day
My beauty will
Reveal itself for
All to see.
PostPosted: Tue Mar 15, 2011 9:42 pm


wow i love it

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Kittycquariana

PostPosted: Thu Mar 17, 2011 5:21 pm


Thank you for commenting. smile
PostPosted: Thu Mar 17, 2011 6:11 pm


i liked it ^^

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Kittycquariana

PostPosted: Sun Mar 20, 2011 5:47 pm


Thank you smile . Time to bump with another poem. The title is Latin for "Into the Stars." I intended it to be free verse.

In Astra

I see you distantly
Like a star faintly
Shimmering in the
Black night sky

A distance that
Covers a galaxy's
Expanse separates
each other.

But to find you
I will transcend
These celestial
Continua.

No matter how
Far you drift,
My heart will always
Be a shining beacon.

For my hope is
Forever radiant
Like the heavens
Urging me forward.
PostPosted: Sun Apr 03, 2011 3:48 pm


Those were pretty poems ^^

would you read one of mine, please?

Creamatoria

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Kittycquariana

PostPosted: Sat Apr 16, 2011 10:43 pm


@PandaYuki: Finally got internet back. Commented on it. Thank you for commenting. smile Now, here's another one. Can you help me come up with a title? D:

-Untitled Free Verse-

The Butterfly was the most beautiful,
More beautiful than them all,
Her wings were stained glass,
Shimmering, shining in his light,

But in her heart,
She felt trapped by,
Day's soft light,
The illusion of safety,

She knew Night was,
Dangerous,
But she felt it sing,
She felt a calling

Yet, still,
Night called her,
And she flew out,
Lost in its darkness,

Do not look for me,
Do not call to me,
I am a lost butterfly,
Drifting endlessly,

Writhing, singing,
Nobody can see me,
Can you feel the unfulfilled
Wish in your chest?

The Night heard mine,
She knew what I wanted,
I could feel it,
In my breast,

Do not look for me,
Do not call to me,
I'm a free butterfly,
Flying in the night,

Wishing, waiting,
There's no more time,
Will you fulfill the wish,
In your chest?
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