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 Posted: Fri Mar 04, 2011 1:24 am
This one was inspired by something one of my WoW guildies said to me while I was playing (instead of doing homework... like I should have been sweatdrop )
Anyways, as always, enjoy and please do comment! 3nodding
Goodbye
Your love shatters me, my dear.
So it's time for me to leave.
It's time to find the pieces.
All those little pieces that define me.
I'm not a plaything, my sweet.
I can't be as you desire.
Can't trust you with my secrets.
'Coz you're nothing but a liar.
It's not like movies are, my darling.
Good looks don't always get the girl.
Looks aren't what I'm looking for.
I refuse to let you be my world.
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Posted: Sun Apr 24, 2011 5:21 pm
I really enjoyed this. My only suggestion: give it a bit more of an ending, it's good, but could use a bit more closure. The movies metaphor was great! The second stanza is good but doesn't leave as much of an impact as the first and third. The first is intriguing, I appreciate the whole shattered - pieces theme.
All in all very nice! Keep up the awesome poems!
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EstoPerpetua Vice Captain
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