So I'm not much of a poet but I'd like to give it a try and see what people think. This is one of the more "archaic" poems I've tried to write and I know I put a lot of work into it, though I still feel like it's pretty bad sweatdrop , so any words of advice (or encouragement haha) would be greatly appreciated.
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You bid farewell and I wave goodbye;
the temperance conveyed through your smothered sigh.
And though the cities around us fade
your smile, your love I cannot evade.
And you in your beauty, your innocent cadence-
Oh how i plead to change these beguiled arrangements.
To capture you in with your grace so holy
and retrieve your essence; to bring you to me.
Everlasting was you and this I knew,
but God through folly did show me all the
mistakes I made and to me he laid
this affliction, this conviction,
of profound admiration
for you and you alone.
The heavens force a drift between us.
I cannot bear this though I must;
I must bear through this curséd lust,
To stand beside you through rain and rust.
Without you the stars would grow dim
the sun would cease and all go limp.
The skies above would weep in sorrow,
The earth herself would grow cold and hollow
for their only angel, their beacon of hope
had vanished from sight, left us to cope
with the dreary, the weary
the deaf and so clearly
we would be blind, constrained in time,
as we lay corroding in fearful silence
craving the uncovering of some mild hinderance
of love and affinity but none will shine,
for you, my infinity, would be gone from time.
To you I declare myself, my life
for I am ensnared with dismay and strife,
But weary I am not
though this trial I abought
for you are my sight
you are my thought, you are my light.
So as you depart your separate way
and as I live through each aching day
I'll remember you through every tear and pain,
I'll remember you through the smiles the same
And if you remember me too, if I stay with your mind
then maybe one day, once more you'll be mine.
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You bid farewell and I wave goodbye;
the temperance conveyed through your smothered sigh.
And though the cities around us fade
your smile, your love I cannot evade.
And you in your beauty, your innocent cadence-
Oh how i plead to change these beguiled arrangements.
To capture you in with your grace so holy
and retrieve your essence; to bring you to me.
Everlasting was you and this I knew,
but God through folly did show me all the
mistakes I made and to me he laid
this affliction, this conviction,
of profound admiration
for you and you alone.
The heavens force a drift between us.
I cannot bear this though I must;
I must bear through this curséd lust,
To stand beside you through rain and rust.
Without you the stars would grow dim
the sun would cease and all go limp.
The skies above would weep in sorrow,
The earth herself would grow cold and hollow
for their only angel, their beacon of hope
had vanished from sight, left us to cope
with the dreary, the weary
the deaf and so clearly
we would be blind, constrained in time,
as we lay corroding in fearful silence
craving the uncovering of some mild hinderance
of love and affinity but none will shine,
for you, my infinity, would be gone from time.
To you I declare myself, my life
for I am ensnared with dismay and strife,
But weary I am not
though this trial I abought
for you are my sight
you are my thought, you are my light.
So as you depart your separate way
and as I live through each aching day
I'll remember you through every tear and pain,
I'll remember you through the smiles the same
And if you remember me too, if I stay with your mind
then maybe one day, once more you'll be mine.
