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 Posted: Fri Feb 25, 2011 4:47 pm
This one is sort of a tester of an idea I wanted to try.. for once I actually had the message of the poem in mind before I wrote it too! sweatdrop Enjoy, and please do comment 3nodding I don't bite, I promise! ninja
Heart over Mind
Falling, falling,
Falling in love.
Head over heels,
Heart over mind.
I’ll promise forever,
If you’ll promise in kind.
Falling, falling,
Falling too deep.
Trust over wisdom,
Heart over mind.
I’m yours forever,
Are you always mine?
Falling, falling,
Falling to bits.
Lies over evidence,
Heart over Mind.
I’ve always been yours,
But you’ve never been mine.
Falling, falling,
Falling again.
Hope over lessons,
Heart over mind.
I’ll do it all over,
Until forever is mine.
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Posted: Mon Mar 14, 2011 2:12 pm
The mind/kind thing threw me for the rest of the poem (I know, I've got the be the trippiest; most mind-effed person in the universe). It was just... unexpected to see mind/mine throughout the rest fo the poem. But you probably weren't trying to rhyme anything anyway. Doesn't matter really because I thought the 'head over heels, heart over mind' bit was very creative. The italic lines helped to tie the stanzas together nicely, I think, once I got my mind out of it's rhyming rut (I just irritate myself beyond redemption sometimes... sweatdrop ).
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