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User_20392979 Vice Captain
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 Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 8:38 pm
Since many people have created OCs and some may be concered about Mary Sues/Marty Stus and what may or may not count as one, I posted a test here.
Not telling anyone to change anything, but I though this might be help, if not fun at least.
Marty Stu / Mary Sue quiz (AKA how cliche are your OCs ? xD)
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
These were the reduce points ones.
[ ]Do you ever poke fun at your character's faults/weaknesses and/or use them as plot devices?
[ ] Has your character ever been honestly selfish, petty, lazy, shallow, or pointlessly cruel?
[ ]Is your character really and honestly overweight/ugly/out of shape, and stays so throughout the entire story?
[ ]Is your character physically disabled, and has nothing to make up for it? (To quote Dr. Merlin, anyone who says "She's so pretty that it's like a disability because everyone hates her or wants to have sex with her" will be summarily keelhauled.)
[ ]Is he/she truly mentally disabled, IE, retarded, and has no powers because or despite of this?
[ ]Is your character human, 40+, and looks his/her age?
Older than 60?
[ ]Does your character have a truly debilitating phobia that does not mysteriously disappear at a crucial moment?
[ ]Has your character ever run away from anything simply because he/she was a coward?
[ ]If your character had a bad past with his/her parents, does he/she reconcile with them at any point?
[ ]Has your character ever been in a situation that he/she had no way of overcoming on his/her own?
[ ]Did he/she give up without trying?
[ ]Did he/she give up after failing?
[ ]If he/she eventually found a way of overcoming the problem, was it extremely difficult and/or took a really long time?
[ ]Does your character ever admit to being wrong, even if he/she doesn't really mean it?
[ ]Has your character ever ignored wrong-doings against him/herself and/or others because he/she simply didn't want to get into trouble?
[ ]If your character is all or partially non-human, does he/she react in very non-human ways or in ways more appropriate to his/her species?
[ ]Does your character act in odd and/or awkward ways that other people find strange and confusing rather than endearing, and these people aren't called or portrayed as foolish/stupid because of it?
[ ]Do you view your characters more like tools than friends/children?
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 8:49 pm
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[Y] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[Y] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[Y, he kil'd em] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[Y] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[Y] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[Y] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[Y] They have lots of friends/no friends
[Y] They are emo/cutesy
[Y, Older] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[Y] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[Y] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[Y] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[Y] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[Y] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[Y] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
Dats mah RPC from another guild.
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 8:50 pm
Haru/Sora
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[x] Their eyes change colour (skeletonian eye kekkei genki)
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[x] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[x] They have lots of friends/no friends
[x] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[x] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[x] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[x] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[x] They are very mysterious/dark
[x] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[x] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[x] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
And Eleven. Even with some of the weird stuff I have going on!
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 8:56 pm
Phoenix
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[x] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[x] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[x] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc (she can sense emotions, but it does count.
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[x] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[x] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[x] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[x] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[x] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[x] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[x] They are connected with a certain animal (wrens and nightingales)
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[x] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[x] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[x] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
13! Not as bad as I thought!
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:01 pm
And last but not least, Lucier/Meiro
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[x] Their eyes are an unusual colour (light purple)
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[x] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[x] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[x] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[x] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[x] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[x] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[x] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[x] They have a rare/unusual name
[x] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[x] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood (Scion)
[x] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[x] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[x] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[x] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
15, so right on the high end of alright. But then, she's a side character and made to be so that you don't want to go against her.
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:12 pm
Mine test for Yuko (crossed out all the ones that don't apply to my character and my thoughts and opinions).
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong-Well she is a high ranked ninja, and knows how to fight. She isn't like the Hulk. For most OCs here as a Mary Sue, I don't think this would count unless they are unusually super strong, like superman.
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour-She has reddish brown eyes, but for a series like Naruto, its not unusual to have eye colors that isn't considered natural in the real world, so I don't think this counts. Applies to hair color as well.
[ ] This happens to be red-Yes. I like red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size-Yes, but so does a lot of females and she isn't ridiculously big. About C-D cup. Women in real life come in different sizes, why not OCs?
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender-Maybe to some, obviously not everyone. I think she is pretty, what's wrong with that as long as its not to the point where everyone has to be in love with her?
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers-Does that ring count? Part of that eidolon thing I believe (Bryhilder), mainly in that on fic. Usually, no.
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer-Well she is a medic nin, nothing unusual in Naruto.
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family-Uh, never gave much thought how much money her family had. I don't think rich equals Mary-Sue unless its a series where not a lot of money is involved.
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents-Yes. Not unusual in Naruto, not unusual for ninjas with a kekkei genkai living in the mist village. I say it doesn't count or almost most characters, including canon would be mary sues/marty stus
[ ] They ran away from home-Well forced out, does that count?
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender-Maybe? Depends on the person I suppose.
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends-She has friends, what's wrong with that? Not everyone is her friend so I think its o.k.
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.-Yes, but so do I in real life. Hey, it happens.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship-Yes, how is that necessarily mary-sueish?
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder -Had some, who most ninjas in Naruto had some trauma, not unusual for the series.
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent-Maybe not a super genius, but knowledgable and intelligent in her own right? As long they aren't like Shikamaru's level, I see nothing wrong with that.
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet-A crow, but it works with the plot.
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts-Does Itachi count? LOL I'll leave that undecided for now.
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name-Uh, it fits with the series, I say it doesn't count as it doesn't stand out. Besides, I think Yuko becoming more common in manga now, maybe.
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.-Yes, but so was I (lazy so I gave her my birthday, June 20th which is Midsummer's Eve). Hey some people are born on Holidays, so I don't think that really counts.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element-Yes, but this is a Naruto OC, so it doesn't count. LOL
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal-Yes, but once again, not unusual for Naruto series.
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga-Not on purpose and I changed it.
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared-Does a kekkei genkai count? The people in the mist seem to fear and misunderstand it.
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live-From mist to another village? Not too unusual.
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark-A bit dark I suppose, but hey, you would be too if you lived in her world. LOL
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear-a ring, but many people in real life do that so that doesn't really count to me.
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
These were the reduce points ones.
[ ]Do you ever poke fun at your character's faults/weaknesses and/or use them as plot devices? Plots no, I poke fun at times.
[ ] Has your character ever been honestly selfish, petty, lazy, shallow, or pointlessly cruel? I suppose so, she is human after all.
[ ]Is your character really and honestly overweight/ugly/out of shape, and stays so throughout the entire story?
She's a ninja, it would be more out of place if she was overweight and out of shape I believe.
[ ]Is your character physically disabled, and has nothing to make up for it? (To quote Dr. Merlin, anyone who says "She's so pretty that it's like a disability because everyone hates her or wants to have sex with her" will be summarily keelhauled.)
[ ]Is he/she truly mentally disabled, IE, retarded, and has no powers because or despite of this?
[ ]Is your character human, 40+, and looks his/her age?
Older than 60?
[ ]Does your character have a truly debilitating phobia that does not mysteriously disappear at a crucial moment?
[ ]Has your character ever run away from anything simply because he/she was a coward?
Again ninja, would be a very good one if she was a coward.
[ ]If your character had a bad past with his/her parents, does he/she reconcile with them at any point? Their dead and her past was fine it came to them anyways.
[ ]Has your character ever been in a situation that he/she had no way of overcoming on his/her own?
[ ]Did he/she give up without trying?
[ ]Did he/she give up after failing?
[ ]If he/she eventually found a way of overcoming the problem, was it extremely difficult and/or took a really long time?
[ ]Does your character ever admit to being wrong, even if he/she doesn't really mean it? Sure maybe, never came up.
[ ]Has your character ever ignored wrong-doings against him/herself and/or others because he/she simply didn't want to get into trouble? LOL no
[ ]If your character is all or partially non-human, does he/she react in very non-human ways or in ways more appropriate to his/her species?
[ ]Does your character act in odd and/or awkward ways that other people find strange and confusing rather than endearing, and these people aren't called or portrayed as foolish/stupid because of it?
[ ]Do you view your characters more like tools than friends/children?
I created them so they are like child, I don't see how that effects them though.
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
About 26, but most don't count I believe and gave my opinion as to why. razz
Edits-some points taken off due to the last part I just added.
Changed again. I'm lazy but its the middle result.
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User_20392979 Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:24 pm
My character is too much like Orochimaru and Itachi...
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 9:46 pm
For Karasu-
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour-Yes, but it fits and only when activated.
[ ] This happens to be red-Yes, only when he uses his Sharingan.
[ ] Their eyes change colour-*points to above post*
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular-He's fit and toned, he is a ninja.
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender-He's a playboy. wink
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc-
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet-Well he does now. LOL
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers-Does eye transplant count?
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family-Well his mom his rich now, but Yuko earned that money...and won bets against Tsunade.
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents- Yes. emo R.I.P Itachi
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender-Yes. But this Dansho after all. LOL
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy-Emo is a genre of music and he isn't a robot, enough said. He is more colder at times if anything.
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane-Well you might have problems two if you have an uncle that kidnapped you and did an eye transplant and your father's spirit is a crow and you two can communicate with each other, etc...
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ ] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations-sort of. 0_O
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet-sort of
[ ] They have a guardian spirit-Does Itachi count?
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts-only one
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name-Not unusual in the Naruto world.
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga-Well he sort of looks like his father. >>
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood-Uchiha discrimination?
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live-well he travels for missions. >>
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
These were the reduce points ones.
[ ]Do you ever poke fun at your character's faults/weaknesses and/or use them as plot devices?
[ ] Has your character ever been honestly selfish, petty, lazy, shallow, or pointlessly cruel?
[ ]Is your character really and honestly overweight/ugly/out of shape, and stays so throughout the entire story?
[ ]Is your character physically disabled, and has nothing to make up for it? (To quote Dr. Merlin, anyone who says "She's so pretty that it's like a disability because everyone hates her or wants to have sex with her" will be summarily keelhauled.)
[ ]Is he/she truly mentally disabled, IE, retarded, and has no powers because or despite of this?
[ ]Is your character human, 40+, and looks his/her age?
Older than 60?
[ ]Does your character have a truly debilitating phobia that does not mysteriously disappear at a crucial moment?
[ ]Has your character ever run away from anything simply because he/she was a coward?
[ ]If your character had a bad past with his/her parents, does he/she reconcile with them at any point?
[ ]Has your character ever been in a situation that he/she had no way of overcoming on his/her own?
[ ]Did he/she give up without trying?
[ ]Did he/she give up after failing?
[ ]If he/she eventually found a way of overcoming the problem, was it extremely difficult and/or took a really long time?
[ ]Does your character ever admit to being wrong, even if he/she doesn't really mean it? I don't know.
[ ]Has your character ever ignored wrong-doings against him/herself and/or others because he/she simply didn't want to get into trouble? I don't know.
[ ]If your character is all or partially non-human, does he/she react in very non-human ways or in ways more appropriate to his/her species?
[ ]Does your character act in odd and/or awkward ways that other people find strange and confusing rather than endearing, and these people aren't called or portrayed as foolish/stupid because of it?
[ ]Do you view your characters more like tools than friends/children?
Too lazy, but the result is probably not much different than Yuko's.
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User_20392979 Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 10:59 pm
One for Kohaku (from my manga concept)
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[x] They are physically strong
[x ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ x] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ x] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ x] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ ] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[x ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[x ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[x ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[x ] They are very intelligent (I half-agree. Kohaku is pretty quick on his feet in making plans and such, but, like, book smart? I doubt it...)
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[x ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ x] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
Alright let's see here, is my dear Kohaku a marty-stu?
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Posted: Fri Feb 18, 2011 11:30 pm
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[Y] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[Y] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ ] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ] They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[Y, he kil'd em] They have lost one/both of their parents
[Y] They ran away from home
[Y] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[Y] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[Y, abused bby] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[Y, nu friend fer meh] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[Y, Older] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[Y] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[Y] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[Y] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[Y] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[Y] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[Y] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
Fix'd and he is more Madara and Orochimaru without the whole "WORLD DOMINATION K THX BAI" Madara thing...
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Yokai Orochi Revived Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Feb 19, 2011 6:37 pm
Marty Stu / Mary Sue quiz (AKA how cliche are your OCs ? xD)
Kaze
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[x] They are possessed by a demon (He doesn't talk much)
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[x] They have a rare hair/fur colour (Albino but that has to count for rare something)
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[x] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[x] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers (Yes but he ate it)
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ ] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[x] They have lost one/both of their parents
[x] They ran away from home (More of driven from)
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[x] They are very attractive to the same gender (Unfortunatly for Hayato)
[x] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[x] They look much younger/older than they really are. (If he looked his age he would resemble a zombie)
[x] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem. (Only ever as a distraction)
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[x] They have multiple personalities
[x] They are very intelligent (Generally after the point in which it would be useful)
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[x] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet (Do Yuurei and Yuuku count?)
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[x] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[x] They have a rare/unusual name (Technically Kaze is a title but his real name is rarther unsual for the era)
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[x] They are connected with a certain element (Wind/dream)
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal (Being called worm a lot doesn't really count)
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga (aparently Inuyasha O_o)
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[x] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[x] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[x] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them (Being the permenant medical condition)
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
These were the reduce points ones.
[x]Do you ever poke fun at your character's faults/weaknesses and/or use them as plot devices?
[x] Has your character ever been honestly selfish, petty, lazy, shallow, or pointlessly cruel?
[ ]Is your character really and honestly overweight/ugly/out of shape, and stays so throughout the entire story?
[x]Is your character physically disabled, and has nothing to make up for it? (To quote Dr. Merlin, anyone who says "She's so pretty that it's like a disability because everyone hates her or wants to have sex with her" will be summarily keelhauled.) (Kaze has a disease in the bone marrow which means his limbs can be snapped like toothpicks.)
[ ]Is he/she truly mentally disabled, IE, retarded, and has no powers because or despite of this?
[ ]Is your character human, 40+, and looks his/her age?
Older than 60?
[x]Does your character have a truly debilitating phobia that does not mysteriously disappear at a crucial moment? (A paralyzing fear of being touched on the eyes (After being blinded) and a fear of being alone)
[ ]Has your character ever run away from anything simply because he/she was a coward?
[ ]If your character had a bad past with his/her parents, does he/she reconcile with them at any point?
[x]Has your character ever been in a situation that he/she had no way of overcoming on his/her own?
[ ]Did he/she give up without trying?
[ ]Did he/she give up after failing?
[x]If he/she eventually found a way of overcoming the problem, was it extremely difficult and/or took a really long time? (It involved chewing off a finger so he had to recieve medical attenttion)
[x]Does your character ever admit to being wrong, even if he/she doesn't really mean it?
[ ]Has your character ever ignored wrong-doings against him/herself and/or others because he/she simply didn't want to get into trouble?
[ ]If your character is all or partially non-human, does he/she react in very non-human ways or in ways more appropriate to his/her species?
[x]Does your character act in odd and/or awkward ways that other people find strange and confusing rather than endearing, and these people aren't called or portrayed as foolish/stupid because of it? (His tendancy to talk to the recently deceased probably counts)
[ ]Do you view your characters more like tools than friends/children?
[ ] Does your character have a bad habit (smoking/drinking/drug abuse)?
Annndd total is... 12. Balanced character. heart I was worried for a moment there.
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Posted: Sun Feb 20, 2011 1:11 am
Momochi Shinsetsu heart
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ ] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[ ] They have wings
[ ] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ ] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ ] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ ] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[x] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers (I'm counting Zabuza's sword xD)
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[x] They are from a very rich/royal family (I'm messing with Haku's clan origins here 3nodding )
[x]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[x] They have lost one/both of their parents (raised by Kaku/Iru)
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[x] They never knew their parents (Yuko is a super doctor that can make babies out of anything! xD)
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ ] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[x] They are emo/cutesy (BOTH, believe it or not)
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ ] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ ] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[x] They have multiple personalities (ones ONLY for battle, but it does count)
[ ] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[ ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[ ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ ] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ ] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[ ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[x] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared (ice kekkei genki)
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[ ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ ] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ ] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though Woot! 8! heart
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
These were the reduce points ones.
[ ]Do you ever poke fun at your character's faults/weaknesses and/or use them as plot devices?
[ ] Has your character ever been honestly selfish, petty, lazy, shallow, or pointlessly cruel?
[ ]Is your character really and honestly overweight/ugly/out of shape, and stays so throughout the entire story?
[ ]Is your character physically disabled, and has nothing to make up for it? (To quote Dr. Merlin, anyone who says "She's so pretty that it's like a disability because everyone hates her or wants to have sex with her" will be summarily keelhauled.)
[ ]Is he/she truly mentally disabled, IE, retarded, and has no powers because or despite of this?
[ ]Is your character human, 40+, and looks his/her age?
Older than 60?
[ ]Does your character have a truly debilitating phobia that does not mysteriously disappear at a crucial moment?
[ ]Has your character ever run away from anything simply because he/she was a coward?
[ ]If your character had a bad past with his/her parents, does he/she reconcile with them at any point?
[ ]Has your character ever been in a situation that he/she had no way of overcoming on his/her own?
[ ]Did he/she give up without trying?
[ ]Did he/she give up after failing?
[ ]If he/she eventually found a way of overcoming the problem, was it extremely difficult and/or took a really long time?
[ ]Does your character ever admit to being wrong, even if he/she doesn't really mean it?
[ ]Has your character ever ignored wrong-doings against him/herself and/or others because he/she simply didn't want to get into trouble?
[ ]If your character is all or partially non-human, does he/she react in very non-human ways or in ways more appropriate to his/her species?
[ ]Does your character act in odd and/or awkward ways that other people find strange and confusing rather than endearing, and these people aren't called or portrayed as foolish/stupid because of it?
[ ]Do you view your characters more like tools than friends/children?
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Karuda Gensou Uchiha Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Jun 15, 2011 8:47 pm
 [Y] Their eyes are an unusual colour [Y] This happens to be red [Y] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift [Y] They have lost one/both of their parents [Y] They ran away from home [Y] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc. [Y] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death [Y] They were abused/spoiled as a child [Y] They have lots of friends/no friends [Y] They look much younger/older than they really are. [Y] They are very intelligent [Y] They have a rare/unusual name [Y] They always dress like a certain 'label' [Y] They are from a different country to where they live [Y] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear 1. Yup red eyes 2. Eyes still red 3. He can use Orochimaru's body shedding jutsu to regrow destroyed limbs 4. He killed his parents 5. Well he wasn't going to live in a house with his parents bodies 6. Dey be abusive. Dat be why he dun kil'd 'em 7. No s**t, sherlock 8. Sorta the same as 6... 9. No friends 10. Looks old due to frail body, looks a bit like Nagato, bodily health-wise. 11. Yus, sir, Character be genjutsu master, he be smart. 12. Karuda Gensou Uchiha, you be the judge. 13. Akatsuki label, thank you very much. 14. He lived in Amegakure then left for Otogakure and joined Akatsuki after that 15. Always wearing Akatsuki cloak, as well as mask (Combat exempt for mask) [Y] Has your character ever been honestly selfish, petty, lazy, shallow, or pointlessly cruel? [Y]Is your character really and honestly overweight/ugly/out of shape, and stays so throughout the entire story? [Y]Is your character human, 40+, and looks his/her age? Older than 60? [Y]Does your character have a truly debilitating phobia that does not mysteriously disappear at a crucial moment? [Y]If your character is all or partially non-human, does he/she react in very non-human ways or in ways more appropriate to his/her species? 1. All of the above 2. Pretty damn ugly 3. I'm considering how old to make Fan fic Karuda so he'll likely be very old. 4. Broken Glass, he goes to pieces when ever he is near it. 5. He is going to be even more snakelike than Kabuto and Orochimaru combined! In summation: He is very powerful but ******** ugly and a massive p***k... Madara Level, p***k!
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Posted: Thu Jun 16, 2011 4:53 am
[ ] They are possessed by an angel
[ ] They are possessed by a demon
[ ] They are a werewolf/vampire/faerie
[ X] They are physically strong
[ ] They have a rare hair/fur colour
[ ] Their eyes are an unusual colour
[ ] This happens to be red
[ ] Their eyes change colour
[...sometimes, as part of Rotto's techs? but naturally no, so i won't count this ] They have wings
[ X] They can grow extra body parts/shapeshift
[ ] They are immortal
[ ] (if a female) they have large bra size
[ X] (if a male) they are very muscular
[ X] They are very attractive to the opposite gender
[ X] They are telekinetic/pyrokinetic/etc
[ ] They have sixth sense/can mind-read/etc
[ X] They have an object of some sort that gives them powers
[ ] They have a special ability/power, but they don't know about it yet
[ ] They were bestowed/cursed with these powers
[ ] They are a healer
[ X] They are from a very rich/royal family
[ ]They don't know that they are from a very rich/royal background
[ X] They have lost one/both of their parents
[ ] They ran away from home
[ ] Their parents are cruel, uncaring, abusive etc.
[ ] They witnessed one/both of their parent's death
[ ] They are part angel/demon/faerie/some other mythical creature
[ ] They never knew their parents
[ ] They were abused/spoiled as a child
[ X] They are very attractive to the same gender
[ ] They have lots of friends/no friends
[ ] They are emo/cutesy
[ ] They look much younger/older than they really are.
[ X] They are currently in a relationship
[ ] They have lots of morals and state them a fair bit for example: 'I would rather be with my friends than with my boyfriend/girlfriend' 'Nothing matters more to me than my friends/family' 'I wouldn't hesitate to die in place of a friend' etc. It's fine if your OC has these beliefs/values, but if they constantly say them out loud/preach them to others, then we have a problem.
[ ] They have a mental disorder
[ ] They have an emotional disorder
[ X] They struggle to stay sane
[ ] They are a psycho
[ ] They have multiple personalities
[ X] They are very intelligent
[ ] They have hallucinations
[X ] They can summon spirits/demons/angels etc.
[X ] They have an unusual/unrealistic pet
[ ] They have a guardian spirit
[ X] They have a 'special type' of soul
[ ] Their soul is not the same as them
[ ] They can talk to spirits/ghosts
[ ] Some part of their body glows
[ ] They have a rare/unusual name
[ ] They were born on an important date, such as New Year's Eve, Midsummers Night, The Winter Solstace etc.
[ ] They have a twin/sibling that they were separated from at birth
[ X] They are connected with a certain element
[ ] They are connected with a certain animal
[ ] They always dress like a certain 'label'
[X Shizuo kinda lol ] They look quite a bit like a character from a popular anime/manga
[ ] They are a race/species that is discriminated against/misunderstood
[ ] They have a certain power that is misunderstood/feared
[ ] They live/lived on the streets at some point in their lives
[X ] They are hiding from someone/something
[ ] They have a rare blood type
[ ] They cry blood
[ ] Certain noises/smells/situations/etc make their powers activate/give them a nervous breakdown
[ X] They are from a different country to where they live
[ ] They are very mysterious/dark
[ ] They are very lively/happy
[ ] Their mood changes a lot/very quickly
[ ] They are very patient
[ X] They are from a long line of rich people
[ ] They have a piece of jewelry/clothing that they always wear
[ ] They have amnesia
[ ] They have some sort of permanent medical condition
[ ] They have a curse upon them
[ ] They are involved in some sort of prophecy
[ ] They are 'the chosen one'
[ ] They have insomnia
<5 -Anti-Sue
Your character may be a bit on the boring side. Of course, this does depend, but generally if they are scoring that low, it wouldn't hurt to 'spice them up' a bit ^^
6-15 -Balanced Character
If your OC scored around here, then they are probably quite a well-balanced and interesting character. Those scoring in the higher end of this category may be a bit too much though
16-25 -Borderline Mary-Sue
We have a problem. You need to tone your character down. They are most likely a bit annoying to others, too.
These were the reduce points ones.
[ X]Do you ever poke fun at your character's faults/weaknesses and/or use them as plot devices?
[ X] Has your character ever been honestly selfish, petty, lazy, shallow, or pointlessly cruel?
[ ]Is your character really and honestly overweight/ugly/out of shape, and stays so throughout the entire story?
[ ]Is your character physically disabled, and has nothing to make up for it? (To quote Dr. Merlin, anyone who says "She's so pretty that it's like a disability because everyone hates her or wants to have sex with her" will be summarily keelhauled.)
[ ]Is he/she truly mentally disabled, IE, retarded, and has no powers because or despite of this?
[ ]Is your character human, 40+, and looks his/her age?
Older than 60?
[ ]Does your character have a truly debilitating phobia that does not mysteriously disappear at a crucial moment?
[ ]Has your character ever run away from anything simply because he/she was a coward?
[ ]If your character had a bad past with his/her parents, does he/she reconcile with them at any point?
[ ]Has your character ever been in a situation that he/she had no way of overcoming on his/her own?
[ ]Did he/she give up without trying?
[ ]Did he/she give up after failing?
[ ]If he/she eventually found a way of overcoming the problem, was it extremely difficult and/or took a really long time?
[X ]Does your character ever admit to being wrong, even if he/she doesn't really mean it?
[X ]Has your character ever ignored wrong-doings against him/herself and/or others because he/she simply didn't want to get into trouble?
[ ]If your character is all or partially non-human, does he/she react in very non-human ways or in ways more appropriate to his/her species?
[ X]Does your character act in odd and/or awkward ways that other people find strange and confusing rather than endearing, and these people aren't called or portrayed as foolish/stupid because of it?
[ ]Do you view your characters more like tools than friends/children?
15 Points for Shane lol
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The Wild Hunt Vice Captain
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