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Emmerah
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PostPosted: Thu Feb 03, 2011 2:30 am


Wrote this version of this back in year 7 and recently re-discovered it sweatdrop Enjoy and please comment 3nodding



I close my eyes for a second
I turn my back on this cold world
and close my heart to your smile

And suddenly I'm slipping
Suddenly I'm over the edge
and suddenly I'm falling away

My heart stops beating for a second
I reach my hand out to grasp yours
But then I let go

And suddenly I'm slipping
Suddenly I'm over the edge
and suddenly I'm falling away

I hear you scream for a second
I feel the wind against my skin
I see the fear on your face

Do we realise things too late
To make a difference in this lifetime
We all realise it too late
And suddenly

Oh suddenly we're slipping
Suddenly we're over the edge
Suddenly we're falling apart

Everything around me goes dark
The last thing I remember is your face
I hear you calling out my name

And oh suddenly I'm failing
Suddenly I'm over the edge
And suddenly I'm slipping away

I hear music in the distance
I take a breath and let it go
I feel my heart slow down

And suddenly I'm slipping
Away
PostPosted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 9:58 am


Ooh. Very chilling. I swear if I looked at my back I would see it shivering. This is very good, a bit choppy, but I really like the message. In the tenth stanza you have failing instead of falling, and I am not sure if you wanted to do that on purpose. If you did I get it, if you didn't I thought I should point it out.

I can really get the way this would be put to music! I really like the way this flows, and think that you did some good work on this. I love reading what you write!

EstoPerpetua
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Emmerah
Crew

PostPosted: Sun Feb 06, 2011 12:58 pm


EstoPerpetua
Ooh. Very chilling. I swear if I looked at my back I would see it shivering. This is very good, a bit choppy, but I really like the message. In the tenth stanza you have failing instead of falling, and I am not sure if you wanted to do that on purpose. If you did I get it, if you didn't I thought I should point it out.

I can really get the way this would be put to music! I really like the way this flows, and think that you did some good work on this. I love reading what you write!


Ah, thanks for commenting! 3nodding

The failing in the tenth stanza is indeed intentional - I thought it made more sense than falling in that case xd
PostPosted: Mon Feb 07, 2011 4:40 pm


I see, I see. Duely noted. Good work!

EstoPerpetua
Vice Captain

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