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 Posted: Sat Jan 29, 2011 9:18 am
I've been writing for some time, but not many people tell me if my poems are any good. I know it is sad, but could you please give me your opinion?
Here goes!
"Death of The Worthless"
I am alone,
Alone for so long.
I’ve cried many tears
For what I have lost.
I have failed you all.
I am worth nothing.
Those worth nothing
Shall die for nothing.
So kill me.
Pick up a stone
And pound my face in
Make me bleed, my love-
Make me bleed until I’m dead!
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Posted: Sun Apr 15, 2012 7:45 am
It's not bad, but you may want to make up some more original phrases. Be more poetic and use some cool figurative language. Keep working and it'll be excellent. ^w^
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