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 Posted: Thu Nov 25, 2010 4:49 pm
Race Application Information This was extracted from the Planetary application. It is designed for creating JUST a class of species. I forgot to mention, but you need to let us know what planet they are from and how long they have been there. Again, please send this application to the respective person in charge, personally, since IIII created the application, I would be the best bet. If you have questions concerning this information, don't hesitate to PM me or talk to me through other methods. ● Civilized Species Planetary Location:Where does this species originate. How long has it been there? ● Civilized Species Identification:What is the name of the most ingenious species? Meaning, the ones with civilized qualities, not animals and plants. You can have more than one, but not more than four.● Civilized Species Life Expectancy:How long do these creatures live to be in years?● Civilized Species Appearance:What does your species look like? ● Civilized Species Dress Code:What are typical clothing styles for your planet?● Civilized Species Genders:Does your species have Men, women and children> Or something else?● Civilized Species Hierarchy:Do they follow Parliament, a Senate, a King and Queen, a Tribe Leader, a Shaman? What? Name it here. ● Civilized Species Religion:Do they follow a religion of some kind?● Civilized Species Language:What language to they speak and what does it sound like?● Civilized Species Racial Traits:Such as, the Chiss have red eyes and blue skin, that allow them to see perfectly in the dark, what traits does your species give to its people?● Civilized Species Customs:Such as removing your shoes before entering one's home.● Civilized Species Military:Do they have a military? What is it called? What does it entail?● Force Sensitives:Is this species capable of using the force? If so which way to the lean, the Force or the Dark Side?● Civilized Species Technology:What is the level of technological advancement on this planet? What sorts of technology do they have? Can they space travel? Do they have great medical coverage? Stuff of that nature● Civilized Species Housing:What do they live in? Is it a mud hut, house, massive city skyscraper?● Civilized Species Enemies and Allies:Aside from enemies and allies on the planet they live, do they have them on other planets with other species? List them here and the level of hostility they prove. Example (High, Medium, Low) If they are friendly, what kind of treaty do you have with them?----------------------------------------------------- ● [b]Civilized Species Planetary Location:[/b]
[size=10]Where does this species originate. How long has it been there? [/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Identification:[/b]
[size=10]What is the name of the most ingenious species? Meaning, the ones with civilized qualities, not animals and plants. You can have more than one, but not more than four.[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Life Expectancy:[/b]
[size=10]How long do these creatures live to be in years?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Appearance:[/b]
[size=10]What does your species look like? [/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Dress Code:[/b]
[size=10]What are typical clothing styles for your planet?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Genders:[/b]
[size=10]Does your species have Men, women and children> Or something else?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Hierarchy:[/b]
[size=10]Do they follow Parliament, a Senate, a King and Queen, a Tribe Leader, a Shaman? What? Name it here. [/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Religion:[/b]
[size=10]Do they follow a religion of some kind?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Language:[/b]
[size=10]What language to they speak and what does it sound like?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Racial Traits:[/b]
[size=10]Such as, the Chiss have red eyes and blue skin, that allow them to see perfectly in the dark, what traits does your species give to its people?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Customs:[/b]
[size=10]Such as removing your shoes before entering one's home.[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Military:[/b]
[size=10]Do they have a military? What is it called? What does it entail?[/size]
● [b]Force Sensitives:[/b]
[size=10]Is this species capable of using the force? If so which way to the lean, the Force or the Dark Side?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Technology:[/b]
[size=10]What is the level of technological advancement on this planet? What sorts of technology do they have? Can they space travel? Do they have great medical coverage? Stuff of that nature[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Housing:[/b]
[size=10]What do they live in? Is it a mud hut, house, massive city skyscraper?[/size]
● [b]Civilized Species Enemies and Allies:[/b]
[size=10]Aside from enemies and allies on the planet they live, do they have them on other planets with other species? List them here and the level of hostility they prove. Example (High, Medium, Low) If they are friendly, what kind of treaty do you have with them?[/size]
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Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2011 1:53 am
● Civilized Species Planetary Location:Aesangard, Malacite System, Omega Quadrant, Outer Rim● Civilized Species Identification:Aesaneko● Civilized Species Life Expectancy:Aesaneko do not possess any gene that allows death by old age, and are essentially immortal chronologically. There are rumors of Aesaneko who are as old as 93,000 Years Old.● Civilized Species Appearance:The Aesaneko appear as regular humans, however there is several markable differences. For one, instead of possessing normal human ears, they possess cat-like ears on the top of their heads, which blend into their hair and the fur on such ears are normally the same colour as their other hair. They also appear eternally young and with an elfin-appearance to them, not seeming older than a teenager until well into their 30th Century of life. They possess a tail, primarily for balance, and it is cat-like in structure and appearance, designed for balance when climbing.● Civilized Species Dress Code:Aesaneko commonly wear Japanese-style clothing, mainly kimonos, and mostly of blue and green hues as well as white and black. ● Civilized Species Genders:Men, Woman, Children.
In the culture of the Aesaneko, an Aesaneko is not a Adult until they have reached around 3,500 years of age, and until then, they are considered a child.● Civilized Species Hierarchy:King and Queen for the ultimate level of government but Tribal Leaders for local government, as there is more like tribes of Aesaneko than nations, but each tribe is loyal to the King and Queen of Aesangard. ● Civilized Species Religion:The Aesaneko do not possess a specific religion, or really one at all.● Civilized Species Language:Aesaniri (A dialect unique to the Aesaneko which is very similar to Japanese), Basic● Civilized Species Racial Traits:As the Aesaneko possess cat-like ears, they have extremely sensitive hearing, capable of hearing the flutter of butterfly-wings. Also, they have a strange healing ability that allows them to generate an healing aura from their body and use it on another or themselves to rapidly heal without causing cellular or genetic damage, and this kind of healing is very effective, capable of healing even life-threatening wounds that would have killed someones in milliseconds. However this ability drains their own stamina in order to utilise properly, and it is not uncommon for an Aesaneko to fall into a coma after healing an extremely severe wound. Their bodies are weak, more suited to performing acrobatic moves and running than actual hand to hand or weapon-based combat, however they have small claws they can extend from their fingernails to use as a weapon. As such, Aesaneko aren't very good fighters, but can outpace and outjump their opponent provided there is enough trees around.● Civilized Species Customs:- "Do not interfere with someone else's love for another, not even if it detests you" (Essentially means, if you don't like someone's romantic relationship with someone, don't voice your opinion or try and ruin that person's chance for love, even among homosexual Aesaneko)
- "Remove Shoes before entering the abode of another Aesaneko"● Civilized Species Military:The Aesaneko are typically passive and neutral, and as such only possess planet-based forces, never any space-based military forces.● Force Sensitives:Aesaneko are extremely force sensitive, very much so that they can even detect other force sensitive beings with pinpoint accuracy.● Civilized Species Technology:Aesaneko are extremely advanced, more advanced than most of the galaxy, possessing Tachyon technology, and Zero-Point Energy Generation technology.● Civilized Species Housing:Houses made out of stone or dura-metal for the most part, silicon-based plastics are not shied from either, however carbon-based materials typically are due to their high flammability.● Civilized Species Enemies and Allies:
Jedi Order ~ Allies
Sith Order ~ Enemies, High Threat
Slave Traders ~ Enemies, Extremely High Threat. ~ Slave Traders from other worlds often raid Aesangard to capture young pre-teen and teenage Aesaneko and sell them into slavery, where they are often used as sex slaves, and it is mostly the males who are captured.
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Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2011 12:53 pm
I haven't looked at it all, as I'll have Skitz do it, but I will start with this. Dimensional Storage? No, my Rhom'Gar have that technology already. Their age I would say no to, but I'll see what she says first. Your ears, being that sensitive, would bleed if someone whispered to you from a hundred feet away, so no way in hell am I allowing you to hear something from kilometers away. Your powers for your race need a balance. My Garta can easily catch on fire, and are giant lightning rods, but this gives them the power to shoot lightning from their bodies. Their hearing is intense, which means they have to be careful or they'll damage their hearing. Same with their scent powers. Balance.
That's all I'm saying for now. I will have Skitz look over it, as I'm sure she'll know more things about this than I do.
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Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2011 3:12 pm
Alrighty now. Adjustments need to be made SEVERLY, if you wish this race to see the inside of this guild.
1. Aesangard, sounds a lot like Isangard. Like.. from Lord of the Rings. Too much in fact that it seems like copyright infringement. Perhaps if you explain how it is spoken, and it DOESN'T sound like a rip off. I will allow it.
2. What is with the cat people? I mean, you even called the people Nekos, but honestly, they don't seem any different from typical Manga Cat people. Like, no originality. The point of this was the create an entirely NEW race. I mean, if they had invisible skin, or could shoot lazer beams out of their asses, I would have been like, awesome. But this just kinda seems like a remake. I would like to see some more originality put into the whole cat people thing.
3. Lanny is right about the aging thing. Not a creature in the world posses a gene that forces them to die. It is the rapid deteriorating of said genes and cells that cause the body to decay at a slow pace. If you reduced the age to something more reasonable. Well, honestly, specified an actual death age. I will accept long life. Perhaps research a way where one could appear immortal using proper genetics. If they are basically human with cat ears, it will be fairly easy.
4. I am all cool with wearing Japanese stuff. But could you specify what the Neko's who do acrobatic stuff wear? It's impossible to flip, run and jump in a Kimono. I know. I have worn one, and there is not much room to roam around in. It seems... impossible unless you are more specific.
5. Bodily weakness is far different from what you are trying to specify. If they are acrobats, they are in peak physical condition. Their muscles are toned, strengthened and provide more oxygen to certain muscles to ascertain longevity, such as in the legs where one would need to be more limber. If you mean that they are not strong attackers, you will have to change "Bodily Weakness," to something more precise to that notion.
6. You have to choose. Do you want your creatures to be extreme force senstives, or have great, far surpassing tecnhology? I am not allowing both. The Dr. Alhazred, a new character being created for the Sith is so smart in fact it's just plain scary. However, I did not allow him to use the force because of this. He is proficient in weaponry because he is so smart. But having both is God Modding. So you need to choose what you want more. Force using experts, or technology experts. There is nothing wrong with using the force and being smart, but more advanced than most of the galaxy? Not even.
7. If you choose to use technology over force sensitivity, I will not allow that their planet is raided and their people abducted only to become sex slaves. A genius? Are you serious? What genius gets abducted and cannot postulate an escape route? Or perhaps build perfect defense systems surrounding their planet to ensure their people do not get abducted? I feel as though the part about being best in the galaxy did not have enough thought put into it.
If you are willing to fix those things. I will reevaluate your profile and accept it then. But not before. For now, it is denied.
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Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2011 3:32 pm
..s.k.i.t.t.l.e.s.. Alrighty now. Adjustments need to be made SEVERLY, if you wish this race to see the inside of this guild.
1. Aesangard, sounds a lot like Isangard. Like.. from Lord of the Rings. Too much in fact that it seems like copyright infringement. Perhaps if you explain how it is spoken, and it DOESN'T sound like a rip off. I will allow it.
2. What is with the cat people? I mean, you even called the people Nekos, but honestly, they don't seem any different from typical Manga Cat people. Like, no originality. The point of this was the create an entirely NEW race. I mean, if they had invisible skin, or could shoot lazer beams out of their asses, I would have been like, awesome. But this just kinda seems like a remake. I would like to see some more originality put into the whole cat people thing.
3. Lanny is right about the aging thing. Not a creature in the world posses a gene that forces them to die. It is the rapid deteriorating of said genes and cells that cause the body to decay at a slow pace. If you reduced the age to something more reasonable. Well, honestly, specified an actual death age. I will accept long life. Perhaps research a way where one could appear immortal using proper genetics. If they are basically human with cat ears, it will be fairly easy.
4. I am all cool with wearing Japanese stuff. But could you specify what the Neko's who do acrobatic stuff wear? It's impossible to flip, run and jump in a Kimono. I know. I have worn one, and there is not much room to roam around in. It seems... impossible unless you are more specific.
5. Bodily weakness is far different from what you are trying to specify. If they are acrobats, they are in peak physical condition. Their muscles are toned, strengthened and provide more oxygen to certain muscles to ascertain longevity, such as in the legs where one would need to be more limber. If you mean that they are not strong attackers, you will have to change "Bodily Weakness," to something more precise to that notion.
6. You have to choose. Do you want your creatures to be extreme force senstives, or have great, far surpassing tecnhology? I am not allowing both. The Dr. Alhazred, a new character being created for the Sith is so smart in fact it's just plain scary. However, I did not allow him to use the force because of this. He is proficient in weaponry because he is so smart. But having both is God Modding. So you need to choose what you want more. Force using experts, or technology experts. There is nothing wrong with using the force and being smart, but more advanced than most of the galaxy? Not even.
7. If you choose to use technology over force sensitivity, I will not allow that their planet is raided and their people abducted only to become sex slaves. A genius? Are you serious? What genius gets abducted and cannot postulate an escape route? Or perhaps build perfect defense systems surrounding their planet to ensure their people do not get abducted? I feel as though the part about being best in the galaxy did not have enough thought put into it.
If you are willing to fix those things. I will reevaluate your profile and accept it then. But not before. For now, it is denied. ~~~~~Dark Crystarium~~~~~
1). Eh-san-gar-d
2) I was basing them off of Lanfaer's Ijutsu race from another RP guild he and I were in who had acrobatic ability and healing powers.
3) That is where you are wrong, there is a creature in real life that doesn't possess a death gene, it is called a Hydra and it is a real plant/creature
4) I'll fix that, I was thinking more like cloth form-fitting garb, like a leather suit but more like cloth, making it easier to move.
5) Acrobats are not physically strong in terms of physical strength such as having a punch that could easily knock someone out just by punching them in the fact, it would be terribly weak.
6) I'll go with the force sensitives. I'd have to fix a lot of this, I just did the basic things. Go for a totally new dynamic other than based on Lanfaer's Ijutsu (the elfin appearance was based on Lan's Sahou or however you spell it. D: )
~~~~~Dark Crystarium~~~~~
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Posted: Thu Jan 13, 2011 3:38 pm
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