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Posted: Wed Nov 24, 2010 12:06 pm
Here, I can teach you how to better yourself at Role-Playing. I have been actively Role-Playing for the past 3 years and I can give you this advice. Learn from others as best as you can. Don't rely on yourself to improve. Learn from those who are better than you. You will improve great deals and at a much more rapid pace. If you wish to get my help, then please send me a PM and I will teach you what I know.
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Posted: Thu Nov 25, 2010 8:47 pm
I am also opening my door to anyone who wants a second person giving them some help. After role playing for over 5 years it's easy to help someone improve. I specialize in making creative characters and plot devices.
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Kasumi Miyagi Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 7:36 pm
To Ms. Miyagi excuse me miss but i was wondering what you thought about my bio
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 7:37 pm
kine012 To Ms. Miyagi excuse me miss but i was wondering what you thought about my bio Allow me to look at it and I will reply back to you.
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Kasumi Miyagi Vice Captain
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Kasumi Miyagi Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 7:51 pm
To kine012: Here is the Bio I found:
"Bio: Lite is a dark spawn created from a large group of demon lords that tried to bring the devil into the world by putting its soul in a human. they were demons so it came as a dark spawn. they let the dark spawn live amongst humans and he was named Lite. Lite became a great man and also learned of what he was so he found a way to live forever to make sure the devil with in him stayed in him. he found the weapon "Devil's Sunrise". he hunted down the demons and went through many adventures, he has conquered nations, slain kings, and even was the reason of some religions. Lite has jumped planet to planet, dimension to dimension in search of his demon "parents" to hunt and kill them all. since he has lived for a long time he has taken the time to learn and study every fighting style he comes across, he has learned so many that he is developing his own to defeat all the rest, but he trys to make people believe he is weak so he can keep his power a secret. he gained the devils two brothers in him as well. he created two brothers for himself to carry the other two demons. and also made three more allies that were the only people who could stand against them and not die. now he has come here to hunt another demon. Lites the kind of guy who makes people say "oh s**t, how did he do that"
I found your bio to be a bit confusing. Might I suggest this edit:
Bio: He was created from the attempt of a large group of demon lords to bring the devil into the world through using a human vessel. This resulted in the creation of a Dark Spawn. He lived among the human as the group allowed and was named Lite. He became a great man who also discovered his true origin, resulting in his eternal life to hold the devil inside of him. He eventually found a weapon called the "Devil's Sunrise" and hunted down many demons on different vast adventures. He has conquered many nations, slain kings, and even inspired some religions. He traveled between different planets, dimensions, and such to find his demon parents, hoping to hunt down and kill them all. His long life has given him time to learn and study every fighting style he has come across as well as developing his own style to conquer the unknown he may face in the future. He has decided to make people believe he is weak so he can mask his true abilities and power. He has gained the two brothers of the devils into his vessel to host them as well. He had created them along with three other allies that could stand against the two brothers and not perish. Now, his current mission is to hunt down another demon in the Kingdom by the River. He also is the kind of guy who amazes and baffles people with his amazing feats.
I do expect that as a character he does have some human flaws and weaknesses. We try and keep characters from being vastly overpowered to prevent unfair role plays and frustrations. Any further comments or questions?
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 7:58 pm
wow....it looks so...intelligent. i expected you to point out flaws and tell me ways to correct them but wow this is great. blaugh weaknessess? i didn't know i was suppost to list them. well they are slow adaption to extreme climate changes and of course a weakness to hurting women. wink would be okay if i used that improved bio? it looks so nice whee
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Kasumi Miyagi Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 8:09 pm
kine012 wow....it looks so...intelligent. i expected you to point out flaws and tell me ways to correct them but wow this is great. blaugh weaknessess? i didn't know i was suppost to list them. well they are slow adaption to extreme climate changes and of course a weakness to hurting women. wink would be okay if i used that improved bio? it looks so nice whee You may use it. I'm in my 4h year of college and have to write papers quite frequently. It's hard not to sound a bit fancy sometimes blaugh You don't have to list the weaknesses, but just keep in mind that you will need to hold true to them. No one wants to rp with a mary-sue character *coughs* Jaden Yuki *coughs*
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 8:12 pm
haha, okay thanks miss college
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Kasumi Miyagi Vice Captain
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Posted: Sun Jan 02, 2011 8:13 pm
kine012 haha, okay thanks miss college No problem, and Kasumi-sama is my preferred title rofl
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