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Present Day:

I could hear the smallest of sounds. The trees blew slightly in the light breeze, a bird chirped outside my window, the dew on the grass dripped lightly to the ground, and my breathing slowed and lightened meaning sleep. It would be the first time I had actually fallen asleep without taking anything for it. The thought was ruined minutes later.
“Kara, are you awake?”
I sighed and rolled over to face my door. It was still dark out. The morning was only starting. “What’s up little man?”
“I can’t sleep.”
I nodded in an understanding way. I made room on the small bed and patted a spot next to me. “Come here then and I’ll tell you a story.”
The younger boy nodded and rushed to my side. He crawled in under the blankets and looked up at me expectantly. “What about this time?”



The doctors of the hospital watched the girl carefully. Her wounds were so bad. They were sure she wouldn’t recover. Her vitals seemed fine but she wasn’t responding to any treatment. A man with pale blonde hair watched her with hungry eyes. A ring was on his left ring finger signifying marriage.
“We don’t think she is going to wake up anytime soon. The trauma to her body is to huge.” A younger doctor commented bowing respectfully to the man. “I don’t know if we can wake her.”
The blonde man nodded and stood straight. His back muscles were strong and his arms were scarred. He looked like he was in physical pain all the time. “She will be okay.”
“Sir, your wife was in a wreck that went through her body. There is no way-”
The blonde shot the doctor a dark look. His eyes flashed red for only a second. “She is not my wife. She will be fine so listen to me okay?”



“What do you want it to be about this time, Jean?” I whispered smiling. I could feel them all watching me. They wanted me. “How about my journey?”
Jean looked at me with his pale blue eyes. They were so beautiful. “What do you mean, Kara? Aren’t you still on your journey?”
I smiled ever so gently and pulled him close. I could smell the familiar smells of forest, sweat, and blood. He was not here with me. They were watching me. I was not there though. How could that be?
“Your journey, Kara?”
I kissed the top of his head and sighed. “I don’t remember it anymore. I was hurt wasn’t I?”
The boy nodded and stood from the bed. He held his hand down to me smiling. “It’s time to go home.”



The blonde man went inside the small room. It was all white. There was a single chair but no one was in it. Her red hair spilled over the bed like it had when she slept as a child. How many years ago was that? He couldn’t remember anymore. He took her hand and sighed.
“Isn’t it time for you to wake up and stop worrying everyone? This is ridiculous, Kid.”
There was no movement only her light breathing. Her left arm was wrapped, the leg caste, and there were multiple cuts and scars along her face. She had been hit. He closed his eyes and sat down next to her bed.
“I am sorry we left you.”

I heard my name. I could feel him next to me again. Where was I? Jean was looking at me confused and I cried. I couldn’t go yet. “My journey is not done yet.”
He frowned and his hand dropped. That is all I remember.

It's good, and it would only really be confusing if you don't finish it out, as in tie everything into the story. I got it because I read the entire thing. And story wise it is good, as you were right you need to fix a little grammar but other than that it's really nice. And sorry if you aren't looking for a reply anymore. It's been a while since I've been on lol.