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Meroko_The_Fallen_Angel

PostPosted: Mon Oct 18, 2010 4:17 pm


Starting Over


I stand there
drowning in the black pool.
I cry out but no one hears.
I reach out but no one takes my hand.
I drown in the pool of my death.

But a light appears
filling me up with love
encasing me in warmth.
It pulls me out of that deep and decrypiting pool
and cradles me like a new born child
for which is what I am.

I am born again
but replaced back into this world of sin
but I know I'm not alone no more.
I have some who can help me
guide me
back to the light
back to where I belong.
Others are there as well
welcoming in their arms
as well as His.

I am filled
with the hope
of a new day
a new beginning
by starting over again.
A shepard will light my way
as my new day begins.
PostPosted: Tue Oct 19, 2010 6:28 pm


Really good but I think there are a few typos...

Quote:
but I know I'm not alone no more.
is a double negative...

Quote:
I have some who can help me
Someone?

Overall I liked it smile

Aki_Taka_Ryuu


Hislilyflower

PostPosted: Tue Oct 19, 2010 10:49 pm


awesome job! heart
PostPosted: Wed Oct 20, 2010 7:02 pm


thxs but ryuu, i want the poem to be like that smile

Meroko_The_Fallen_Angel


Aki_Taka_Ryuu

PostPosted: Wed Oct 20, 2010 7:10 pm


Ok, I just know that I type fast sometimes and my mind gets ahead of my fingers so I make typos so I was just checking...
PostPosted: Thu Oct 21, 2010 7:19 pm


its okay. your forgivens 3nodding

Meroko_The_Fallen_Angel

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