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Last Chapter of a Book I'm writing...Only a rough sketch

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Crystalbow
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PostPosted: Thu Sep 09, 2010 6:21 pm


This will most likely change, but I've plotted out the ending and have decided to write a rough draft of it now while I'm in the right mood. This will most likely be the shortest chapter in the book. I may or may not add an epilogue.

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My life had ended so quickly, with a brief burst of bone-splitting agony. Now I watched as they collected my body, broken and bleeding, my stormy eyes still half open and blank. Sadie fought them as best as she could, screaming, tears soaking the ground. She screamed my name over and over again, half sobbing. First, she lost Derek...And now me. She shrieked at the top of her lungs, unable to accept that I had died. Her captors, my murderers, swiftly gagged her and left her tears to leave clean streaks on her dirty face. Cameron began to shake, his face paling until he looked almost blue, and tears welling up in his beautiful green eyes. I felt a deep yearning emerge in me as I saw him silently suffering from watching me die. If I could have cried, I would have.

"Kill them both." My eyes widened at the sound of the commanding officer's order. They can't join me. Panic swelled in me, a strange feeling overcoming my heart. I don't want them to join me.

I don't want them to die.
PostPosted: Sat Sep 11, 2010 7:51 am


I think you should not add an epilogue and leave it roughly the way it is. A great emotional segment like this is great for an ending!

EstoPerpetua
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