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 Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:39 pm
[[ Edited . ]] Appearance: 
Username: II Cisara II
Character Name: Namonai
Age: 13
Gender: Female
Race: Shinigami
Height: 4''3
Weight: 68lbs
Eye Color: Blackish gray.
Hair Color White with different colored streaks.
Hair Style: Small pig tails.
Markings/Tattoos: Two black dots under her eyes.
Personality: Quiet and caring
History: Namonai was very quiet, it is very rare that you can even hear her voice at all. She was at the top of her class, but that didn't help her social skills at all. When it was the final year at the academy she decided to join squad twelve, since she was better at research than wanting to fight.
Likes: Books, quiet, praticing when no one is looking
Dislikes: To much noise, to many people talking to her at once, people watching her do things when they think she can't see them.
Other: N/A
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Division: 12
Rank: Lieutenant
Zanpaku-tô Name: Tsumibito Mitsukai
Description and/or Appearance: Tsumibito has a white blade and a black hilt.
Zanpaku-tô Spirit: 
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Shikai 1:
Shikai Release Incantation: May death's prayer reach you, Tsumibito Mitsukai!
Shikai Description: Its the same as its orginal state, but there is another white blade at the bottom of the hilt.
Shikai Ability:
Fukyuu Ankoku - Anything within a distance from Namonai is sucked into her own warp of darkness.
((i.e there is nothing there but her and her enemy, you can still see her.))
Shikyo - It makes Namonai's flash step two times as faster, but only for a set amount of time. (fifteen minutes.)
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:48 pm
please redo the shikai abilities. The Darkness thing is god moding, and the other power makes no sense
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Matsuo The Death Dealer Captain
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:54 pm
Yeah, uh...quick question before I change anything.
How is the darkness God Modding? Yeah, I understand it might render people's sight useless to a point, but the could always sense Namonai's spiritual pressure.
And about the second one, basicly what im saying is that if she uses that attack on some one with a high ranking status it slows down their ability to use their Kido real fast. And if its not a high ranking person it just blasts them backward. But I could just re-write it like that, if thats ok.
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 4:58 pm
because you are messing with one of the five senses...... i consider that god moding
as for the other one that goes against bleach logic and guarantees something...... its just a way for you to try and cripple higher ranks so you can fight them. I dont like it, change it. Since you are a shinigami you can talk to Aya about this but i think she will say the same thing as i have
i dont mean to sound mean but i dont want god moding of any kind. ((or at least what i consider god moding))
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Matsuo The Death Dealer Captain
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:06 pm
why not just make it so the darkness ability goes out 30 ft rather then sucks her opponents in, getting out would be easy, but it still leaves her unseeable, and technically it's not messing with the senses, it's just turning everything around the person into darkness (tho I could have read it wrong)
and as for the 2nd ability, that is a little god modish, anything that allows you to control or alter something on your opponent (in a general sense) is technically a god mod
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:06 pm
You can still see her, but not anything else, and to me that really doesn't sound that bad because your focusing on her and not whats around you anyway so I could just say that it puts them into Namonai's own warp of space, i.e there is nothing around her and the person she is fighting with, so its just the two of them.
I can change the second one because I was having a power thinking block so I can think of something else. Oh, and it doesn't really cripple them because people of high ranks rarely even use Kido that much anyway, or at least alot of them.
And I know your not trying to be mean but fair, all im asking is that give some people a chance on somethings because what may seem like god moding to you may not look like god moding to other people.
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Matsuo The Death Dealer Captain
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:24 pm
hmm a dome of darkness? like it shuts out all light within a 30 feet radius? is that what you are talking about? Because i was under the impression you were basically blind within the thirty feet.
but anyway you can find ways around stuff. Shutting off light within a 30 foot radius is fair to me. That does not mess with the eyes ((like the function of the eyes. not going completely blind XD))
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:24 pm
well the first ability sounds fine then truth be told (tho it sounds more like a bankai ability).
I stand by what I said about the second, tho it's not as bad as we seem to be over exaggerating it to be.
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Posted: Sat Sep 04, 2010 5:29 pm
Yeah Matsuo, thats what I originally meant. rofl
Sorry I didn't make it more clear when I first posted it.
And I changed the second one anyway so their is no need to worry about that. ^ ^
= w =
man...why don't I always post like that... xd
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Posted: Sun Sep 12, 2010 1:30 am
o.o Waittt is there even a captian for division 12 >.> lol I dont even remember x3
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Posted: Thu Sep 23, 2010 2:39 pm
Does it really matter though? I mean, as long as its active it should be ok. I think...
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Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 8:06 pm
Can I rp now...?
OH, and also(im not chaning anything but im just gonna tell you Matsuo) is Tosen god modding? Because his Bankai renders ALL of the senses useless except for touch~!
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Matsuo The Death Dealer Captain
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Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 8:33 pm
yes he is and go ahead and rp..... this guild died anyway crying but ima go and romance rp now since I need a good change of pace in my roleplaying....... because im getting bored of bleach rp so ima take a break
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Posted: Sat Oct 02, 2010 9:13 pm
I will save it, next week end.
It is on my list of things to do, shsh. I have a lot to do.
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Posted: Sun Oct 03, 2010 10:16 am
LOL but he dies so it isn't much of a god mod.
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