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 Posted: Mon Aug 23, 2010 3:56 am
otay.... me with my random words on paper managed to come up with the following mess. . . one of this lines is still missing the second half, if anyone finds it please do return it accordingly (in other words.. SUGGESTIONS!!!!!!!) gonk *ahem* aanyways, here it is. . . also.. flames are welcome... as long as you tell me whats actually wrong with it? and how to fix it!!!!
Little Miss
Well look at me, little miss stuffed up in the head
Just let me be, to keep doing things i regret.
You forgot to dig, Deeper into this emotional wreck
My problem aint big, just tell more lies to forget.
Is it really that bad, I only wanted to live
You've all been had, by a sadistic little witch
But oh it's so sad, for this lonely wish
Aren't we all mad, I've dug too deep into this ditch
Play in the mud, so i can make friends
Friendships a dud, warped broken and bent
Little miss fake, too much hurt to mend
Too much at stake, to keep playing pretend
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Posted: Fri Apr 01, 2011 6:23 am
Very interesting! I think if you broke the lines up a bit more it'd flow nicer though. ^_^
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