edit: here's after some critique from Senti http://i33.tinypic.com/ojfdbo.jpg
edit2: After further critique

I'm working on this for a contest and I want it to be gooooood because I would like to place so I can get more exposure on my DA and be able to actually get RL commissions and sell prints and such.
So I really need critique.
Yeah I know my sketches are way dark and erasing will be a b***h. xD
Also ignore the eraser bits, I rushed this into the scanner without brushing the eraser bits off. xD;;;
