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praise me (poem in God's point of view)

kadaj_hot
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Posted: Sat Jul 24, 2010 5:40 pm

Praise Me

praise me when you're sad
praise me when you're happy
praise me when people are around
praise me when you're alone
praise me for making the world
praise me for making you're friends
praise me for making you're enemies
praise me in the day
praise me in the night
praise me in light
praise me in death

Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 12:31 am

this is great!!! praise to the lord!!!

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Scarlet_Teardrops

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Posted: Tue Aug 03, 2010 2:02 pm

Mmm...
This poem was lovely.

You need to differentiate between contractions and ownership.

Praise me when you're happy.

You're is a contraction of the words "you" and "are". If you use the word "your", it's basically talking about you owning the happy. That doesn't make much sense.

I know what you meant. So just fix it up. You're.

you're sad
you're happy
you're alone

Friends is fine.
Make sure you spell enemies with an e.

^_^

Posted: Wed Aug 04, 2010 3:58 am

AMEN!AMEN1AMEN! biggrin heart biggrin Peace and Blessings

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