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PostPosted: Mon Jun 21, 2010 12:59 pm


Red cuts on her arm sit strong until he comes. He smiles and kisses them making everything okay. The tears white and happy he is here. she can't hurt and he holds her close. Only as a friend they are nothing more. Best friends.

Screams, yells, her mind clouds and it turns dark. A confusion is here and the mind can't handle it. She wants to scream and run but can't without him. He is helping, trying to help.

He smiles and makes the pain and tears go away. A depressed girl blessed with an angel, her own guardian angel. They sit in the snow, the whiteness for hours on end. they watch the world pass and hope that they one day can be good.

A gun shot makes the snow turn crimson. It bleeds for him now because he bleeds for her. A sad girl screams loud, lights of blue and red surround them. Nothing sounds right in her head and the red cuts bleed.

They laugh and play games. Watching the clouds forever to see what they can make. Hands for creating and healing turn the world white. He makes her see the world for what it is and it is good.

Blood everywhere and screams are loud. They are her screams now. Her angel is gone. The one who saved her died for her. a life taken is one lost forever. though she knows her angel went to god. She cries and begs for the pain to go away but no her tears are as crimson as the snow.

That girl now sits and watches the snow as it all slowly turns white. She still believes people are good as the world itself is. The red cuts are healed just as the red snow. Her angel watches from a better place making things alright. For now the snow is Crimson but it will all turn white again.
PostPosted: Mon Jun 21, 2010 5:44 pm


This sounds like a stream of consciousness more than anything. If this is the case then there are many people here to talk about any issues you are having. If this is not the case, then your work seems to be abstract in an extreme.

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PostPosted: Tue Jun 22, 2010 6:48 pm


Thank you! abstract was exactly what i was going for! Xd
PostPosted: Tue Jun 22, 2010 10:18 pm


KiraxBingBing-Chan
Thank you! abstract was exactly what i was going for! Xd


Well, you did an outstanding job.

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