Well, I need some feedback for one that I wrote on 6/25. I'd like to know what this means to people and what they think is happening in the poem. It kinda relates to me, but not entirely; I wrote it out of boredom and confusion...Please and thank you for any comments 4laugh Embracing Promise
Yes, it is to you I speak
With silken words in angered fleet;
And blinded by my starry tears,
I fall away to leave you here.
Upon the roof I lay tonight
With bats ahead in hungered flight
And still I cry and curl and die;
From what I've said, I cannot hide.
Merry days are sure to come
But still, to pain, I do succumb
When impassioned kisses strike me ill
And I cannot say the words I will.
I cannot let you hear me say
My intoxicated words today,
For still I dodge our searching fate
While love had come a little late.
I grew tired of little games
And begged to you for no more play,
But deaf you were, so I struck hard
And left you with a broken heart.
And now, today, I find us here,
Lost in words and startled fear,
Kissing, loving, understanding,
Embracing promise reprimanding.
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