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 Posted: Tue Jun 01, 2010 1:37 am
I wrote this for my girlfriend- we've been dating for over three years, and she is an aspiring artist, but she's been under-confident about her art lately.
How hath ye the strength so that such stellar
Wonders would jewel upon thou, unhidden
In your eyes. The heart of an artist and
The soul that gives are yours, the things that
Others search silently holding contempt
In their jealousy of thy nature, but the
Things you have earned hath granted thy fully
What god hath gave to Michelangelo,
He gave four times
To you.
It is meant to be read as if a paragraph, not pausing in between lines.
If anyone wants a bit of an analysis of this, I'll be glad to add it.
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Posted: Mon Jun 28, 2010 9:03 pm
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Posted: Tue Jun 29, 2010 6:05 pm
I think your girlfriend will love this, but it needs editing. It doesn't read smoothly. Maybe if I heard it being read out loud it would go smoother, but reading it it seems chopped up haphazardly. Good message, though. It should cheer her up.
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