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 Posted: Sun Apr 11, 2010 5:15 pm
i usually write a poem about fighting or violence or anger but here goes one for kat, and not the little cutie kat that i've been pming on this site she's too young and i'm not interested in long distance either...
You say you hate your eyes,
but i love starring into them,
their like an endless stream of chocolate,
you say your not pretty,
well then why do i think otherwise,
you keep dating the wrong guys,
cause they keep hurting you,
your pain is something i'd love to take away,
but my arm won't move,
your voice annoys everyone else,
to me it fills my heart with joy,
i try to talk to you,
but my mind won't focus itself,
away from your eyes,
how i long to be with you,
i would be your knight,
with no questions asked,
seeing you again,
after so many years,
has lain my troubled heart to rest,
now i know who i want,
so follow my voice through those bitter caves,
come out from your shell,
into the new day,
follow your dreams forward,
and cast the past behind,
feel my light upon your skin,
i will be standing here,
with my arms open for you,
even if its only for,
a short little moment,
i don't care atleast i'll know,
that heart was truely warm,
and hadn't turned to ice,
im not ready to leave here until that moment happens,
so while your laying by yourself,
i hope i will be in your mind tonight,
cause you'll be in mine,
ooooh how i've longed for you,
yet i could never reach far enough,
today i wil jump across,
the cliff i never dared,
i will battle your legions,
with a blind fold i will chase down 4 hummingbirds,
and present their grace and agility,
to you tonight,
only tonight....
i'm not even sure if its even good???? i imagined it more as a song than a poem, even had the melody and everything goin too
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Posted: Sun Apr 11, 2010 5:19 pm
Wow... Thats REALLY good.
I loved it. Its so...wow... im speechless.
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Posted: Sun Apr 11, 2010 7:18 pm
Xxi_Toxic_BrowniexX Wow... Thats REALLY good. I loved it. Its so...wow... im speechless. Thanks ^.^
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 1:51 pm
Nezul Xxi_Toxic_BrowniexX Wow... Thats REALLY good. I loved it. Its so...wow... im speechless. Thanks ^.^ Welcome.! biggrin
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 3:33 pm
that...was.... like.... burning_eyes ....so freaking true and awesome poem!!!!!
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 3:43 pm
thewizard3 that...was.... like.... burning_eyes ....so freaking true and awesome poem!!!!! thanks dude
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 3:45 pm
your welcome. and really, i'm thinking of making a poem of my own. yet, i lack the inspiration and such to make one. but maybe i could try one.... *thinks*
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 3:47 pm
i have to have inspiration in order to anything, or else i will get bored and tired of it or it will suck s**t
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 5:40 pm
I really liked it :}
it reached to my aching heart, and i could see your inspiration for it..
It was well done and not violent at all
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Posted: Mon Apr 12, 2010 10:34 pm
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Posted: Tue Apr 20, 2010 1:37 pm
hmmm it's god and made sense, but if you look at it you need to do some grammar editing...thats all it's perfect just a grammar issue in one or two spots
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Posted: Sun Jun 13, 2010 12:46 pm
Love it, nuff said. heart
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