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 Posted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 5:57 pm
This is my quest for a little prince guy. <3
Intro here
Prince next
OC last
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Posted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 5:58 pm
Name:Kain Genotype: x*y Occupation: Companionship - Maid/Butler Ideal Species: Leiopelma pakeka, Maud Island Frog Pictures: {Ist}|| {2nd}Traits: Feminine - in action and thought Curious - always touching and playing with things Cowardly - skittish from loud noises and surprises, slightly neurotic Helpful - compulsively organized and helps with housework Sickly - low stamina and less than stellar immunity from small accident when in egg Creative - sharp mind, enjoys bright imagination and creates mechanically inspired jewelry Compulsive - part of being helpful but tends to blurt things out too without thinking Likes: Soda, tea, coffee, mechanics, steam punk, frilly things Dislikes: skin-tight clothes, cats and dogs, loud noises, hot and dry days Hobbies: making tea, tinkering with old machinery, making jewelry, reading Reasoning: Although Leiopelma pakeka differs in some aspects of morphology from Leiopelma hamiltoni, with which it was previously grouped, recent genetic studies suggest that the differences are largely superficial. This calls into question its designation as a separate species. So I have liked to deem it separate so that there’s more for everybody. It is a primitive New Zealand frog, in a rather small size. I expanded the traits and I plan to have a small accident with my poor princeling to add some spice. This explains some traits - being a bit sickly, its cowardly stature and OCD. He is a mute.
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Posted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 5:59 pm
NAME : Xaria Anise Weaver
GENDER : Female
AGE : 22
NATIONALITY : Long heritage of the following: Irish, English, Lithuanian and Polish with a few minor strains.
OCCUPATION : Retail Sales
LIKES : Baking, Chocolate, Handcrafts, Music, Outdoors, Reading, Writing, Witchcraft
DISLIKES : Spiders (Arachniphobia - self explanatory), Sports, "Mishandling of Sharp Objects", Fire, Horror/Scary Movies, Choking (Pnigophobia or Pnigerophobia, fear of choking or being smothered.)
HEIGHT :5'5"
WEIGHT :228 lbs.
LOOKS : Ash-blonde hair halos about her shoulders in what used to be a sporty scene style slightly gone to seed. A moon shaped face complete with an ancestral throwback of fair Irish skin and dimpled cheeks when smiling complete her face. Expressional grey-blue eyes twinkle behind cat-eye shaped glasses. She mostly tosses her hair into a ponytail either low at the neck or high atop her head for simplicity; generally dressing in semi casual attire with an array of 'nice' shirts. Those with a patterned look or well fitted to her "more to love" bodily figure. (Including a vast horde of earrings for any occasion.)
PERSONALITY : Seemingly at the mercy of the moon's pull, Xaria is prone to bouts of depression from her history. However, Xaria tries to stay upbeat to go so far as to force niceties, truly believing that if one smiles enough when sad, one does become happy again. All in all, she displays a loving and loyal, caring and kind personality, always there to lend a helping hand even when she is stretched beyond her own limit. (Being from the utter difficulty of saying "No"!) But tends to be clinging and overly sensitive. A tried and true Cancerian if one were to believe in astrology. Silly and childish reactions occasionally crop up from now and then but whatever she sets her heart out to do she is usually determined and tenacious enough to finish it all the way to the end unless there is a confrontation of some sort.
HISTORY : Xaria had an average childhood in a very respectable average family, up until she became older where puberty usually starts. Somehow during her schooling a switch was flipped, and who once were her friends started to ignore her and jeer her unrelentingly. Things even became rather violent.
First it was throwing small things staples, pens, etc. nasty pranks of putting the ends of her hair on fire and then it cumulated into a brawl. In the bathroom, two of the girls had pushed her to the floor, and a third began to choke her, not to kill just enough to struggle for breath. This happened during free period to study until she was able to fight back and viciously bite one of her attackers. The physical abuse cooled down but it was enough to scar her- a fear of choking developed from the long time that they were doing the periodic choking, and other abuse.
Socially she became rather stunted and shy, and had issues with depression. Despite the loving assistance from teachers, parents and only brother, it wasn't until she was able to reach her bottom - trying to commit suicide just a year before entering high school, that she was able to wake up enough to want to cling to life's thread. In that moment she had quite a life altering event involving some very important core beliefs. These beliefs she kept privately to herself since liberal things just weren’t condoned.
Her good natured parents after high school they urged her to become the first one to go to college so that she would have more options for a better life. However, she was obviously not ready, despite the changes in life. Her brother graduated high school a year or so after, and directly went to a university for being a animal doctor since he had so loved animals. He earned a good job that was offered to him.
After turning 22 Xaria had sat down and gave some thought to what she really wanted to do in life. Something that would help her live in the lap of luxury while toeing the line to keep noses out of her business. The job that she was able to get did hardly anything, but she was comfortable. She had taken to nightly raiding of old buildings - surely things that were left over from the last war might be hidden. Small caches? Xaria has had hardly any luck with it, giving close brushes to being caught past the stringent curfew. But with luck being it was and the kindness of her brother he is able to give her a little bit of gold every month which she hordes in her own build secret cache. She’s saved up enough to start school and go for a year. So now, she's been applying to colleges, and precariously living at an apartment complex.
It is a lonely life but she could let no one into her life, until she heard rumor about the abilities of a certain scientist. She could buy a companion and one who could help with housework or run errands and be her friend. Besides she has quite the irrational fear of spiders that - prevents her from dusting all the cobwebs out. She just avoids her little ‘friends’ whenever possible.
Immediate Family:
Mother - Elda Weaver
Father - Connor Weaver
Both are living, older hardworking and able to provide most amenities to the family when they were together. Now they finally have a little bit extra gold that they save for their own for extra expenses.
Brother - Damian Weaver
Doctor for animals, works with conservationists to save wildlife, funded by the government and gets somewhat above average pay for it. He saves up a small chunk of change to send to his sister bimonthly so that she may attend college. He urges her to follow the same path that he did.
Extended Family:
Third Cousin - James Shipman
Hardly knows - known that he is former military, however still works with the government and well taken care of. Possibly married.
Extra Income: Because of how the world works now, she participates in an underground market for a few of her ‘rescued items’ from her lucrative outings. This brings in some extra gold, and she hides it along with the small parcels that she would receive from her brother every so often in her apartments’ kitchen. Just the sort of odd place where one really wouldn’t look.
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Posted: Sat Feb 27, 2010 8:29 pm
Here is my critique, I wrote what I thought and I hope it doesn't offend you in any way. If you have any questions feel free to PM me. : )
Kanove.
______- Major lack of information. A main attraction to a quest thread is the
______sheer amount of information there is to read. It may seem unattractive
______ but the more information you provide, the more we can get to know your
______ character(s).
______-Princeling... there isn't much to say. Small, Feminine, Cute? Very cliche. I
______ knot it is blunt but it is the truth. Tell us why he is this way, I would really
______ try to dig deeper into his personality.
______- First off a college student... mainly all I have to say is WAY to modern.
______Your character is way post-modernization and living in a communist town.
______- Her occupation is slightly un-realistic in this time period. Everyone is
______paid the same and even if she was in college how could she hope to afford
______ a Princeling? If you plan to keep Xaria in college tell me (us) how it would
______ work? Try looking at page 2 of the main thread, Lil posted a form for all
______questing owners in hopes of alerting them of very important parts of a quest.
______- Looks are nice, to the point. There isn't much to say.
______- Her personality is nice, but how does that position her to be guardian of
______a princeling?
______- Her history is nice, not too fancy, not too plan but VERY short. There
______isn't enough.
______- Tell us HOW she earns the riches which she needs to buy a prince.
______- I would like to see A LOT more development when it comes to your
______characters and far more in depth.
______- I'd like to know more about her family and background as well as why
______ she has so many phobias.
______- Remember this is the thirty-first or so century, incorporate that into her
______ life.
______- Remember, it is quality over quantity. So don't give us more information
______ than we need but it is valuable to fill in every detail of her life.
______I do enjoy what you have now though, I like how you broke out of the
______ perfect character ring. : ) Good start.
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Posted: Sun Feb 28, 2010 5:40 am
Thank you! I shall take a look at a few other things here. I will work on different aspects and give more details. I'm used to working in cramped space but I'll stretch everything out.
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