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 Posted: Sat Feb 06, 2010 6:06 pm
Hello there! I'm Eajik, and you can call me that, if you will... Or really, whatever you want to call me.
I'm 14, but more literate then -most- who are older.
I'm a girl.
I live in Wisconsin, and am in the Central Time Zone.
You can contact me at touj_tale@hotmail.com.
It varies on when I can get on... Usually only 3:00 PM - 5:00 PM, or 5:00 PM to 10:00 PM, if even those.
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Posted: Sat Feb 06, 2010 6:09 pm
Name: Fable R. Cyron
Gender: Female
Age 18
Heritage: Polish
Personality:
Fable is a hard person to describe. She's one of those people who are intelligent enough, above average, but nowhere near being a genius. She is pleasant-natured, and is not void of social skills. She might seem normal by this little part, but that's quite off.
To best put it, she's not really "there". She doesn't live in the moment- but on that hand, she doesn't live in the past either. Sometimes it's hard to tell if she is even in reality. She seems to live in her own little world, commonly making references to it that are unintelligible to anyone who doesn't know anything about her, or her alternate reality. Her world is one of dragons and knights and fairies, one where the enemy is not the war waging in reality nor the environmental issues, but trying to save the princess.
Despite her... well... Insanity, she does have some people skills. She enjoys company, she really does! But this doesn't help her find any, seeing she doesn't make much sense to anyone but herself. Still, she attempts to.
Also, she's quite addicted to candy. Maybe this plays a role in her mind-boggled demeanor.
Physical Appearance:
The human, if described in one word, looks unhealthy. Only standing at a 5"2, Fable weighs 95, quite slim for her age, if not bordering underweight. She has nearly no muscles, and not much fat either. Surprisingly, for the fact that she spends hours outside, she's fairly pale... And the fact that her veins are quite easy to spot making little paths throughout her body isn't considered exactly pretty.
Her face is heart-shaped- skin tautly stretched across the space. She has high cheekbones and thin lips, with a smaller nose. Her eyes are a bright hazel, though they look slightly clouded upon further inspection. Her hair is a pale blond, cut unevenly, with a wispy look... Hairs go every which way, seeing she usually doesn't bother to brush it.
As far as apparel goes, she wears whatever part her mind sets her to be- albeit, a bit more modern. She doesn't actually run around in armor or a princess gown, it's just a holographic technology. Even if she denies it herself.
History:
She was born mid-war, well into it. Her father was a commander in the army, and her mother accompanied him throughout the various campaigns. She was born in his second session during the war, and grew up in war bases, often moving. Neither of her parents had much time for her, they tended to ignore her. No- they were not trying to be abusive or neglectful, they loved their child quite a bit! But there was no time, they were to busy. As a result, Fable grew up mainly alone, entertaining herself. She began to read at a very early age, always asking for new books, which were given to her by nice soldiers who fought along side her father.
When the war ended, she was eight. By this point in time, her insanity had heightened to near the point it stands today. The parents, now with much time on their hands tried to correct it with no avail. Still, Fable loved the attention she got from her parents, encouraging them to play with her. Be it pity or love, the makeshift family was bliss for the child.
But bliss can't last forever. Within two years, everything ended abruptly. Her father was hunted down by an old enemy and killed. Her mother committed suicide soon after. The child was given to the care of one of her father's close friends from the war, who raised her there-on-out. The negligence she had experienced before intensified in this household, with her barely getting human contact, scaring most away, and forbidden from speaking to the few who remained oblivious to the "crazy girl" who lived nearby.
As soon as she was old enough, her surrogate family kicked her out. She moved to Saltaire, with inheritance from her dead parents backing her. Once she settled in, she published some books she had written within the last few years, making quite a sum. Her new house was one filled with technology, things cleaning for her and cooking for her- quite well to fit in to her delusion, pretending they are servants and maids, doing whatever she wants at a mere whim. Even if they aren't even human-like, or shaped in that fashion. Her mind replaces it.
And so, Fable continues to live in this manner happily.
Current Occupation:
She's currently making a living as an author. She writes non-fiction... But you'll find her stuff under fiction. She makes a lot of extra money off of weeklies, and seeing her past, the government lets it slip, if they become aware.
Why a Prince?
Every princess needs a handmaid, every knight a squire, among other things! (Also, she wants a friend... But that's secondary.)
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Posted: Sat Feb 06, 2010 6:18 pm
Name: -to be decided-
Rana pyrenaica - Pyranean Frog
Genotype: xy*, preferably
Personality Traits:
-Adaptable to temperatures
-More aquatic-centered
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Posted: Sat Feb 06, 2010 6:25 pm
Credits:
Royalty Bound: Djubre
Hex Codes: Tektek
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 7:48 pm
YAY IT'S DONE~ -brick'd-
So... Critique please? :3
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 10:35 pm
Can't take an uber detailed look right now since my brain is threatening to explode in my head. @_@
But there are some things on the surface that I can see. :3
5'2" and 110 pounds is actually on the higher end of a normal BMI.
Non-content stuff: Look out for spelling and grammar errors; we are looking out for them, even in quest threads. The font is too light, I had to bring it into word to be able to see it. P:
I'll come back as soon as my headache meds kick in. 3nodding
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Posted: Sun Feb 07, 2010 10:58 pm
Oooh, another female char! I gotta say, I like where your going with her. Though she does remind me a bit of the girl from Serial Experiments Lain (the anime if you've ever seen it?) At least personality wise.
I believe...there is a lack of gadgets..and mayhaps your girl would do well to have an android/robotic caretaker? Someone to talk to and make nonsense to. To have around for a form of companionship even if its false human companionship. Or at least something to make her crazy self breakfast every morning.
It's gonna need some tweaking, but I think if you stick with it, you can really make it work and turn her into a wonderfully interesting character!
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Posted: Mon Feb 08, 2010 4:01 pm
Lil: Changed her weight. x3 Do you know any good BMIs to use? I'm not good at weights. o_o;; And I'm doing a spell check right now, so expect that to be taken care of. Thank you much for helping~
Shining: Never seen it, sorry... I hope it's not too much like her, I guess. xD And she does have a fair amount of gadgets in her house, ones that do cook, clean, etc... Should that be mentioned? Once again, thanks.
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Posted: Tue Feb 09, 2010 9:28 pm
Lawls! No no she doesn't seem to much like her at all! -trust me entirely different worlds and such things, I just familiarize myself by comparing things to anime and books cause I'm lameee- And yes please! Go on and mention the home, kitchen gadgets, we flipping luff that stuff -eat it up yes!-
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Posted: Wed Feb 10, 2010 5:34 am
Haha, you're not lame, I'm just paranoid. x3 Um, I added a few sentences about it into her history~
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Posted: Wed Feb 10, 2010 6:01 am
[[ Just a foreword--my sister is 5'7 and 100 pounds and she's very healthy-looking, so my suggestion is that if you don't know normal weight/height ranges and how they work together, I'd stick to general terms like "petite" or stuff like that. ]]
I know me and Lil were discussing it, but I'll beat her to the chase here... It looks like you've incidentally combined two failed characters together from some previous quests around here. We had a Gretel, who was border insane, and then an author, who thought he could really make a substantial amount of money on the side to afford a Prince (both of which were flops but the quester finally found one that was a gem). I'll cut to the chase here, I don't really think this character will work. Mentally deranged characters are, well, sorta passe in the RP industry to begin with, but asides from that, think about it in terms of in-character relationships--What on earth would make you think Maximilian would want to affiliate with a nutcase? xd Much less an unfortunate author who lacks both sanity and gold?
I won't kid with you here--there's no way she'd be able to earn 20 grand on the side from what she does. "She makes a lot of extra money off of weeklies, and seeing her past, the government lets it slip, if they become aware." How much money do you expect anyone can earn from weeklies? =S
It's also not a really great idea to take liberties with altering the world to suit your character (i.e. saying that the MOTHERLAND would actually let her earn more money than everyone else--they're a socialist country, as if they would XD;; And what special "past" would you be referring to anyways?). If you want to make assumptions about the world like that, it might be a good idea to ask first whether you're not wildly overstepping boundaries set first ^^;;
All in all, I do not really suggest you continue along this path--she's nuts and nobody likes making business deals with persons possessing questionable sanity, her method of earning money is a little far-fetched and against world bounds, and on another important note--she's really quite young. Basically still a teenager. How would she relate to any other characters in the world (if you wanted to RP with any other owners should Fable have a Prince of her own), let alone Max or Adelle? These are all things you have to think of when you create a character. It's important you fit into the world and your character could mingle with at least one or two of the owners, even start relationships with them, perhaps! 3nodding
By making her like that, you closed off a lot of options when it comes to making ties with other characters.
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Posted: Wed Feb 10, 2010 9:46 pm
Just a general hint for character creation anywhere, it's always important to include the "Why?"s when you make a statement. For example, when you say that she writes non-fiction but it's in fiction, you don't elaborate as to why this is or what sort of non-fiction she writes. It's a broad statement that we can't exactly judge since she can be anything from a writer of biographies to a writer of textbooks. And the old enemy who killed her father...why was he an old enemy? What was their connection? Her inheritance...what was it that her parents did that even gave her an inheritance? The salary across the MOTHERLAND is likely barely the cost of living for one person, with a stipend for offspring.
Moving on to what Dju said, I'm in full agreement. Although Max is a greedy little bugger, Adelle would go Rambo on his rear if he let someone who can be described as "insane" and looks like she can't take care of herself ("Hairs go every which way, seeing she usually doesn't bother to brush it.") take care of a prince. To use an example of closing your character off to others, your character would be barred from entering my character's home and Amir would likely be rushed away if your character entered the room. Mentally unstable people are liabilities in such an unstable world, and MOTHERLAND would likely put the "insane" in a mental hospital.
Overall, I don't think this character would fit in happily with Saltaire, and I really want you to be able to RP with the rest of us so a new character/personality would be best. smile
Not so big o' deals: It's nuclear winter, think northern Russia cold and constant overcast. All of them are fair-skinned so pale is the norm no matter how much time you spend outside. wink
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