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 Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 7:43 pm
Shards of eggshells cling to our feet as we trudge along our coarse
With hallowed hearts and vacant chests, our throats are growing hoarse
Yet we continue to scream inaudibly, neither willing to admit defeat
Though the scars that decorate our damaged selves symbolize we’re incomplete.
No one seems to comprehend how fragile we all are
As titanium cages only mask the tin foil that is our heart
Despite what people think or say, regardless of how we appear
It doesn’t matter how strong one is, their delicate heart must be held dear
In hands of steal that serve as shields for out flickering sparks of hope-
Hope to one day become human, despite our spiraling slope.
aside from perhaps some spelling errors, what'dya think?
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Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 8:29 pm
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Heavy_m3tal_hippy Vice Captain
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Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 10:00 pm
Lesse here... hallowed hearts... psychotic imagery... the word "spiraling"... I think you've got some sort of pretty awesome poem... I only wish I could understand it xd
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Posted: Sun Jan 31, 2010 3:31 pm
what do you think of this poem that i wrote for my girlfriend? i dont think that i did too good, although it is one of my best
I look at the razor blade, and i just cant resist,
the way that it feels, as it slaughters my wrist,
slicing my veins-- i love the pain--
as the blood drips down my arm like the rain,
as i am lying in my bed,
only the thought of you running through my head,
my brain is dead, and if it wasn't for you, i would be too,
Ashley, i love you,
and i can't wait to look in your eyes and say "I DO",
i try to think about suicide,
although it is hard with you on my mind,
YOU are the reason that my heart still beats,
YOU are the reason that i still breath,
baby just let me say one more thing, please don't leave, YOU are all that i need!!
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Posted: Sun Jan 31, 2010 4:19 pm
Wow! the_forgotten_thought, that was AMAZING! I love it! Wish I could write as good as that!
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