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 Posted: Wed Jan 27, 2010 5:02 pm
I stay here lookin at you move on, n me staying behind, lookin at you find
love, and me being declined; My tears run down my face, while my heart
beats at a slow pace, sometimes i just wanna end it all, stabbing myself
against the wall..~1.27.10~
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Posted: Thu Jan 28, 2010 5:27 pm
i like it; i'd work on some of the spelling ( i had to read it times to figure out the n.) so i'd put these marks (') around a word that is 'half-used' such as 'n'. but overall, i liked it. keep up the good work!!
~Crimson
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Posted: Sat Jan 30, 2010 11:53 pm
lol well that makes me feel smart but over all thanks lol n sorry i was like in a rush when i typedit lol
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