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 Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2009 1:32 am
 Name: Erin
Age: 21
Birthday: 01/01/89
Sex: Female
Location: Washington State, USA
Time Zone: PST (-8 GMT...I think)
AIM: erinleighh
MSNM: lil_guy00@hotmail.com
Online: Between 2pm and 2am every day, if not more.Player Info - Amir Singh - Ammon Singh - My Prince - Extras - Credits
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2009 1:36 am
Name: Amir Singh
Age: 23
Birthday: February 27th
Sex: Male
Country of Origin: India
MOTHERLAND Occupation: Next Head of Biometal Engineering Project (BEP)
Earns Riches By: His mother's transport business seizes items not picked up within 24 hours of the scheduled pickup time. Items are divvied up and/or liquidated, kept as heirlooms. His father is the end all and be all of biometal so he often has under the table deals with his coworkers and other rich folk to add a protective coating to their house, cars, etc.
Keep Riches By: Most of their riches are in the form of gold statues (the "abstract" kind that really don't look any different when you cut a chunk off for money) that the Sighs refer to as "meditation aids," which are considered spiritual and off-limits for the MOTHERLAND governments to seize.
Relationships
Mother: Vari Singh (Manager for a transport company)
Father: Abhay Singh (Scientist, developed biometal)
History
War: During the war, Amir was locked deep underground in a bomb-proof stronghold developed by his father and mother before he was even conceived. He had a brief childhood with his mother physically present in his life, but as both sides of the war started making their last ditch efforts to win, Vari was called away by work. He has never met his father in the flesh and sees him on a semi-weekly basis through hologram letters and chats. Amir watched countless movies and read all of his father's books. He developed a knack for robotic technology and has created quite a few orb-like robots to help the staff and, eventually, the rebuilding nations. His only friend is Ammon, his lifelong caretaker, and the patisserie who bakes him sweets on demand (even if he doesn't know her name).
Post-War: A few years after the war had ended, a glitch in the security system (which may or may not have been caused by Amir, depending on who you ask) unlocked the stronghold from the inside and Amir ventured topside. He explored the dank and dirty city of Saltaire only to end up lost in the shadier side of town. Luckily Ammon wasn't too far behind, but he didn't make it in time to prevent the boy from picking up a dirty novel or two. Amir, after being lectured extensively about etiquette and safety, was finally allowed to return topside to attend a party in place of his father. There he met Professor Maximilian and created his first business relationship, as well as a dozen or so potentials. Although he didn't go home with the prize, he has scheduled a return visit to Rheinfels on Jan. 14th.
Personality
Amir is a spoiled brat and is used to getting what he wants whenever he wants it. Daddy loves seeing his little boy happy and mommy feels guilty for leaving him alone all the time. The two can also be played off each other if Amir wants something particularly expensive OR he wants to get out of trouble. As he's ventured topside, Amir's learned that money can buy him a lot of things and, unfortunately, he has no real value of money and is easily tricked into spending more than he should if Ammon isn't there to stop him.
For the most part, Amir is starving for attention and curious. He does not fully understand how to interact with strangers on a personal (non-business) level and gets easily frustrated if the other party doesn't respond like he wants them to. He will try his hardest to exhibit a positive personality but once he's snapped, the spoiled and demanding brat returns and it's hard to coax him down.
Description
5'8", waist-length black hair, hazel eyes, lean build, tan.Player Info - Amir Singh - Ammon Singh - My Prince - Extras - Credits
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2009 1:38 am
Name: Ammon Singh (Adopted last name)
Age: 30
Birthday: June 6th
Sex: Male
Country of Origin: Egypt
MOTHERLAND Occupation: Heir to and Saltaire's manager of Malik Transport Company.
Earns Riches By: His adoptive mother's transport business seizes items not picked up within 24 hours of the scheduled pickup time. Items are divvied up and/or liquidated, kept as heirlooms. His adoptive father is the end all and be all of biometal so he often has under the table deals with his coworkers and other rich folk to add a protective coating to their house, cars, etc.
Keep Riches By: Most of their riches are in the form of gold statues (the "abstract" kind that really don't look any different when you cut a chunk off for money) that the Sighs refer to as "meditation aids," which are considered spiritual and off-limits for the MOTHERLAND governments to seize.
History
Ammon was sold to the Singh family for about the same price as a goat. His parents could no longer keep up with the cost of caring for him and had to make the not-so-difficult choice of giving up their son or dying from starvation. He resented his parents at first, but eventually forgot all about them after spending a few months with the Singh family. They were preparing a safe home for their future offspring, and they wanted to train Ammon to be a big brother of sorts. Abhey taught the young Egyptian via hologram and hired the best teachers that money could buy for when he was called away. Vari, who was taking a few years off to work on her fertility and health, brought Ammon to every information session with the midwife and nanny so he could raise their future son with ease in case both parents were called away.
It didn't take long for Ammon to grow fond of his parents, as well as his role of caretaker. When Amir was born, he spent more time with him than Vari and the nanny combined. He was a dutiful older brother in every way but blood, and the Singhs were very grateful to him as he carefully protected their offspring through the years. So grateful in fact that Ammon was eventually adopted and, although he still plays slave to Amir, he is set to inherit Vari's company when Amir no longer needs cared for. However, he has no desire to do anything but care for his precious friend.
Currently Ammon is in the process of teaching Amir the appropriate way to interact with people on social, personal, and business levels...it's not going well.
Personality
Ammon likes to appear stubborn but he never holds out for too long. If he's asked more than three times, he'll do whatever it is he was asked to do. He's a pushover, mostly for Amir, and always feels guilty when he really has to put his foot down. He doesn't show much emotion when he's in public or with anyone aside from his longtime companion, but when he's with Amir (or behind the Sittercam), he's quite vocal about his annoyances.
Amir would also like me to point out that Ammon is a horrible nag.
Description
6'3", short blond hair, brown eyes, muscular build, tan.Player Info - Amir Singh - Ammon Singh - My Prince - Extras - Credits
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2009 1:42 am
Basic Info
Name: Undetermined
Ideal Species: Polypedates maculatus - The Chunam Tree Frog
Picture: X
Ideal Genotype: xy* or xy
Known Personality Quirks
-Prefers to spend time in the garden or the pond.
-Strong desire to mate during heavy rain at night. (Adult)
-Pines for the moist forests he sees in Amir's movies.
-Enjoys teasing Amir in the way Amir teases Ammon.
-Confides in Ammon.Player Info - Amir Singh - Ammon Singh - My Prince - Extras - Credits
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2009 1:44 am
An underground fortress of sorts with an outer shell of 6ft thick concrete and 2ft thick biometal. Created to be impenetrable by any force, with the exception of global destruction. The Singhs began developing the building when they were married for the sole purpose of housing their offspring.
The stronghold contains an artificial sun and ecosystem creator that provides a natural feel of old-India. There is a garden with a holographic sky, a rather large pond, and of course every other amenities found in a rich household. All staff members live in the stronghold and have only recently been allowed outside.
Biometal
Biometal is solid made up of a group of artificially-intelligent nanobots that gather together much like electrons in an atom (they appear solid but are really free moving) in whatever form the programmer chooses. Biometal distributes force equally throughout a structure to prevent damage to the whatever is inside or behind it. Created primarily for human, building, and transportation armor.
Sitterbot
A Sitterbot is a modified version Amir's biometal invention. A spherical robot with six arms that it can extend at any given time, also equipped with a camera that feeds directly to its human controller wherever he or she may be. The Sitterbot was originally intended for use in the war, but Amir's father re-engineered the device and marketed it as a babysitter for high ranking war officials to check in on their children OR have them taken care of without any strangers physically meeting the child. Has a fail-safe that prevents any harm to the non-threatening humans and animals.Player Info - Amir Singh - Ammon Singh - My Prince - Extras - Credits
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Posted: Sat Dec 26, 2009 7:31 am
Player Info - Amir Singh - Ammon Singh - My Prince - Extras - Credits
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Posted: Sat Jan 02, 2010 1:41 am
The thread is now open for critiques. I'll store edits here~ 1/4/10 "He had a brief childhood with his mother present, but as the soldiers were finally able to see the light at the end of the tunnel, his mother had to go back to work." Changed to: "He had a brief childhood with his mother physically present in his life, but as both sides of the war started making their last ditch efforts to win, Vari was called away by work." "For the most part, Amir is lonely and curious." Changed to: "For the most part, Amir is starving for attention and curious.
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Posted: Mon Jan 04, 2010 7:50 am
Crittin time!
History: War
"During the war, Amir was locked deep underground in a bomb-proof stronghold developed by his father and mother before he was even conceived. He had a brief childhood with his mother present, but as the soldiers were finally able to see the light at the end of the tunnel, his mother had to go back to work."
The wording isn't very clear. I've underlined the parts that confused me the most.
History:
"Ammon was sold to the Singh family for about the same price as a goat. His parents could no longer keep up with the cost of caring for him and had to make the not-so-difficult choice of giving up their son or dying from starvation."
Love that tidbit! I know through my various studies that this practice actually happened/happens. It gives me a good sense that you did your research.
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Posted: Tue Jan 05, 2010 10:22 am
Forgot to post here yesterday. 8'D
Thanks for the crits!
Also changed...
"For the most part, Amir is lonely and curious."
Changed to:
"For the most part, Amir is starving for attention and curious.
Since lonely is the flavor of the month apparently. XD
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Posted: Sun Jan 10, 2010 11:33 am
OMG;; I'm so sorry that it took me so long to post in here. I just got so busy and things have been a little nuts. Lol. But I'm here now and ready to crit! Now before I start: I just wanted to put out there that I haven't done this too much so it's okay if you don't like my critiques. ^-^
So I really love what you've came up with. Amir and Ammon seem both relatable as people, in the sense that it's within the realm of possibilities that they act like that. I also like like little things you slipped in there for comedic effect. If there was anything that I would really state: I would like to see a little bit more of where you want to take your prince. Not neccessarily map out who he is as a character because then that will lock you down when you go to RP and develop him, but more as a way of telling us of who he could become. I don't know if I expressed that right and if you know what I mean. I do love the details you've already inserted into the story and I appreciate the "extras" area where you explained some of the things that were in your proposal, it made them easier to picture and understand. I hope this helpful. ^-^
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Posted: Sat Jan 16, 2010 12:45 am
Thank you everyone for the crit! Amir and Ammon have been accepted into Saltaire and Amir has a pin of his own, so there is no more need for this thread.
Good luck with your own characters! ^_^
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