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 Posted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 9:56 am
"This is the introduction of my latest creative production. Comment if you wish, read to your heart's desire, and I must urge you to respect my literature pieces for they are my most prized achievements and will soon be Copyrighted©." I urge commenting because of the truth that an author is nothing without his/her adoring fans, am I correct? (The Prologue is in "Red" text)Enjoy! Viva La Authors!If you desire a critique of your personal pieces I urge you to send a "Friend Request" for I truly enjoy making new friends, and secondly I am supportive in my critiquing and I Strongly believe that ever author and poet has the potential to become great in the literary universe, and I am respectful. If you do not desire to accept me to your friend's list and still desire for ideas for a piece or a personal critique, I urge you to send me a "Private Message"People speculate habitually as to what the factual definition of the utterance phenomenon is. I, myself, hypothesized the correctness to that particular phrase at a point, until a somewhat extraordinary event transpired in the normality of my existence. Phenomenon is basically an occurrence that materializes, contrasting anything before, something you would by no means envision occurring but that circumstance revolutionizes your being for all of eternity. My phenomenal episode discharged an entrance to an innovatively spectacular universe more glorious than I ever thought achievable.
Everything that has an existence on this earth has a purpose but some of us never unearth our proper mission, unless we are pressed in the accurate direction. For every hurt and torment we survive, there is significance behind it, to sculpt our spirit and shape it into that of a stronger individual. Each time our life twists in an unanticipated route, there is a proper function urging it forward, to set in motion foreseen trials our destiny unfolds. The solution is to not contradict the voyage, but to capture it with pristine elegance and accept your position in life. Forget the past melancholy, for without its authority, our strength to overcome similar obstacles would not exist.
A phenomenon, as I have spoken, drastically changes a condition in our lives and in most examples for an utmost greater purpose. Never doubt the specialty of your reality for each person holds his or her own greatness. I did not determine my veiled forte until an existence-altering occurrence began to seize its place into my life. Nothing on God’s jade world can train you for discovering your fate, and when you do, your life transmutes forever!
This is my incredibly spectacular tale…This is just the prologue of the piece and I assure you that the Chapters are in current production and shall join the prologue very soon, until then I insist that you send me your personalized opinion and comment if you want to.I thank you, whomever decides to take time out of their hectic schedule to express your opinion or desires my assistance with ideas, critiques, etc...
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Posted: Thu Dec 03, 2009 2:10 pm
xXxLady_Sorina_ValkainxXx "This is the introduction of my latest creative production. Comment if you wish, read to your heart's desire, and I must urge you to respect my literature pieces for they are my most prized achievements and will soon be Copyrighted©." I urge commenting because of the truth that an author is nothing without his/her adoring fans, am I correct? (The Prologue is in "Red" text)Enjoy! Viva La Authors!If you desire a critique of your personal pieces I urge you to send a "Friend Request" for I truly enjoy making new friends, and secondly I am supportive in my critiquing and I Strongly believe that ever author and poet has the potential to become great in the literary universe, and I am respectful. If you do not desire to accept me to your friend's list and still desire for ideas for a piece or a personal critique, I urge you to send me a "Private Message"People speculate habitually as to what the factual definition of the utterance phenomenon is. I, myself, hypothesized the correctness to that particular phrase at a point, until a somewhat extraordinary event transpired in the normality of my existence. Phenomenon is basically an occurrence that materializes, contrasting anything before, something you would by no means envision occurring but that circumstance revolutionizes your being for all of eternity. My phenomenal episode discharged an entrance to an innovatively spectacular universe more glorious than I ever thought achievable.
Everything that has an existence on this earth has a purpose but some of us never unearth our proper mission, unless we are pressed in the accurate direction. For every hurt and torment we survive, there is significance behind it, to sculpt our spirit and shape it into that of a stronger individual. Each time our life twists in an unanticipated route, there is a proper function urging it forward, to set in motion foreseen trials our destiny unfolds. The solution is to not contradict the voyage, but to capture it with pristine elegance and accept your position in life. Forget the past melancholy, for without its authority, our strength to overcome similar obstacles would not exist.
A phenomenon, as I have spoken, drastically changes a condition in our lives and in most examples for an utmost greater purpose. Never doubt the specialty of your reality for each person holds his or her own greatness. I did not determine my veiled forte until an existence-altering occurrence began to seize its place into my life. Nothing on God’s jade world can train you for discovering your fate, and when you do, your life transmutes forever!
This is my incredibly spectacular tale…This is just the prologue of the piece and I assure you that the Chapters are in current production and shall join the prologue very soon, until then I insist that you send me your personalized opinion and comment if you want to.I thank you, whomever decides to take time out of their hectic schedule to express your opinion or desires my assistance with ideas, critiques, etc...
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Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 3:31 pm
I feel as though it's tight. You might want to loosen up a bit. And, if you expect young readers (13-15) you might want to use smaller words sweatdrop I found you tend to use larger words as your vocabulary is bigger.
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Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 7:14 pm
The vocabulary is my personal way of showing that my stories are not meant for adolesent children. The stories are meant for a more mature audience with a higher dose of vocabulary. You murmur of my prologue being TIGHT? It is meant to seem that way. The narrator has been through heartache and torment ever since childhood, therefore her opinion is more on the pessimistic (negative) level. Her opinion changes drastically during the duration of the novel, and she becomes more positive further in the novel.
I do urge you for your continous opinion, my dear. As I have said during my previous posts, critiques are common in our profession. I am honored that you expressed yourself with honesty. I assure you that you shall get a better grasp of my true writing ablities and my creativity later on in the story. I apologize if it confused you.
Thank you again for your honesty and opinion. Feel free to continue your comments with the further posting of the story.
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Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 8:46 pm
xXxLady_Sorina_ValkainxXx The vocabulary is my personal way of showing that my stories are not meant for adolesent children. The stories are meant for a more mature audience with a higher dose of vocabulary. You murmur of my prologue being TIGHT? It is meant to seem that way. The narrator has been through heartache and torment ever since childhood, therefore her opinion is more on the pessimistic (negative) level. Her opinion changes drastically during the duration of the novel, and she becomes more positive further in the novel. I do urge you for your continous opinion, my dear. As I have said during my previous posts, critiques are common in our profession. I am honored that you expressed yourself with honesty. I assure you that you shall get a better grasp of my true writing ablities and my creativity later on in the story. I apologize if it confused you.Thank you again for your honesty and opinion. Feel free to continue your comments with the further posting of the story.Lady Sorina heart uh. by tight, i kind of meant formal sweatdrop Sorry for the misunderstanding. I couldn't find another word.
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Posted: Thu Dec 10, 2009 9:46 pm
It is quite alright, my dear. It is still a most welcomed critique. It is formal, in the prologue for a purpose. It goes in depth and bares her opinions and such later on in the novel. I am sorry if I confused you.
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 6:57 am
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 8:22 am
Not a big issue, my friend? I would have to murmur that you are mistaken. Your opinion as well as others is most welcomed and an honor in my eyes. For you have taken the time out of your hectic and busy schedule to grant my request and share your opinion regarding my most treasured works. I speak with truth and honesty for I gain nothing for telling a fable of non-truth, my dear.
Your confusion is my personal failure, and I shall do whatever needed to insure that confusion is no longer involved with my works
Lady Sorina heart
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Chasing Shadows16 Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 2:00 pm
I love your work Lady Sorina. It invokes a bit of thinking that's kind of rare to find in most works. I also love your use of vocabulary, it adds to the overall effect.
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 3:23 pm
xXxLady_Sorina_ValkainxXx Not a big issue, my friend? I would have to murmur that you are mistaken. Your opinion as well as others is most welcomed and an honor in my eyes. For you have taken the time out of your hectic and busy schedule to grant my request and share your opinion regarding my most treasured works. I speak with truth and honesty for I gain nothing for telling a fable of non-truth, my dear.Your confusion is my personal failure, and I shall do whatever needed to insure that confusion is no longer involved with my worksLady Sorina heart Hectic and busy? XD You have the wrong person XD
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 7:28 pm
Chasing Shadows16 I love your work Lady Sorina. It invokes a bit of thinking that's kind of rare to find in most works. I also love your use of vocabulary, it adds to the overall effect.
My dear Shadow, as always your compliments hold such welcomed flattery. It is an honor that you approve of my unique writing style, my friend. My vocabulary as you know is my personal trademark. My wide range of knowledge in regards to words is thanks to my devotion of actually studying the dictionary.
Would it be too much of a suprise if I told you that I have actually sat down and read the dictionary?
You are aware of my use of discriptions as well, and I assure you that in the future chapters my vast discriptions shall be there.
I thank you my friend.
Lady Sorina heart
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 7:31 pm
musicluver9456 xXxLady_Sorina_ValkainxXx Not a big issue, my friend? I would have to murmur that you are mistaken. Your opinion as well as others is most welcomed and an honor in my eyes. For you have taken the time out of your hectic and busy schedule to grant my request and share your opinion regarding my most treasured works. I speak with truth and honesty for I gain nothing for telling a fable of non-truth, my dear.Your confusion is my personal failure, and I shall do whatever needed to insure that confusion is no longer involved with my worksLady Sorina heart Hectic and busy? XD You have the wrong person XD
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 8:12 pm
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 8:59 pm
I assure you and everyone else who is interested in further works and chapters, regarding this narrative and others, more of this book shall be posted shortly after I am through editing. I am quite a "freak" when it comes to my pieces. My own personal form of OCD, you could say.
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Posted: Fri Dec 11, 2009 9:02 pm
razz . I can say I'm not, that wouldn't be a complete lie, but it wouldn't the complete either XD.
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