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Please don't eat my character.

I like the character a whole lot, but wouldn't go as far as to say David's "cousin" Lomarco.

Okay, Kakashi. I edited.

Thanks for the help. I understand that for all your harsh berating of my abilities, you're really just trying your hardest to create a fair village system that gives everyone an equal chance to have fun and be strong, and I don't begrudge your sometimes crude attitude at all.

I suppose you are looking for criticism, so here goes:



I'd like to know how long you can maintain the technique. If it's indefinitely then write that, if it's only for X amount of them, write that instead.



Does the user need to actually bite the object? Or is it acceptable if his teeth simply touch it? It would be an interesting/funny twist if this technique actually hurt the user by damaging the users teeth. I also would like to know how long this technique can be maintained. I can see the practical implications of being able to create 'fire' based weapons.



When you say it doesn't explode but that all fire affects apply, I assume you mean that it is going to do fire damage to the specific point it comes on contact with but will not spread the flames over a large range as an exploding fire ball would. My only question is: Does the attack take any sort of prep time? Must he breath in a lot of air before firing the projectile? Or can it just be launched like someone spitting out a ball of phlegm?



I assume by 'throw up' you are talking about vomiting. I don't even want to know what sort of thing this character could do to place him within distance of vomiting on his opponent. Also, stickyness would only be useful if the vomit was in contact with the bottom of an opponents feet. Perhaps you meant this as a sort of 'trap' technique?



I don't entirely understand this beast. You say he appears to be 2D when looked at from every angle. Does that mean that the Beast is in fact a 2D being? Or is the beast actual a 3D being that projects itself as a 2D being? If it actually is a 2D being, then any attacks from it would be completely pointless as the beast would only be able to move through it's current 2D plane of existence and wouldn't be able to stretch it's body parts through the 3rd dimension to attempt to harm an opponent. As far as killing it is concerned, it appears that the only ways to do so are through basic elemental attacks (lightning, fire, water, ice, etc) as those are the only real AOE techniques that can hit all points at once, excluding exploding tags, which I assume would not be powerful enough to do the damage required to take this beast down. I really don't know why the beast would "forgo this and take any attack it wishes.", especially in a battle situation.

Seems that the summon is kinda broken and can be used to make an absolutely unstoppable warrior against certain enemies.



Syntax error: "While the Poison Forever release jutsu are almost all genjutsu, this one is not."

So this technique allows the user to turn any Genjutsu into reality is what your saying? That's a little bit broken, especially if you teach the technique to people with sadistic tenancies. Imagine the effect if you were to put somebody into a Genjutsu in which they are battling one of the tailed-beasts. If you were to use this jutsu afterward you would literally be creating a tailed-beast. That's just broken as all ******** another horrifying situation: Somebody has a Genjutsu in which the opponent imagines themself being killed. But wait! They were just taught Poison Forever: Dream Manipulation Machine by the traveling teacher, suddenly they can use a Genjutsu to kill opponents without even having to make an attempt at fairness.

OH EXPLOITABLE!



If you create a physical buushin, that means it's Ninjutsu not Genjutsu.



EXTRA: Because your arms are restrained, does that mean you will be preforming one handed seals if your hands don't happen to be lined up touching one another?

EXTRA 2: Half your techniques are Ninjutsu, but your Genjutsu score is significantly higher than your Ninjutsu, please attempt to balance these two out a bit more. I would allow you to drop your Taijutsu score down to 3 (make it effectively 2) and make your Genjutsu and Ninjutsu both 5.

EDIT: I assume you made this profile to see if we would spot the broken as ******** stuff in it? As somewhat of a test?

Good point! The veil would get in the way of all of the fire based ninjutsu techniques.

The veil lifts. When he spits a fireball, it flies out from the veil. It's supposed to be creepy.

Welcome to animu clothes. They work conveniently like that.

The score is level of skill, not number of jutsu. He uses many ninjutsu because they are useful, but his passion is genjutsu, and his powerful abilities all lie there.

And not entirely. I also made him because I wanted someone who could travel village to village and teach jutsu as well as let me have fun.

Understandable. I trust you not to abuse your character just as you trust me not to abuse mine.