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 Posted: Fri Sep 18, 2009 3:22 pm
Sorrow
A tear of happiness turns into diamonds,
But a tear of loneliness shudders into dust.
A cry of excitement causes cheeks to glow like the cardinal’s wings,
And the cry of despair reveals the white snow’s warmth.
Nothing can be as it once was,
After what once was has changed.
Everything is different past the point of no return,
After the point is made.
So what can we do to say afloat in this eerie silence?
How can we breathe when the water rises above us?
When will we take the next step to the heavens?
What will we do when sorrow consumes us?
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 1:21 pm
It seems very much like a person speaking, but the poetic turn in the words and the rhyming lines that link them together mark them as poetry, almost a thread of thought in a writer's mind. Regardless of fair or foul reviews, the pursuit of this art would not be unkind to you.
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Posted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 7:11 pm
Pretty good use of words and the rhyming is nice. It's really not that bad for a first attempt.
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