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demon_pachabel

Beloved Werewolf

PostPosted: Thu Sep 17, 2009 8:20 pm


INFORMATION
Name: Dzik (In some places noted with honorization of 'D'zik', though this is uncorrect and may be due to someone trying to give her grief)
Age: 35
Sex: Female
Sexual Orientation: Bisexual (Prefers maturity over gender)
Craft: N/A
Rank: Probably just a Wingrider (I played with ‘WeyrlingMaster’ as a possible ‘keep her out of the battle ranks’ thing)
Physical Description: Dzik is a terrifyingly…unblessed woman, with broad manly shoulders, no real ‘shape’ in terms of bust and hips, and generally looking masculine in her physical build. Along with a broader jaw, square chin, and a twice-broken nose (which likely was never feminine to begin with), Dzik could easily be mistaken for a man. Genetics was not kind to her either, as in her later twenties, she started suffering from male-pattern baldness, causing her to start shaving her head bald entirely and wrapping it up with a bandana, and several large winestain birthmarks across her face and the rest of her body.
In build, she’s physically capable from years of chasing after 5 younger siblings.
Personality: Dzik has a very high tolerance level for both pain and irritation (though this does not make her patient like a saint), not one to strike back when hit first or when her honor/morals are insulted. The most often case in which she’ll snap at someone is if she has to repeat herself more than 4 times because they aren’t listening to what she said. Then come the loud noises of dropped objects (normally a thick book or pile of something that won’t break when it hits the floor), or if someone is constantly getting out of line with her – at least when it comes to those who are younger than her. In fact, she could be described as tightly wound when it comes to her rules – but only when she’s the one in control, which is a place she only handles well with those younger than her. Otherwise, she’s a follower, not a leader, more willing to let someone older or more capable take the reigns of instruction from her so she can sit back and keep her hands clean of all of the ‘funny business’.

She’s very much able to separate business and pleasure, and often cannot be ‘seduced’ by any party, more than get whisked away by her emotions with flights – which she believes are the bane of her existence. This also means that though she realizes that being a non-goldrider woman (Which if she was a goldrider would have caused double-taking, if she has anything to say about it), she’s not going to be very popular with her higher ups – but she can take any extra grief she’s given, within reason, age tends to be a factor with it, and can find her own ‘winding down’ time when she needs it.

Oh, and the best way to mortally wound her emotional side is to make a quip about her lack of femininity… no srsly. It bothers the s**t out of her. It will make her internally mope-y and probably cause a lot of upset venting later to hers.

History: Dzik was the only child of a wealthy businessman who made a living in breeding firelizards and selling the clutches, giving his daughter, who at the time was the apple of her parent’s eyes, a lot of experience with the pets, though she had not inclination towards having any of her own. Though his daughter, with her dark hair and eyes, wasn’t destined to be the prettiest thing in the world, and even got teased for her less-than-feminine naming (named after her dying Grandfather), it was only at the age of 7 that she suddenly got the title of ‘parent number three’ with the sudden burst of 5 younger brothers, all a year apart.


Growing up with 5 roughhousing boys and keeping them in line, and thus establishing her tightly winding rules and attitudes, was the cause of her broken features, such as her nose, and the development of muscles (though not enough to rival a man).

She was searched at the age of 18 (amongst caring for a mess of siblings which she almost seemed relieved to be getting freed from the care of), and only impressed upon her last potential time to stand.

That was about where her problems began; having never really allied herself with a bronzerider family beforehand, she was fortunate to not suddenly incur the wrath of one -- but she also had no real 'friends' to be made amongst the factions either. This meant that between herself and Yukith there were a loooot of 'self' conversations.

It also meant that she was given a bit(Depending on how you ratio these things) of a 'hard time' (as it wasn't really uncommon knowledge that 'he' was a she, despite her never attempting to BE a guy, or disguise herself even) when it came to assignments, easily being left with guard duty, and passed around wings like the fat unathletic kid when teams were being picked.

Honestly, it wouldn't surprise Dzik if her assignments were chosen based on what she SHOULD have been doing (GIT IN THE KITCHIN AND MAKE ME A SAMMICH D8<) or to keep her out of the way of the REAL riders.
Pets: None
Other/Talents: Dzik has a way with ‘wrangling’ unwilling things together (See: Children, Firelizards, Candidates, things 20 and younger) if needed, but only if directed to do so.

Picture: Kindabadphoto of a scribble from art history

DRAGON INFORMATION
Name: Yukith
Color: Blue
Physical Description: A blue as pale as could reasonably be (without appearing to be white, as he’d still look..well..blue next to snow), almost icey in appearance, while bearing some dark blue markings, reminiscent of a skunk, give or dark the likewise dark mask around his face, with two ‘dots’ above his eyes – like a sort of ‘eyebrow’ marking. He is by no means an impressively large blue, but he does have an impressive wingspan – which is both a blessing and a curse, once threadfall comes around.
Personality: Yukith is a blue who seems to enjoy secrets and scandal; something that he both doesn’t find much of with his rider, but also finds that he needs her to reel him in from gossip and eavesdropping to pay attention to the task at hand. It is his open ‘ear’ that attracted him to ‘his’, as well as his more feminine 'habits', sensing that Dzik needed someone to listen and generally let her vent her daily frustrations out to; all of which Yukith is more than willing to listen to – even if it is very boring. However, he can’t be expected to remember every little scandal and secret he’s heard – especially because rumors grow old and his attentions will go elsewhere as soon as he’s lost interest in something.

Except the news of HIS. No matter how mundane the information’s HIS tells him, Yukith will listen intently – even if he purposely will forget it later, just so the next time she comes to him for an ear, he will be there to listen with less ‘OhFaranthnotthisagain’ and more ‘;A; Poor Mine’.

However, Yukith is not a dragon that is easy to rile up into ‘sadness’. In fact, he’s more easily riled up into anger – especially where Dzik is not as easily shaken over being harassed. Yukith, on the other claw, will be more than happy to count to ten before bellowing and throwing a fit to come to her rescue, over the most mundane of things that doesn't bother his rider, just to be wrangled back into ‘playing nice with others’ again. He definitely will take things too personally otherwise, even between himself and other dragons. If anything, Yukith doesn’t understand sarcasm and sometimes needs to be reinforced as to what it is.

He’s also far too interested in flights – though he knows better than to even DARE to touch a queen, but whenever a green rises; ohhh, he’ll try. He’ll try even if Dzik is against it; after all, how else will he be able to help his work out all of her frustrations?

In a nutshell: Yukith supplies Dzik with a more ‘relaxed’ and open environment to be ‘girly’ and wibbly at without him passing it on willingly, while being quick to rise to her defense, while Dzik supplies Yukith some focus and keeps him on track from getting himself in trouble. Yukith is the ‘girly’ natured (See: Gossipy and emotional) being that Dzik doesn’t get to be.
Other: Hmmm, IDK. :C I THINK HE'S PRETTY?
PostPosted: Thu Sep 17, 2009 8:23 pm


I'm just looking to smooth over things I haven't looked into yet, so anything to help the pair be more 'compatible' and make more sense, as well as anything I've left out of their personalities, would be nice. :C

demon_pachabel

Beloved Werewolf


TawnyAngel

Predestined Inquisitor

PostPosted: Fri Sep 18, 2009 3:29 pm


It all looks fine to me! Just one tiny thing; if being feminine is important to her, I don't see why she shortened her name. As traditionally only male riders do that it doesn't seem to fit with her dislike of being seen as less than womanly ^^

Also, as she's an Igen rider, you might want to write in her history and so on about the problems being a female blue rider has caused her <3
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