Okay, so I'm writing a new script. It's called "Disenchanted". I'm gonna give you guys the first bit of it. Tell me what you think!
Disenchanted
By Kelly Eatinger
(Lights up. Curtains unveil a girl sitting in an empty classroom, sighing. This girl is Hayley Crowheart.)
Hayley: (in mocking voice)”Oh, don’t worry! Everything will be fine!” (in regular voice) Yeah, right Mom. I come to Los Angeles all the way from Maine, and my mom thinks I’ll make friends! Good one Mom, you really had me fooled. (sighs) Well, I should probably get out of here. (gets up and walks, but runs into teacher, Mr. Volerro)
Volerro: (looks at Hayley, confused) Miss, are you lost?
Hayley: Kind of. I’m new here and….I don’t know where my first class is. His name is Mr. Vole- - -
Volerro: (cuts in) I’m Mr. Volerro. (holds out hand) You must be the new student, Hayley…Crowheart!
Hayley: Yeah…(in a melancholy tone) That’s me…
Volerro: (in concerned tone) Well, it’s very nice to meet you, Miss Crowheart. You should probably find someone to mingle amongst…the bell hasn’t…
(bell rings)
Volerro: Never mind. I’m sure you’ll find someone to talk to.
Hayley: (sighs and tries to smile) Yeah, I guess. I’ll try. Thanks, Mr.V. (sits down in desk)
(students walk in, two notice Hayley and sit down next to her, Jenny Brinks and Veronica Jones)
Jenny: Hey! You’re new, aren’t you?
Veronica: (shakes head) Well, of course she’s new, brainiac, we’ve never seen her before. (Looks to Hayley) Hi, I’m Veronica. The genius to your right is Jenny.
Jenny: Hey! (crosses arms and sticks out tongue, childishly)
Hayley: (lightens up and laughs) Hey, I’m Hayley. I’m from Maine.
Both: Maine???
Hayley: Yep.
Jenny: That’s a long ways from here in good old Los Angeles.
Veronica: Very good, Jenny! (pretends to pat her on head)
Jenny: Will you stop that? You don’t give me enough credit.
Hayley: (laughs a little harder): I’m guessing you guys are…
Veronica: That’s right…
Jenny: Best friends!
Hayley: (eyes widen) Okay…then. Thanks guys for actually talking to the new kid. I’ve always been so friendly, but I’m so far away from home.
Both: No problem.
(Veronica and Jenny sit down, both on opposite sides of Hayley and look back. They see the school rebel walk in, Aiden Morriarti)
Jenny: (taps Hayley on shoulder) Look, look, look! Aiden…coming to class on time?
Veronica: Weird…..
Hayley: (extremely confused) Who’s Aiden????
Both: Well………..he’s the school rebel.
Hayley: And he’s coming to class?
Jenny: I know, weird. I find it as much of a shock as you do.
Veronica: Yeah, it’s pretty out there if you ask me.
Aiden: (sits down behind Hayley and notices her) Hey…are you new?
Hayley: Is it that obvious?
Aiden: Kinda, especially since that you have your schedule out.
Hayley: (smacks forehead) Oh my god…
Jenny: Ouch.
Aiden: (laughs softly) Don’t worry. It’s no big deal. But, let me clue you in on something, there are some messed up people here. They’re known as th- - -
(Four girls come in, Vanessa, Amber, Carlie, and Sophia, the populars)
Vanessa: We’re here!!!
The Three Others: Yeah!
Aiden: (moans) The plastics.
Hayley: Ooh, they look super fun. (sticks out tongue)
Jenny: Yeah, they’re a real riot.
Veronica: I hate them so much.
Aiden: So much for making it subtle, Veronica.
Veronica: Well! They’re just snobbish freaks who only care about their looks and money.
Sophia: (sits across from Aiden) Yeah. You got a problem with it?
Aiden: (moans) Yeah, actually I do.
Carlie: (walks up and ruffles Aiden’s hair) Sophie, don’t be so harsh on Aiden. He is after all…the hottest guy in school.
Aiden: I am?
Hayley: What?
Jenny: What the…
Veronica: (makes confused hand motions)
Aiden: Whoa, whoa, whoa. Who decided this.
Vanessa and Amber: Us!!
(Mr. Vollero stands up and shushes class)
Volerro: Alright, alright, that’s enough! Everyone sit down.
(The “Plastics” sit down in back, and Sophia follows)
Vollero: Alright, so welcome back after a long Labor Day weekend. I’m sure you all have fascinating stories…especially you, Miss Crowheart. (smiles and looks to Hayley, then back to class) Students, we have a new student! Say hello to Hayley Crowheart.
(class says “Hi”, “Hello”, or whatever, then turns back to Vollero)
Vollero: Okay. Who has an interesting story?
Amber: (raises her hand up quickly) Ooh! Ooh! I do!
Vollero: (sighs and rolls his eyes) Yes, Miss Truscero?
Amber: (stands up and runs to front of classroom) Okay, so something life changing happened to me. It’s pretty amazing. It was the most thrilling thing ever. So exhilarating, I can’t even begin to describe it…
Aiden: Get on with it, Amber.
Amber: (glares at Aiden, then back to class) I…..got…..a new car! It’s a fabulous 2007 Lexus and it’s in perfect condition!
Volerro: (angry) That was your life-changing experience??
Amber: (nods with pride) Uh-huh!
Volerro: (shakes his head and sighs) Go sit down, Miss Truscero. We’ve heard enough of your “exhilaration”(says exhilaration in mock tone)
(Amber goes and sits back down)
Volerro: Wow. Okay then. Anyone else?
Disenchanted
By Kelly Eatinger
(Lights up. Curtains unveil a girl sitting in an empty classroom, sighing. This girl is Hayley Crowheart.)
Hayley: (in mocking voice)”Oh, don’t worry! Everything will be fine!” (in regular voice) Yeah, right Mom. I come to Los Angeles all the way from Maine, and my mom thinks I’ll make friends! Good one Mom, you really had me fooled. (sighs) Well, I should probably get out of here. (gets up and walks, but runs into teacher, Mr. Volerro)
Volerro: (looks at Hayley, confused) Miss, are you lost?
Hayley: Kind of. I’m new here and….I don’t know where my first class is. His name is Mr. Vole- - -
Volerro: (cuts in) I’m Mr. Volerro. (holds out hand) You must be the new student, Hayley…Crowheart!
Hayley: Yeah…(in a melancholy tone) That’s me…
Volerro: (in concerned tone) Well, it’s very nice to meet you, Miss Crowheart. You should probably find someone to mingle amongst…the bell hasn’t…
(bell rings)
Volerro: Never mind. I’m sure you’ll find someone to talk to.
Hayley: (sighs and tries to smile) Yeah, I guess. I’ll try. Thanks, Mr.V. (sits down in desk)
(students walk in, two notice Hayley and sit down next to her, Jenny Brinks and Veronica Jones)
Jenny: Hey! You’re new, aren’t you?
Veronica: (shakes head) Well, of course she’s new, brainiac, we’ve never seen her before. (Looks to Hayley) Hi, I’m Veronica. The genius to your right is Jenny.
Jenny: Hey! (crosses arms and sticks out tongue, childishly)
Hayley: (lightens up and laughs) Hey, I’m Hayley. I’m from Maine.
Both: Maine???
Hayley: Yep.
Jenny: That’s a long ways from here in good old Los Angeles.
Veronica: Very good, Jenny! (pretends to pat her on head)
Jenny: Will you stop that? You don’t give me enough credit.
Hayley: (laughs a little harder): I’m guessing you guys are…
Veronica: That’s right…
Jenny: Best friends!
Hayley: (eyes widen) Okay…then. Thanks guys for actually talking to the new kid. I’ve always been so friendly, but I’m so far away from home.
Both: No problem.
(Veronica and Jenny sit down, both on opposite sides of Hayley and look back. They see the school rebel walk in, Aiden Morriarti)
Jenny: (taps Hayley on shoulder) Look, look, look! Aiden…coming to class on time?
Veronica: Weird…..
Hayley: (extremely confused) Who’s Aiden????
Both: Well………..he’s the school rebel.
Hayley: And he’s coming to class?
Jenny: I know, weird. I find it as much of a shock as you do.
Veronica: Yeah, it’s pretty out there if you ask me.
Aiden: (sits down behind Hayley and notices her) Hey…are you new?
Hayley: Is it that obvious?
Aiden: Kinda, especially since that you have your schedule out.
Hayley: (smacks forehead) Oh my god…
Jenny: Ouch.
Aiden: (laughs softly) Don’t worry. It’s no big deal. But, let me clue you in on something, there are some messed up people here. They’re known as th- - -
(Four girls come in, Vanessa, Amber, Carlie, and Sophia, the populars)
Vanessa: We’re here!!!
The Three Others: Yeah!
Aiden: (moans) The plastics.
Hayley: Ooh, they look super fun. (sticks out tongue)
Jenny: Yeah, they’re a real riot.
Veronica: I hate them so much.
Aiden: So much for making it subtle, Veronica.
Veronica: Well! They’re just snobbish freaks who only care about their looks and money.
Sophia: (sits across from Aiden) Yeah. You got a problem with it?
Aiden: (moans) Yeah, actually I do.
Carlie: (walks up and ruffles Aiden’s hair) Sophie, don’t be so harsh on Aiden. He is after all…the hottest guy in school.
Aiden: I am?
Hayley: What?
Jenny: What the…
Veronica: (makes confused hand motions)
Aiden: Whoa, whoa, whoa. Who decided this.
Vanessa and Amber: Us!!
(Mr. Vollero stands up and shushes class)
Volerro: Alright, alright, that’s enough! Everyone sit down.
(The “Plastics” sit down in back, and Sophia follows)
Vollero: Alright, so welcome back after a long Labor Day weekend. I’m sure you all have fascinating stories…especially you, Miss Crowheart. (smiles and looks to Hayley, then back to class) Students, we have a new student! Say hello to Hayley Crowheart.
(class says “Hi”, “Hello”, or whatever, then turns back to Vollero)
Vollero: Okay. Who has an interesting story?
Amber: (raises her hand up quickly) Ooh! Ooh! I do!
Vollero: (sighs and rolls his eyes) Yes, Miss Truscero?
Amber: (stands up and runs to front of classroom) Okay, so something life changing happened to me. It’s pretty amazing. It was the most thrilling thing ever. So exhilarating, I can’t even begin to describe it…
Aiden: Get on with it, Amber.
Amber: (glares at Aiden, then back to class) I…..got…..a new car! It’s a fabulous 2007 Lexus and it’s in perfect condition!
Volerro: (angry) That was your life-changing experience??
Amber: (nods with pride) Uh-huh!
Volerro: (shakes his head and sighs) Go sit down, Miss Truscero. We’ve heard enough of your “exhilaration”(says exhilaration in mock tone)
(Amber goes and sits back down)
Volerro: Wow. Okay then. Anyone else?
