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Macabre Forever

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PostPosted: Sat Sep 05, 2009 4:43 pm


Everything is dying;
Time presses,
hopes decaying.
All your morals,
just petty lies,
vain attempts,
to save yourself,
from suicide.
Raised on your knees,
forced to submit,
society' propaganda,
heads full of,
false security.
Endless processions,
of diluted accomplishment,
marching all at once,
into eternity.
Death awaits;
Heaven is a place,
where the screams,
of living prayer,
echo endlessly.
Acquire your shame,
guilt,love and hate,
prepare your dreams,
for the grave.
PostPosted: Sun Sep 06, 2009 4:27 pm


Wow;deep. I love it! Nice choice of words.

Lilithmae

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Alanora Calaran

PostPosted: Sun Sep 06, 2009 10:17 pm


I really like this one. Of all your works I've read so far, it flows the best. =)

The only thing I'd nitpick about it is your use of commas after every line. Not every single one needs it on the end! If you are unsure whether the end of a line needs punctuation, try reading it like a sentence. Every pause you make would warrant punctuation at the end of a line. That's something they just don't explain when they cover poetry in school. =)
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