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 Posted: Sat Sep 05, 2009 10:55 am
The weight of a thousand worlds weighs heavy on your
shoulders.
The breath of a billion souls passes lightly through your
lungs.
The sight of a googleplex of viewpoints passes by your
eyes.
The feeling of innumerable touches take flight on your
fingers.
All is one; one is all. Ball in it all; all in a
ball.
But lost if you drop it.
----------------------------------Writer's Note----------------------------------
This was inspired by a book. If you can guess which one, you get a virtual cookie.
I wasn't looking for a reason to use googleplex, it just kind of came to me as the best word to use in that line.
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Posted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 5:13 pm
I like this one. Although I don't have much experience reading/critiquing poetry, this one stands out to me.
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Posted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 6:23 pm
That's an interesting one of your poems. No idea what book it's based on. Reminds me of the mythological story of the man holding the world on his shoulders
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Posted: Thu Sep 10, 2009 10:54 am
Thanks, I'm glad you both like it.
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