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Autumnvicky2

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 04, 2009 8:19 am


Name: Oasea

Age: 17

Sex: Female

Sexual Orientation: Straight

Craft: N/A

Rank: None

Physical Description: Curvy with wide hips and a soft build. She is weak-muscled and in need of exercise. She's of average height and weight. She has an egg-shaped face with a good amount of freckles. She has a mole on her left cheek that she's self-concious about. Her skin is creamy white and doesn't tan easily.

Her hair color is somewhere between light brown and strawberry blond (which looks almost reddish orange). Her hair is straight and short, cut to a length of just below the ears. She has honey-brown eyes, a small nose, full lips and a slender neck. She is missing one of her two front teeth, giving her a gap-toothed smile. Her feet seem big while her hands are small and soft, unused to hard labor. She walks with a bounce in her step.

Today she chose to wear a red sleeveless top with red bead bracelets and red strapped sandals. Her shorts are sand-colored with side pockets. She always wears bright colors and likes to theme her outfits on one color at a time. She won't wear clothes with patterns on them. Wearing expensive clothes is a simple price to pay in order for her to look good at all times. Frequent baths keep her smelling nice.

Personality: This hypocritical girl has a case of Dr. Jackel and Mr. Hyde syndrome. She acts sweet, innocent, honest, and honorable. Those who see through her act can do nothing when it's hard to pin blame on her. She manipulates, lies, frames others to make herself look better. She's unafraid to plow people over while she moves on up the ladder of power and popularity.

Of course popularity means friends, and the benefits that come with them. (Favors, protection, company to drive away loneliness.) Using her well-practiced act she works hard to gain as many allies as possible, surrounding herself with a wide circle of company. If your good to her, she's good to you. Sometimes it's not always an act, sometimes she really does like you in which case she'll drag you up the popularity ladder with her! Her real friends join an elite inner circle of true friends she keeps close.

Enemies beware, her revenge comes subtly. If you accuse her of anything she acts neurotic, denies everything, cries, of course she would never do anything so mean! How could you accuse her of such things?! She'll use that upset to get rid of things she dislikes or fears. If someone does the job for her, even better!

She's squeamish, and seems to have several phobias. (No one knows if these fears are a way for her to get out of work or if their really true) These fears include but are not limited to spiderclaws, tunnelsnakes, bovine, goats, runners, pigs, canines, wherries and most of all fire lizards.

When she drops the act for once this girl is apathetic, and abrasive. She must have a good heart somewhere deep inside that search dragons can see but she doesn't often show it.

History: Her father left Igen Weyr after not impressing. He went into beastcraft, which became his lifestyle. He still boasts about their proud lineage of bronzeriders and still wears an purple bandanna to this day in honor of the gang he left behind. He eventually married and the couple were happy together. They both became beastcraft journeymen and focused all their efforts on a farm near Igen Hold.

She grew up loved and cared for by her parents. Life was alright on the farm, her phobias kept her from doing outdoor chores. She heard about the gangs at Igen Weyr from her father and wanted no part of them. Too male dominated and not enough chances to rise in rank. Even when she was searched by an Igen rider and found worthy she refused. She did want to be a dragonrider, just not part of a gang! Her parents were at a loss of what to do with her.

Eventually she was searched by a dragonrider from Ista and again found worthy. She asked them about life there, when she learned there were no gangs she gladly accepted the chance to become a dragonrider. Her father was disappointed but still proud that she was trying now. Off they went to her tropical island paradise! Or so she thought until she realized how crowded it was there.

Pets: None, their scary!

Other/Talents: List below...

1.) She can squirt water through the gap in her teeth with good aim.

2.) She has this odd quirk where she finishes most of her sentences with 'so...' (e.g. 'I've been to father and he said yes, so...').

Will this character be a candidate? Yes

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PostPosted: Fri Sep 04, 2009 6:16 pm


A very interesting character! And I think you've started out on the right foot. There's lots about her that I like. X3 You'll notice as you go on that there are going to be a lot of question marks. This is no reflection on you, it's just my way of critiquing things. I find that it helps me to be asked questions, and in providing the answers, am able to better understand my characters and figure out little bits that I hadn't thought about before. So, without further ado, the 20 Question Method. XD

- Appearance:
Seeing as she's from a family of beastcrafters, why is it that she's not used to work? I don't think that her parents could afford to let her sit around all day, and even if she wasn't doing anything to do with animals she would probably be doing some kind of work in the Hold. Washing dishes, carrying, fetching things, that sort of idea. If she avoided these kind of things, then what was she doing instead and why did she avoid the physical labour? Did she have no interest in any craft?

As more of a curiousity thing (since I read ahead to see if it was in the history) how did she lose one of her front teeth? Does this gap in her teeth make her self-conscious?

She also probably wouldn't have too many clothes to choose from, simply because her family are only beastcrafters. Though if she doesn't have any siblings, she could have more outfits than a normal girl of her station because of this. Just probably not anything too fancy. XD


- Personality:
First note is just a note. Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. XD

I would hesitate in making statements that take the attention away from the character and insist on reactions from other characters. Instead of saying others can "do nothing", focus instead on the things that she can do, because you have no idea what kind of person she'll encounter. There may be someone who can see through her and will pin the blame on her regardless.

You start out by describing the act that she puts on, but don't really spend much time on it. I'd imagine this is a carefully constructed Dr. Jekyll persona, but you've summed it up in four words. Is there more to this? I would focus on the good bits of her personality, or at least, the type of person she projects onto the world before you talk about the negative things she does when nobody's looking. XD Otherwise it doesn't look like she's got much to fall back on.

How is throwing a tantrum subtle? Her other reactions (lying, framing people) are definitely more subtle, but crying and becoming "neurotic" are definitely pretty in your face. I would also say that neurotic is too strong a word. You're giving her almost a mental illness kind of tantrum, which would be a mental weakness, which would mean she wouldn't be searched. Riders are not even supposed to have mild OCD, so neurosis is definitely a no go. XD I'd maybe just call it a tantrum. I'm not sure I understand your last sentence either. How does she use "that upset" to get rid of things that she dislikes? And how/why would someone do it for her? Does she encourage her friends to help her out of tight spots or vouch for her?

I like the squeamish trait. Very good flaw choice. <3

Why is she apathetic when she drops her act? For her to be apathetic almost suggests that she does this duel nature for no reason what so ever, and gets tired of it sometimes. And why abrasive? And why the insistence that she has a good heart? Dragons don't always Search good people. They just Search people who have the potential to be riders.


- History:
Does she have any siblings? If so, how are her relationships with them? If not, has being the only siblings made her spoiled or altered her views on things?

I'm not sure I understand why she wouldn't want to be a part of a gang. She would have had everything to gain if she Impressed a gold. There have also been female gang leaders (Iathe is a girl), so she could have worked her way up the social ladder to the top. Is there more to her not wanting to go to Igen?

And if she lives in Igen Hold, why would an Ista rider be Searching her? Riders tend to Search in the areas they protect.

Aaaand, I think that is all. Overall, a good character!

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PostPosted: Tue Sep 08, 2009 11:28 am


Name: Oasea

Age: 17

Sex: Female

Sexual Orientation: Straight

Craft: N/A

Rank: None

Physical Description: Curvy with wide hips and a feminine build. She's of average height and weight. She has an egg-shaped face with a good amount of freckles. Her skin is creamy white and doesn't tan easily. She is missing one of her two front teeth, giving her a gap-toothed smile she is self-concious about. She had been tripped by one of her brothers and busted her tooth on a rock.

Her hair color is somewhere between light brown and strawberry blond (which looks almost reddish orange). Her hair is straight and short, cut to a length of just below the ears. She has honey-brown eyes, a small nose, full lips and a slender neck. Her feet seem big while her hands are small and soft, unused to hard labor. She walks with a bounce in her step.

She doesn't have much in the way of clothes. Her family cannot afford bright colors or fancy patterns. Most of Oasea's clothes are hand-me-downs from her older siblings. She makes due with what she has. Today she's wearing a white short sleeved shirt that was too big for her, a yellow vest, and tan pants with patches sewn in.

Personality: This girl is hypocritical girl. The person she pretends to be would help you anytime, would listen to your problems and care, would act kind and respectful to others. She acts like someone honest and loyal. She'll act social, find ways to be the center of attention. She doesn't outwardly seem like a bad person. Her ultimate goal is to become popular.

Of course popularity means friends, and the benefits that come with them. (Favors, protection, company to drive away loneliness.) Using her well-practiced act she works hard to gain as many allies as possible, surrounding herself with a wide circle of company. If your good to her, she's good to you. Sometimes it's not always an act, sometimes she really does like you in which case she'll drag you up the popularity ladder with her! Her real friends join an inner circle of true friends she keeps close.

Some will see through the act and know she's only doing it in an attempt to get what she wants. When confronted she denies everything, acts shocked and appalled that you would accuse her of anything, manipulates, lies, frames others to make herself look better. She avoids physical fighting, preferring to keep herself out of trouble.

If threatened she would turn to her friends and allies for protection. She encourages them to help her out when she needs it, uses them to get her out of sticky situations, asks them to vouch for her if necessary.

She's squeamish, and seems to have several phobias. (No one knows if these fears are a way for her to get out of work or if their really true) These fears include but are not limited to spiderclaws, tunnelsnakes, bovine, goats, runners, pigs, canines, wherries and most of all fire lizards.

History: Her father Bubideer left Igen Weyr after not impressing. He went into beastcraft, which became his lifestyle. He eventually married a woman named Fifine and the couple were happy together. They both became beastcraft journeymen and focused all their efforts on a farm near Igen Hold.

They had three sons and one daughter. They loved and cared for their children together. Oasea was spoiled as the baby of the family. Her older brothers were jealous of her always getting her way. It became a bitter sibling rivalry. They teased and pranked her, she grew up finding ways to get them away from her, by getting them in trouble with their parents. She soon learned that she could use her act to get her all kinds of things she wanted.

Life was alright on the farm, her parents managed the farm, her brothers took care of the animals since she was too scared of them and she did mostly indoor chores. She wasn't really interested in any kind of craft. She wouldn't become an apprentice, she didn't want to be one until she knew for sure what she wanted to do with her life.

Eventually she was searched by a dragonrider from Igen and found worthy. Her father tried to discourage her from going, claiming that it was a big wastse of time filled with sad disappointment. Her mother disagreed, claiming that it was an honor she should not pass up. That if there were any chance of her becoming a dragonrider then she should take it.

She agreed to go, determined to change her papa's mind by making him proud of her when she did become a dragonrider. She never impressed a gold but she was happy with her lifemate just the way they were! No matter what anyone said about girls impressing greens or blues.

Pets: None, their scary!

Other/Talents: List below...

1.) She can squirt water through the gap in her teeth with good aim.

2.) She has this odd quirk where she finishes most of her sentences with 'so...' (e.g. 'I've been to father and he said yes, so...').

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DRAGON INFORMATION

Name: Kiilath

Do you want this rider considered for other dragons: Yes
PostPosted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 6:15 am


^^ She sounds much better now. If you haven't yet submitted her, it would be useful to know how old she was when she Impressed, and therefore how old her dragon would be. For it to be an adult now, I'd guess she must have Impressed in her early teens? In any case, her dragon would still be very young, and it might be nice to note that as well.

Other than that she sounds fine, but note that at Igen a female rider on a green or blue would have a very hard time becoming popular.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 10:02 am


I've submitted her in a premade form. 3nodding If that doesn't work, she'll become a candidate.

Good idea about the age thing, I'll remember that. smile

As for the popularity, she would have been expected to try and impress a gold, but she failed so she will have to work harder for everything, I never expected her new life as a dragon rider to be easy. Makes for better RP when there's a good challenge whee
PostPosted: Wed Sep 09, 2009 11:40 am


^^ Indeed!

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