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PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 10:07 am


I've been reading over and over and over the forty or so chapters I wrote for the story, and each time I wonder a little at how I could have been such a... Bad writer.

But I know everyone had to start somewhere, and considering its only been six years, I can say the improvement is tremendous.

For anybody who wishes to compare what I have now with what I originally wrote, I have the entire book saved on two different hard drives, and I can show you the difference from when I just started writing, and now.

In the mean time, please read the new chapters, and let me know what you think of my writing as it is now. I'll post the chapters basically as I finish rewriting them.

I'm also making revisions to the storyline, so its taking me a little while longer than I thought it would. Instead of just adding to what I already had, I'm making some bigger changes, and its well worth the wait, I assure you.

This is my magnum opus, so no time spent working on it is wasted time, and making sure I'm making the right choice with my storyline is well worth it to me.

Please comment. Below will be the Prologue.
PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 10:20 am


Prologue

Silanis quietly and thoughtfully traversed the streets of her hometown, Clover Hill. The young woman was coming from her friend Kaiana’s apartment in one of the ebendsahdc buildings - large, multi-level abodes, which housed many families. These were scattered through normal houses, with a few things like two schools, a market place, and city hall. Her house was in the northeast end of town, and Kaiana’s building was just in the middle. She was in the market place, about ten minutes from her own house, which was right on the outskirts of the market place and had a storefront attached to it. The two girls had been working on a dress for Kaiana, a long gown for her to wear to her twentieth birthday dinner - an event to mark her full adulthood. She herself was only eighteen, still a few years off from such an event, though she longed for it. It was coming along nicely, but Silanis had to be home around sunset, and it was fast approaching.

Shifting her bag from one shoulder to the other, her long brown hair getting caught under it. Silanis looked behind herself as her head was jerked slightly back, some of her hair . Fixing her hair, she felt as though she were being followed, but there was no one else around that she could see. Just the same, she started to walk a little faster. The townspeople she trusted, she had known them all her life, but if there was someone from out of town around, she didn’t want to take a chance in them being trustworthy. As she rounded a corner, the toe of her boot struck a small metal object. Blinking to clear her vision just a little, she knelt down to pick up the box-like object and study it, her silver eyes catching the green of her gloves as she did so.

It was small enough she could fit it in her pocket and was covered in intricate engravings of vines and flowers, a seam running through the middle as though it could open. Her fingers became just a little sore as she tried, and eventually she gave up. There were three buttons on the top, and an inscription on the bottom, but she wasn’t about to try to figure out what for while she was still out on the street. Something fell behind her, and she turned to catch a glimpse of lavender zooming out of sight. Rather than follow it, Silanis took this opportunity to run quickly in the direction of her own home, slipping the small, ornate box into her bag as she did so.

Even in her rush, she was able to note the beauty of the town at sunset; the purples, oranges, pinks, and blues all mingling and setting a mood of intense elegance upon the façades of each and every building. Especially among the quaint booths, tables, and small tents; this made up the market place, and marked her being very close to home.

Clover Hill itself was a fair-sized town, on the Gandaran continent. It was roughly one day on horseback from the ocean in the North, and just around eight weeks from the sea in the South. The sea in the West was about two weeks away, and the ocean in the East was roughly five. This meant that Silanis was at the top of the continent, and in the months of shorter days it never got quite cold enough to snow, though sometimes Silanis wished it would; she’d heard stories that it had done so in the past, and longed to see the snow, rather than just hear stories of it. Clover Hill, it seemed, had gotten quite warm; indeed there was a sort of tropics in the ocean to the West, smaller than that of the Southeast, and everything was generally very warm on Gandara. Of course, Silanis had heard tell that it snowed in the South, but she had also heard that on the opposite side of the world the snow was heavy in the North.

Silanis had heard fantastical stories of Queen Hegunini of the Royale Mega-City, near the ByTalna cliffs of Hundr Buma to the East, who ruled a kingdom of snow. It was said that only the very bottom of her continent, near the bridge that connected Hundr Buma to Nylia below, was desert. This was the Skydragora, and it connected to the Kadragora at the top of Nylia. There were two other deserts on Nylia, the Wadragora, and Fydragora. On her own continent, Gandara, there was the Mandragora, on the other side of Lake Xodaik, of which a small river arose from under the ground about two miles East of Clover Hill, near the edge of the Sephirôt forest. In that forest, the further East you got, the safer it became. It seemed there were creatures that stuck to the Western half of the forest, and even the hunters dared not go in except in great numbers with greater weaponry.

Finally Silanis came to her own house, making her way to the side door rather than going through the storefront that made up half their house. Letting her parents know she was home, Silanis entered her room and sank quietly into her bed, kicking off her boots so she could relax.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 12:20 pm


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Prologue

Silanis quietly and thoughtfully traversed the streets of her hometown, Clover Hill. The young woman was coming from her friend Kaiana’s apartment in one of the ebendsahdc buildings - large, multi-level abodes, which housed many families. These were scattered through normal houses, with a few things like two schools, a market place, and city hall. Her house was in the northeast end of town, and Kaiana’s building was just in the middle. She was in the market place, about ten minutes from her own house, which was right on the outskirts of the market place and had a storefront attached to it. The two girls had been working on a dress for Kaiana, a long gown for her to wear to her twentieth birthday dinner - an event to mark her full adulthood. She herself was only eighteen, still a few years off from such an event, though she longed for it. It was coming along nicely, but Silanis had to be home around sunset, and it was fast approaching.

Shifting her bag from one shoulder to the other, her long brown hair getting caught under it. Silanis looked behind herself as her head was jerked slightly back, some of her hear . Fixing her hair, she felt as though she were being followed, but there was no one else around that she could see. Just the same, she started to walk a little faster. The townspeople she trusted, she had known them all her life, but if there was someone from out of town around, she didn’t want to take a chance in them being trustworthy. As she rounded a corner, the toe of her boot struck a small metal object. Blinking to clear her vision just a little, she knelt down to pick up the box-like object and study it, her silver eyes catching the green of her gloves as she did so.

It was small enough she could fit it in her pocket and was covered in intricate engravings of vines and flowers, a seam running through the middle as though it could open. Her fingers became just a little sore as she tried, and eventually she gave up. There were three buttons on the bottom, and an inscription on the top, but she wasn’t about to try to figure out what for while she was still out on the street. Something fell behind her, and she turned to catch a glimpse of lavender zooming out of sight. Rather than follow it, Silanis took this opportunity to run quickly in the direction of her own home, slipping the small, ornate box into her bag as she did so.

Even in her rush, she was able to note the beauty of the town at sunset; the purples, oranges, pinks, and blues all mingling and setting a mood of intense elegance upon the façades of each and every building. Especially among the quaint booths, tables, and small tents; this made up the market place, and marked her being very close to home.

Clover Hill itself was a fair-sized town, on the Gandaran continent. It was roughly one day on horseback from the ocean in the North, and just around eight weeks from the sea in the South. The sea in the West was about two weeks away, and the ocean in the East was roughly five. This meant that Silanis was at the top of the continent, and in the months of shorter days it never got quite cold enough to snow, though sometimes Silanis wished it would; she’d heard stories that it had done so in the past, and longed to see the snow, rather than just hear stories of it. Clover Hill, it seemed, had gotten quite warm; indeed there was a sort of tropics in the ocean to the West, smaller than that of the Southeast, and everything was generally very warm on Gandara. Of course, Silanis had heard tell that it snowed in the South, but she had also heard that on the opposite side of the world the snow was heavy in the North.

Silanis had heard fantastical stories of Queen Hegunini of the Royale Mega-City, near the ByTalna cliffs of Hundr Buma to the East, who ruled a kingdom of snow. It was said that only the very bottom of her continent, near the bridge that connected Hundr Buma to Nylia below, was desert. This was the Skydragora, and it connected to the Kadragora at the top of Nylia. There were two other deserts on Nylia, the Wadragora, and Fydragora. On her own continent, Gandara, there was the Mandragora, on the other side of Lake Xodaik, of which a small river arose from under the ground about two miles East of Clover Hill, near the edge of the Sephirôt forest. In that forest, the further East you got, the safer it became. It seemed there were creatures that stuck to the Western half of the forest, and even the hunters dared not go in except in great numbers with greater weaponry.

Finally Silanis came to her own house, making her way to the side door rather than going through the storefront that made up half their house. Letting her parents know she was home, Silanis entered her room and sank quietly into her bed, kicking off her boots so she could relax.


Other than the slight typing mistake that I have put in bold for you, the prologue is excellent.
You have quite a way with words, and I am left wanting to read more after just that short extract of writing.

I think my favourite part of the extract is your description of the tiny ornate box, it sounds beautiful, and very intriguing. I want to read on so I can find out what it is!!
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PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 1:44 pm


Thanks, I fixed that typo. I'm glad to hear you like the prologue. I've got a few more chapters, I can post them up for you all at once, if you like? I've also got a drawing of the box that I can scan in for you. Its supposed to be the cover image, once I finish the book. Well, finish rewriting, anyhow.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:37 pm


Tommy Dionysus
Thanks, I fixed that typo. I'm glad to hear you like the prologue. I've got a few more chapters, I can post them up for you all at once, if you like? I've also got a drawing of the box that I can scan in for you. Its supposed to be the cover image, once I finish the book. Well, finish rewriting, anyhow.


Oooh, that would be excellent 3nodding
And I would also love to see the box at some point too if you're not too busy to do that!

You'll have to let me know when you've finished the book and got it published, I would sure love to buy a copy from you.
PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:39 pm


Thank you so much! I'll find the art book I drew it in, and scan it in!

And I'll get to posting more for you to read, in just a sec!

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:41 pm


Chapter One

After eating dinner with her parents Silanis returned to her room, her ferret kicking up a little bit of a racket. Taking her food bowl and filling it, Silanis cooed to her ferret, Libra, and scratched under her chin just a little. Libra licked at her fingers, and then ravenously dug into her food. Silanis giggled softly before going into her bag to grab the small box she had found on her way home. Upon further inspection it looked mechanical, like some of the safes and jewelry boxes she had seen when she had visited the market at Lakshûr to the South when she was younger. This meant that the three buttons on the top were probably some sort of code, which meant there were only so many combination's to try before she got the sequence correct. Turning it over, she took another peek at the inscription. It seemed inconsequential, trifling. One son comes around; millions cannot stand to his power. Maybe it meant something, and maybe it didn’t. She thought on it quietly, trying to decide its usefulness in opening the box, but it made no sense.

Turning the box over and over to study it, she considered what her options were. Then, while she was about to give up, she noted the buttons were colored and something in her mind clicked. One son… Son… Sun! Of course! Her mind raced as she made the connection, and she scarce knew what she was doing before she pressed the yellow button. Hoping she was right, she held her breath and watched. Nothing happened, and her heart sank as she had felt for sure that she had figured it out.

When she turned the box back over to look at the inscription again and ponder it, however, her eyes widened and her breath hitched in her throat. With a choked yelp she dropped it. The words had changed somehow, and as far as she knew, there was no technology for something like that. Libra looked up from her food lazily, sniffed the air, and went back to her bowl with what seemed like a shrug.

Tentatively, Silanis picked the box back up and looked at the inscription to be sure her eyes hadn’t been playing tricks on her. There it was, defiantly staring back at her as if it had every right to say something different, and she couldn’t explain the feelings that evoked in her. There was no way, no conceivable way, that those words could have possibly changed when she pressed the button; she had never heard of anything like that.

But it was another useless sentence that seemed of little consequence, and Silanis was almost certain now that this was some sort of game of riddles, despite none of them being actual questions. Considering this new sentence carefully she remembered back to her childhood, visiting the fair in Grenview to the West. To the riddling competition that took place. They took the game very seriously, it was one of the most ancient, and she remembered hearing somewhere that riddles had been used for everything from a test of wits to making a wager to save your life. What could this one mean, then, by stating quite uselessly “see shells on the beach, and gulls in the sky?” The sheer irrelevance of it was nigh infuriating, and she was, in spite of the shock of it, rather displeased with how this box seemed to be working. Reason dictated that she shouldn’t hit a random button, for fear of what might happen were she to get the answer wrong, but yet she could not guess on her own just yet as to the correct answer. It only made sense that you would see shells on a beach and gulls in the sky, and yet the incontrovertible sentence seemed to manage a manner of ambiguity to it, which even still eluded her.

Silanis moved to take a break, shuffling through an old book of riddles to see if there were any of these sorts. As she flipped through the pages, lounging back on her bed with the box next to her, she didn’t seem to find anything of importance. This line still befuddled her, and she was growing impatient with it fast. What did it mean? She was tempted to throw the box at her large pile of stuffed dolls in the corner, but held back, fearing her aim not so good. In a huff she opened a dresser drawer and aimlessly started to ruffle through her clothing. She came upon a bathing suit at the bottom, and remembered the times her mom had taken her to the port at the tip of the peninsula, Port Canchâs, and she had gone swimming at the beach. Then it clicked in, and it took her a moment to realize she now had the answer. It was water that was what had been eluding her. She pushed the blue button and quickly turned it over to see what new riddle had taken its place in the inscription.

The words that awaited her confused her even more than the previous. It said, “The blade is not sharp, but can be very long.” This infuriated Silanis, because she knew nothing of weaponry, and there was no way she could ever figure out the answer to this question. Regardless, she began to list off all the weapons she could remember in reference to the word blade. Her list was terribly short, and not long after she realized none of what she had come up with corresponded with a color anyway. In a huff she sat upon her bed with her arms around her knees.

Why did the riddle have to be about weapons, she wondered, when that was one of the things she knew nothing of? She wanted desperately to see what would be on the inside at the end of it all, but of this she had no clue. What kind blade made sense with a color, and was not sharp? It couldn’t be blue again, but there was no silver or gray to push, and none of the colors would mix to make it. She closed here eyes, feeling very silly, and tried to clear her mind. Who did she know that she could ask about such things? Unfortunately there was no one whom she was able to think of off the top of her head.

But of course there had to be some simple answer to this, and she was just thinking much too hard on it. This couldn’t really be so impossible as it was making itself out to be, and she would surely be able to think of an answer on her own in time. She heaved a sigh, getting up to change into her pyajama’s, and going through her own nightly ritual of bidding goodnight to the moon and stars. Perhaps she would be able to think more clearly in the morning, after breakfast and a quick run to wake herself up.
PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:43 pm


Chapter Two

As Silanis slept, the box lying off to the side of her as though it were forgotten, what seemed like a small, lilac-haired child with large purple wings made her way into the room through the window. Looking about the room, she wondered where she could hide for the morning, where Silanis would not see her. Wings aflutter in the darkness, and her eyes fell on first the ferret in its cage, followed by the large accumulation of stuffed toys given to Silanis over the years.

The faerie sighed, seeing no place else but beneath the bed, and slid underneath it. This girl would see through any of my spells, I think, thought the faerie, because my magic is not much stronger than that of the inscription. It was only a hope she had, that she would not betray her own location in her excitement come morning.

-----

When the young woman awoke in the morning, she blearily made her way to her closet, choosing from the pile of messily folded clothing what was, for her, a normal outfit. It consisted of a knee-length white cotton skirt, a pair of blue-and-white striped stockings, and a dark green blouse with a light blue bodice over it, and a dark green jacket to top it all off. Stretching, she tried to better rouse herself, so that she could tackle the riddle that had defeated her once before.

From the darkness under the bed, the faerie lay asleep, having been unable to wait until morning to see Silanis awaken. The ferret scratched about in her cage, waiting impatiently for her breakfast, and Silanis looked over with a smile.

“Come now, little Libra.” Silanis said. “Give it a moment, and I’ll go get your food, aye?”

Libra kicked up a bit of a fuss when she left the room, making no small amount of noise in the process. The faerie awoke while Silanis was getting food for the ferret, and looked about from her shelter, forgetting for a moment where she was, and why. When she saw Silanis reenter the room, she remembered. This girl had found the little box, and she was here to see if it would be opened or not.

Silanis walked back over to the bed, after giving Libra more food, and picked the little metal contraption up off the bed, careful not to hit any buttons. Smiling to herself, she reread the riddle inscribed upon the bottom.

“For a moment there I thought I had been dreaming.” The brunette mused aloud, thinking over the sentence that presented so much trouble. “The blade is not sharp, but can grow very long… Meh… Weapons.”

The child-like creature under the bed left out a soft sigh, knowing that Silanis was thinking entirely the wrong thing for the answer; at this rate she would never get it right. Another lost cause, it seemed, who would never open the box, and eventually lose it. The little faerie-girl felt a little sad, she had thought this time someone would open the box for sure.

Silanis stood there with one hand on her hip, looking at the small box in her hand. What could the inscription be talking about this time? There were no blades that corresponded with the colors of the buttons, or any color those colors would make. Red and yellow made orange, blue and yellow made green, and red and blue made purple. As far as she knew, there were no orange or purple blades, and the only ‘blades’ that were green were…

”Of course!” Silanis exclaimed, all but kicking herself and laughing. “Grass blades get long, but they won’t cut you.”

Why she had not thought of that before was a mystery, but she had the answer now. All she could do was hope that pushing two buttons at once would not reset the box.

Carefully, she pushed the blue and yellow buttons at the same time, holding her breath while she waited to see what would happen. There was a moment of disappointment, when nothing did happen, but she also felt a little grateful; for fear, she may have had a heart attack if something had.

-----

Turning the box back over, she once more read the inscription, and it went on like this for some time before she finally came to a little bit of a stump-er. Vampire, Bat, Rat, Vermin. It wasn’t even in the form of a question, or an actual sentence; just four words that seemed to have nothing to do with each other besides a little bit of a rhyme-like quality. What on Erve could it be? In a huff, she slumped down to the floor, staring at her feet in disdain. It was then that she heard the hushed breathing of an excited child, and tensed.

“Who is there?” A stupid question, but all she could think of. “Who’s in my room?” Her head whipped in the direction of the bed and window, but she looked past the two indigo eyes beneath the low bed. So the faeries magic hid her well enough, it seemed.

“I don’t think you could comprehend my existence,” said the faerie, plainly, “for you could barely comprehend the magic of the box.” This only upset Silanis.

“What the hell are you talking about?” was the first thing to leave her lips, and it made the faerie want to laugh. “Who are you, what the hell are you doing in my room?” Then, as an afterthought, “where in the hell are you?”

“A faerie.” Said the small creature, not dancing around the answers. “Called Wolfe, by those who know me.”

“Wolfe?” Silanis asked. “Faerie?” What was going on? What was she plunged into with little warning, to be left dazed and confused by a small box and a voice that claimed to be a faerie? This insanity could not be real, there had to be some kind of joke to it all. It was here the faerie took an opportunity of Silanis’ eyes being closed to crawl from beneath the bed, her wings once more aflutter, so that she hovered above the ground seemingly effortlessly.

When the young brunette opened her eyes to dispute the existence of faeries, they were met with the most amazing sight she had ever imagined. There, in her room, not more than an arms-length away, was a real faerie, wings, and all. Everything that Silanis had known to be true as a child came back to her in a rush that nearly knocked her over, and she became momentarily dizzy as it all sorted itself out.

“Are you alright?” Wolfe asked, dropping to the floor and allowing her wings to fold; all ten small, lilac appendages folding neatly behind her. Resting a hand on her shoulder, there was a genuine look of concern on her face.

”I… You’re real?” Not even a word on her own state, just the question could be articulated. “You’re real. That can’t be.” Silanis was in a state of shock beyond anything she’d been through before, and it was hard for her to take this lightly. “I was told it was all silly stories. Was I lied to?”

“Yes, but not deliberately.” A smile graced the faeries lips as she replied. “We’re in hiding, no one is supposed to know we exist.”

”But then…” Her mind cleared a bit with each passing moment. “Elves, half-breeds, sylphs, Gods… They’re real, too?” It was stunning to think all those wonderful things from the stories of her childhood actually existed.

”Yes. Everything you heard tell of, within a certain amount of reason, is real.” There was a pause as Wolfe thought of the best way to explain this simply. “Basically, everything good you heard of is real, but so is everything bad. This is because its all a matter of opinion on what good and bad really are in the world of the preternatural, the supernatural, and the inhuman.”

“If no one is supposed to know you’re real, why are there stories?” It was more than a valid question, she felt. “And why are you here?”

The faerie must have felt it was a valid question as well, for she paused at great length to think it over. For a moment, Silanis didn’t think she would get an answer. Then; “Because you have found something of great importance to me.” Wolfe leaned over to pick the box out of her hand, and looked at it curiously. “It’s been many years since I have seen this.”

”I’m sorry.” Silanis said, not really understanding what Wolfe was getting at. “You can have it back, if it’s yours…” She felt a little bit bad, now, for taking something that hadn’t been hers to take. “Oh, but!”

Wolfe looked at her, puzzled, and shrugged her shoulders in question. “I don’t want the box, no. Its yours to keep, if you can open it.”

”Then, that means… It was you I saw darting out of sight last night, then. Wasn’t it?”

Wolfe looked at Silanis for a moment, and then shook her head. “I didn’t think you would be able to see me.” With a shrug she took a seat on the bed, and blinked. “Your own magic is stronger than I’d anticipated. You should try to train it, it may be useful.”

“I don’t have magic.” The brunette said, hastily. “I’m only human, I have no magic.”

“Silanis, Silanis.” Wolfe said, looking around the room. “Listen, everyone has magic. It’s a matter of figuring out how to use it. In the old days, all humans knew magic, and everything was good, and happy, and we could roam freely…” The faerie trailed off.

“What happened, then? What changed?”

Her tone changed then, low and dark. “Zaçic.”

The name Silanis knew and had been taught to love. Zaçic was the man everyone believed lived as the Son of the One True God, who spread love and peace through the lands over three hundred yeas before she was born. What the hell was going on?

“Surely you can’t mean the Zaçic?”

“Ah, but I do.” Motioning for Silanis to sit next to her, Wolfe got ready for an explanation. The girl deserved the truth. “He showed up, and suddenly associating with fae-folk and Elves was against their Religion, and you would end up in Hell for using magic.

“The old Gods were shunned, pushed aside, and called demons. Maenads were arrested and labeled witches and burned, Dryads were cut down for fear they were forest witches…Elves were shot on sight, simply because their ears were marked a sign of witches mating with the Devil.

“Halflings were about the only ones not completely destroyed, because they were basically smaller humans, and simply labeled vertically challenged. And only because some human women had given birth to human children who’s bodies never really grew up. Dwarves had it easy too, only forced to work in the mines they loved anyways, because they were too rowdy for the surface.

"Zaçic is a powerful wizard.” Wolfe paused and rested her head on her left hand for a moment, remembering the things that man had done over the years. “He’s been in control of politics for centuries, behind the scenes, in the shadows, just out of arms reach.

"He holds a powerful spell over the world, even to this day, weaving webs of deceit and power through the decades, sometimes more involved, other times hiding and working his glamor. He doesn’t die, but he can be killed. I’m not even sure he’s human, to be honest. I think he’s the demon.”

Silanis gaped at the faerie, everything she’d been taught from childhood smashed to pieces, and wasn’t sure if she believed it or not. In the end, she knew in her heart to be true that everything she had believed in, in her childhood, was the truth; not what her parents had told her about such things, about Zaçic.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:45 pm


Chapter Three

Staring at Wolfe, Silanis could not but blink, and she felt her body begin to shake. Was she angry? A tear slid out of her eye, and she shook her head. She choked on words, trying to think of exactly the right thing to say, but she couldn’t. Suddenly her vision was washed out, and she saw a dream she hadn’t seen since she was a very little girl.

A group of Maenads dancing, a fire between them, and a feast laid out under starlight in a large and lustrous emerald green clearing. Tree’s lined the perimeter, going nearly out of sight, and a group of people sat laughing on the grass, plates of food around them. One looked up, a beautiful man in sandals and pair of pants with embroidered grapevines all up the left leg. He smiled, and waved for her to come join them.

“Silanis, my dear! Come, sit! Grab some food!” He said, his lovely face lit up in the firelight.

Silanis saw herself move towards the group, and call the name Dionysus as she did. She looked as though she were her current age, not as she had once remembered the dream. Watching herself grab some of the amazing food laid out for them, Silanis heard the conversations of the people about her. She heard the names; Hera, Ares, Aphrodite, Amphitrite, Diana, Apollo, Zeus, Eros. Each one of them a God in the fairy-tales she heard as a little girl. Dionysus took her hand and kissed it, his own violet eyes glinting in the gaze of her gray ones.

“So, tell me, Sila darling.” He said to her, his voice raised only slightly. “What do you desire more than anything?”

She did not answer, only looking back into the eyes of the God before her, and smiling. Then, finally; “To bring peace and order to a world gone bad.”

There were murmurs of approval among the other Gods, and Dionysus nodded his own approval. Zeus was tall, muscle-bound and very white in both the color of his hair and his attire. His hair was cropped short, and a long jagged scar ran across his right shoulder, visible because he wore no shirt.

“You are worthy, then.” He said, and handed her a plate with something jiggly on it. Then, the vision swam away, and her room came back into focus. For a split second everything was clear, and then she whispered Wolfe’s name and fell off the bed.

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Wolfe jumped when Silanis hit the floor. She got down on her knees and pushed Silanis onto her back. When her eyes had gone blank and she had fallen to the ground, Wolfe had felt the presence of a God or Demon, and she stood protectively over Silanis, alert to any and all sounds. After a while, nothing happened, and the feeling had dissipated, Wolfe bent over Silanis on the ground. She shook her shoulder, looking at her face.
“So what, you died of information overload?” She asked, trying to hide tears with laughter. “Wake up already, it wasn’t that shocking… We finally find someone who could possibly be the one, and you faint? No, I don’t think so. Wake back up, Silanis.”

She groaned, and her eyes fluttered open. The gray orbs searched around the room frantically, and then closed again. Taking three deliberate, slow breaths Silanis sat up and brushed herself off. She stood up as if nothing had happened.

“Are you okay, Silanis?” Wolfe asked, fluttering up into view, looking like a child with wings. “Did you hurt your head when you fell on the floor?”

Shaking her head, Silanis climbed back onto her bed, sitting back against the wall on the other side. “I’m fine.” The words came out naturally, and she shook her head again. “It was just a little bit much, and then that vision happened, and I just went into shock or something.”

“Wait, wait.” The faerie landed on the bed and looked at her. “What vision?”

Silanis explained what she had seen, the Gods and how they’d welcomed her, and how abruptly it ended. It was Wolfe’s turn to stare at Silanis, unsure of what to say.

“I used to have that dream when I was a kid, but never like that.” She said. “He was never…” The word choked her, and she hesitated a moment before trying to say it again. “I-In love with me.” She looked embarrassed.

Wolfe’s wings fluttered a little, absent from her control. She then took off from the bed and began to trace a fluttering pace around the room. Silanis had no idea what she was thinking about, but waited patiently for her to say something. For a moment her gray eyes followed the very purple girl in the air, and then she remembered the box, and picked it up from her nightstand.

Vampire, Bat, Rat, Vermin, the riddle still taunted her. She turned the box around absently, contemplating the inscription on the back. What did those things have in common that related to a color? Bats and rats were technically vermin, and Vampires were said to be able to turn to bats… Vampires were generally drawn in dark places, and that was where vermin like bats and rats could also be found, a good part of the time. Darkness was also known as blackness, but could she chance being wrong? Her mind was telling her no, but then a part of her that never spoke up told her to try it anyways. She was tired of second guessing herself all the time, never being sure.

She pushed all three buttons on the box, and placed it on the bed next to her, watching. Wolfe saw what was going on and gasped, hovering in place while the box let out a small mist, and the lid popped open. No one had seen the box open even once since it was sealed over five hundred years ago. They cast no-sees on it, and kept it hidden from Zaçic from the moment they knew he sought it. If a wizard like him ever got hold of it, who knew what could happen?

Silanis picked the box back up, and gently opened the lid. What stared back at her, Wolfe would later explain, sharp and shinning, was a diamond-like jewel set in a rounded, woven-gold circle that had a spike of dwarf-woven gold going up to a point in the center, perfectly placed, to hold it in. It was the simplest, and yet most beautiful piece of jewelry she had ever had the luck to gaze upon. All the questions, all the colors, to protect this one single sparkling, gorgeous piece of work made into a tangible ring.

“Its beautiful, Wolfe…” Silanis whispered, staring down at it.

“Its yours,” Wolfe replied, “put it on.”

“What, me wear that?” She asked, looking at the faerie sidelong. “First of all, my mum would be all over me as to where it came from, “Oh, Sil, are you getting married? Who is he?” Every time I get a piece of jewelry, she asks the same questions…” She stopped mid-sentence when Wolfe took the ring from the box and placed it on her right index finger. “What..?”

“Not since the box was sealed has it been found and opened.” The faerie said, somberly. “By rights, the ring is yours, Silanis. Its your fate.”

“You can’t be serious…” Silanis looked close to laughing. “My fate? I’m a merchant’s daughter; I don’t have a fancy fate. I’m far too young, and far too plain to have a fate! And I don’t wear jewelry like this, either.” She held up her finger and pointed to the finely wrought gold. “My father buys and sells stuff like this when the lordlings are in debt and need to pawn off trinkets. You’ve got the wrong person, Wolfe. I’m sorry.”

“You’re wrong, Silanis. Your dreams? Those weren’t just dreams. And that box? How is it that you’re the only person who noticed it all day?” Wolfe got up close and grabbed her shirt. “Why is it that no one before you has been able to open it? Those questions weren’t impossible. They required a little thinking, yeah, but they weren’t unsolvable. It gave different people different inscriptions; it had the ability to choose who would solve it. And the magic in the box chose you. So before you decide its all a mistake, think about that, and think about what you could do with the ring, because its something special.”

Silanis looked from Wolfe to the ring and back, her expression that of someone who’s just been told to choose between a puppy and a kitty, and the one they don’t choose would die. Wolfe had just sprung this on her from left field, and to be fair, Silanis was taking it all quite well.

“At any rate, the longer you take, the less time we have to prepare for the journey.” Wolfe said, breaking the silence.

“Journey?” She asked. “What journey?”

”I’ve got to take you to the elders, of course.” Wolfe said. “They sealed the ring, they hold the real answers to this fate of yours.”

“Oh, but I can’t leave. What will I tell my parents?” Silanis had always thought her parents would be sad if she left; she did not want to make anyone sad to go off on a journey that made no sense. “This is insane!”

“Silanis, do you want to know your fate?” Wolfe asked. “Sometimes, when you realize there’s something bigger planned for you, you have to go for it. The people who love you will understand, and eventually forgive you for leaving them. Sometimes you have to hurt the people you love to save them in the end.”

“Who am I saving?” This was huge, how could she be expected to just go and not spend any time considering the consequences of the action? Her, save the world? What would her parents think about that? “Wolfe, you have to give me a couple days to consider this… I don’t know if I can leave my home! Let me think about it – don’t force me to make a decision I may end up regretting, just let me decide for myself.”

“Alright, then. You’ll let me know your decision once you’ve made it?”

“Yes.” Silanis promised. “As soon as I come to it.”

“Good.” She rubbed the left side of her face, and let herself relax on the end of the bed. “I’m staying in here, then. And when you reach your decision, if its no, I will leave. And if its yes, then, I will help you get ready and stay safe along the way.”

Silanis nodded, and went to make herself some breakfast. This was a strange, strange morning… What on earth was she going to do?
PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:46 pm


Chapter Four

Over the course of the next couple days Silanis watched the smaller things in life that she had never paid much attention to. Things she had once seen as insignificant - little tone fluctuations, and minute attitudes that people took on when other people said or did things…

The sound of real laughter versus the fake laughter she heard in even some of her own friends; the bloom of a flower in morning light, the backstabbing that was so open, but so friendly…

It was painful for her to see how many people drank alcohol from small bottles and flasks, which they kept on their person. This wasn’t her place, she couldn’t be meant to stay here until death, or marry one of these drunken men, or run her fathers little shop and deal with all these people, all the time. Whatever was in her future, it was almost guaranteed to be more significant than being a wife and running a store in a city of drunks and fake people. But how would she convince her parents to let her go?

That was where Wolfe came in. Wolfe had magic, and knew how to use it. She would be able to find a way to get Silanis’ parents to agree to her leaving, because she refused to just leave them with no explanation. So it was decided, as she sat in a small park at the edge of the market place, that she would go with the little faerie to see the elders and learn her fate. They had already lost two days of travel time.

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“How, then, are we to convince my parents that I am supposed to go now?” Silanis asked, after explaining her feelings to Wolfe.

The little faerie sat on her bed, thinking, for what seemed like ages. It was quite a conundrum, Silanis wanted to go, but did not want to hurt her parents at all in going. The only way they would let her go would be if she were getting married, or if royalty called her away. Or especially if she were marrying royalty, but setting up something so elaborate would take more than just her own magic.

Although she supposed Dian would be willing to play the part of a suitor, if she could get a hold of him somehow. He had been looking for an excuse to visit the human cities, and this would be a good enough reason indeed. He had been helping her follow the box, to an extent. Logic stood to reason that if he were her friend, he would help her with this.

Looking to Silanis, the faerie began to smile. “I think I have a solution.” Her voice was soft and lilting. “I know someone who could be useful in getting you out of here, without hurting your parents.”

“Who?” Silanis asked, looking suspiciously at the faerie.

“His name is Dian.” She replied. “He lives in the elvish city Athlone. He’s been looking for an excuse for nearly two-hundred years to visit a human city.”

“An Elve?” Silanis asked, feeling small and insignificant in the large world that had been opened to her a couple of day’s prior.

“He could be a suitor come to whisk you away for marriage.” Wolfe continued. “He’s handsome, smart, and well-to-do. It would be a cinch to convince your parents.”

“Whoa, whoa, wait.” Silanis said, holding up her hands. “You want me to lie?”

“Only in the name of the greater good, dear.” Wolfe explained. “That ring is special, and your fate is just as special, being tied to the ring. You may save a city, a country, or the world, with that ring. You don’t know for sure, and neither do I. So it makes sense that you would go to the elders, and if you have to lie in order to get there, I know the Gods forgive if the ends justifies the means.”

“I get that much, but why does it have to be marriage?” She didn’t much like the idea of marriage, and being lovey-dovey with someone she did not know. “Couldn’t it be something else? Couldn’t he be from the ByTalnan government, come to whisk me away to be… I don’t know, a courtier? The Reid’s may not be anything special here, but I’m sure we’ve got something our lineage we could use, instead of marriage.”

“If you want to take the time to look everything up, by all means, go right ahead.” Wolfe said. “But every day you take is a day less in the rest of your life, so use the time before you leave very carefully.”

“I will.” She would, and she would go right away to check her family lineage.

There was a book on it in her fathers study, and he was working the storefront right now. She could look through it uninterrupted for a while. She grabbed some of his paper and a small dove quill to take notes. By the end of that day, she had a list four pages long and showed it to the faerie.

“Are there any names here that look familiar to you in any way?” She asked.

“Heyail Reid.” Wolfe said. “He was in the court of the Nylian kingdom many years ago. He also had strong ties as an ambassador of Nylia to ByTalna. I had no idea there was any actual relation, though, or I would have mentioned him earlier.”

“So then my suggestion of this Dian being a courtier from ByTalna would work, right?” Silanis would try anything to avoid lying about marriage to her parents.

“Theoretically, yes.” Wolfe replied. “Its worth a try, at any rate. I’ll go get him tonight, then, and in the morning he will come to get you, yes?”

“Alright, that sounds good.” Silanis replied. “Give me a heads up before he gets here, ok?”

“Of course.” Wolfe replied, and opened her window. “I’ll return really soon, Silanis. Get a good nights rest, and I’ll be back come morning.”

Silanis nodded, and Wolfe took off out the window. She closed the window behind the faerie, and prepared herself for bed. Tomorrow would be an interesting day.

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PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 2:48 pm


Chapter Five

With her ability to fly, it made getting to Athlone faster than if she'd had to travel by foot or horse. This meant that she made it there just around one thirty in my morning, a four hour flight.

Dian was a night owl, so he would still be up, and she knew he would be happy to see her no matter what time it was. She got to his door, and knocked. She saw a light on in the kitchen, near the back, and heard a chair scuffle. A tall man with blood red hair and pointed ears made his way to the door, a look of curiosity on his soft, angular features.

“Wolfe!” He exclaimed when he opened the door. “My friend, its good to see you again!”

“Same.” The faerie replied. “I’ve gotten myself into something you might be interested in.”

“Come in, then.” He said. “I’ll make you something to eat and we can talk about it.”

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Wolfe sat in Dian’s kitchen, looking at the papers he had strewn about his table. They were mostly bard’s tales, stories about the truly mythic creatures, and legends about the truly unknown things in the world. Why was Dian reading these things?

“So, tell me then, Wolfe.” He said, turning from his wood stove and the luluhid pancakes he was cooking. “What is it you’ve gotten yourself into, that you need my help?”

She smiled, and bade him turn back to the food so it wouldn’t burn. Explaining about the box – Dian mentioned that he remembered how she’d been following it around for about a century and a half now - she told him about Silanis, and how she found and then proceeded to open the box.

Wolfe also added in the part about her vision, and how she fell to the floor out of nowhere. She explained the plan Silanis had come up with, and the role she needed Dian to fill, making sure to mention he could leave once they had gotten Silanis on the road.

“What, and leave a young human girl open and vulnerable to the hardships and cruelties of traveling so close to Cianira’s Bunch over in Meadowvale??” He shook his head. “If I decide to go, I’d be going all in.”

““Cianira’s Bunch”? What are you talking about?” The faerie quirked a brow.

“I used to know Cianira when we were both around a hundred and thirty. That was a little over five hundred and eighty years ago. She was a nice girl, very much into designing projectile weapons. She created what she calls “hand cannons”. They are very dangerous, because they shoot a pointed chunk of lead at a fast velocity. She leaked her design in secret to humans, but on a smaller, less powerful scale. “Let them figure out how to make ‘em bigger.” She said to me when I spoke with her before she did it.

“I’ve only spoken with her a handful of times in the last five hundred and eighty-two years – the last time was about eight months ago. She was running out of an underground base near the Meadowvale Feyveil Tavern.

“I think they’re crazy, bunch of anarchists living so close to a human city... I could understand way back when, but these days its just… Stupid. Anyway…

“They like to… Search for people who could possibly know Zaçic. They interrogate any humans that stray too close. It’s funny, because there are at least two humans in the group.

“I know there was Vervain, who has a personal vendetta against the wizard, but there’s another named Jahnjyeh, whose motives I don’t know. They would stop you two for sure, especially alone. If I’m there, on the other hand…

“I’m the only Elve with blood red hair in the last thirteen centuries. They’d know me simply because of that fact. Ci might even help.”

Wolfe scratched her head a bit and thought. An anarchist group living so near to the Feyveil was certainly an interesting predicament. How had she not heard of that sooner? It hadn’t occurred to her that she was that far out of touch with the rest of her world, which actually made things more difficult. She would need Dian for the long run, and hoped desperately that he would agree to go with her.

“Look,” Dian started, putting a plate of the pancakes in front of her, “this has been important to you for over a century, right? And it’s tied in directly with the Elders not only in your home, but here in mine as well, so she would have to stop here anyway. That makes my meeting her inevitable, regardless of how you get her out of her own home. I’ll come, I’ll help, and I’ll see what her fate is. Once you learn that, I say we stay here a little longer than you planned while I make a hard choice. I do have a sister to worry about, remember?”

He most certainly did have a sister, and Wolfe remembered Nuku well. The two never got along, she always thought that Wolfe stole her brothers attention away, and quite frequently said that the faerie would be the death of one or the other of them. She was asleep right now, up two floors in the tree line, her own entrance locked tight. It was a five-story home, the third split in two, with a locked door, and two entrances – one from the ground, and one from the tree line onto a bridge.

“Okay.” Wolfe replied, somberly. “That makes sense.”

“Alright.” He picked up one of his papers and began to read a bit. Wolfe took a bite of the pancakes, he always made such heavenly food, and she was thankful for the Elvish cooking mastery he had picked up from his uncle as a child. But, of course, with a few centuries of practice, almost anyone could become a fantastic cook. All that took was practice, which Wolfe had never once bothered with.

As he sat there reading the papers in the dim magic light of the kitchen, Wolfe watched the expressionlessness of his beautiful face. What was he reading, she found herself wondering, that he was so unconcerned with everything else around him, even ignoring his own luluhid pancakes. Having never seen him this intent on reading random papers, she shifted uneasily.

"Um... What are you reading, anyways, Dian?" She asked, and he looked over to her. Shrugging, she looked at him with an expression that read 'what’s so interesting?'

"You know about the Völva of the ByTalna cliffs, correct?" He responded.
"The supposed bird-women who live in almost unreachable caves?"

"Those would be the ones." Dian affirmed. "They are supposed to know the secret of the New Goddess who will bring Zaçic to ruin."

"No one has ever seen them off hand, you know," Wolfe said, "just stories about friends of friends who met them. Just fairytales, woven by the creatures of fairytales."

"You, of all creatures, Wolfe, should know that the creatures of fairytales are real, even if they are the fairytales of us "fairytales."" He dropped the page in front of her, pointing to the drawing etched in charcoal on the parchment paper.

On the parchment was a woman with hair so black it seemed to shine blue, and eyes that looked both amused and deeply sorrowed. There were wings behind her bangs, sticking off of her head, and wings on her back, both magnificent shades that looked almost silver. Her midriff and flat stomach were exposed, as was her cleavage, but there was a long, sectioned metal necklace - or at least she assumed it was a necklace, but with all the sections, it looked as though were she to take it off, her neck would flop over. That probably made her look taller than she was, unless her spine was really that long. The sleeves of her belly top hung well past her hands, looking like the sleeves of a robe instead, and her skirt came down almost to the bottoms of her boots. Wolfe could see her tail feathers poking out from behind the skirt, too. This was a Völva, she was certain, and from the detail, it looked like the artist had her pose specifically for the occasion. It was unsigned, so whoever did it did not want to be known.

"On the back it reads as follows:

"The Völva Priestesses are part bird, part woman, and hold the True Prophesy of the NEW Goddess, and her battles with the False Prophet and Wizard, Zaçic, so-called "Son" of the falsified "One True God."

"The Völva reside within the ByTalna Mountains, in cave dwellings among a series of cliffs in the center of the mountain range. They each hold loyalty to one other God, but all worship the NEW Goddess first and foremost.

"The practices of the Völva are obscure and generally unknown, though are said to involve food, drink, and sexual activity.

"The existence of the Völva is generally put off as myth, legend, folktale. Most will write them off as a fairytale, though there are always those who will search for them, or claim to have seen them.

"I have met them, by a chance encounter, on a journey through the mountains to search for certain gemstones found in the region. The Völva are kind, and gentle, and they treat their guests with love and respect at all times. Stumbling upon them is very good luck, as they will take you in and help you.

"Its signed Heyail Reid." Dian finished, looking to Wolfe. "This man met them, he spoke with, danced with, and slept among these priestesses."

Wolfe simply stared at her friend, unbelieving that the one who drew and wrote of these creatures was related to the very girl who had found and opened the box. Unable to think clearly or even to speak, she sat there staring at the page after a while, and trying to put this together.

"Are you okay?" Trying to get a feel for what kind of reaction this would turn into, he bent to try and look into her eyes. She looked back to him, a look of utter disbelief on her face.

“I know now how Silanis must have felt when I told her everything she thought to be a fantasy was real.” In her foolish pride, she had assumed she knew it all, but she really only knew a fraction of what she had thought. If the Völva were real, then perhaps there was some truth to their prophecy. “But it opens up interesting theories in regards to their new goddess.”

“I’ve found myself more and more interested in them as time goes on.” Dian looked at the drawing. “I want to find them.”

Wolfe sighed. “Look, you probably slept all day, so you’re good to drive, right? I want to be there in the morning when Silanis wakes up. I wouldn’t want her to think I’d forgotten her.”

Dian nodded and gathered up his papers. “I’ll have the carriage ready in about half an hour.” He walked away to get some things together for the journey. Wolfe finished her pancakes, though they had gotten a little cold by now. She contemplated the idea of a new goddess, thinking of ways it could be beneficial. She looked through all the pages, and there were several more drawings of other things, a good chunk signed by Heyail Reid with various dates and years.
PostPosted: Wed Sep 02, 2009 3:00 pm


Chapter Six

When Wolfe knocked on her window, Silanis was doing her stretches, and fell out of a particularly awkward pose on one leg. It was about nine in the morning, Wolfe had left Athlone, the Elven city, around two-thirty. Opening the window, she pulled the faerie in before anyone saw her waiting out there. It was morning, after all.

“So, did he agree?” She asked, looking out the window a little to make sure no one was watching. Closing the window, she looked back to the faerie.

“He is here, yes.” Wolfe replied. “A member of the line of Heyail Reid come to whisk you away for the courts of ByTalna and the Royale Megacity of Hundr Buma.”

“And his name?” She asked the faerie, sounding pleased.

“Dian Liberati. A nephew who has been sent because you were named heir of a courtier, a duchess of the Megacity, who had no children of her own.” Wolfe shook her head. “She had been keeping tabs on the Reid side of her family, and thought you the perfect heir.”

“Sounds interesting, though fantastical.” Silanis said. “But it will probably work. I’m impressed. I’m blown away by everything, but still impressed.”

Wolfe smiled, looking into Silanis’ eyes, but something was different, and she could feel it. The faerie remained silent, and looked to the ferret momentarily.

“What, what is it, Wolfe?” Silanis asked, confused.

“Just that Dian came into possession of something relating to the very relative we selected for him to be related to.” Wolfe replied, looking back to the human. “He had a series of drawings signed by Heyail Reid that you may wish to look over when there is a better chance. But I figured we could use them as proof, so I had him bring them along.”

Silanis stared wide-eyed at the faerie, unsure of what to say or do in reaction to the news. Drawings made by her four-times great uncle? Possessed by the supposed nephew of a four-times-removed aunt? Her parents would have a lot to think about tonight, to be sure.

“Well, that’s almost frightening.” Silanis said, chewing her bottom lip absentmindedly. “But a coincidence like that is certainly useful. When is he coming over?”

“Before dinner time. But you should come out and meet him, me thinks.” Wolfe looked over to the window. Silanis lent out to see what she meant.

There was a carriage parked in the market place, and a man with blood red hair was looking over some fruits and vegetables. She knew immediately that it was Dian, and pulled herself back inside, closing the window. Was she ready for something like this? She wondered how she would handle leaving her home to go on a weird adventure with two creatures she didn’t even think existed until the little faerie showed up in her room.

“Silanis?” Wolfe asked, staring at her suddenly pale face. “Are you okay?”

Running a hand through her hair, Silanis, stared past the faerie; indeed, she stared past everything in the room for a moment, looking into her own heart to see if she could handle what was now happening. In her secret heart, should she really handle having her life torn in a different direction like this? It pained her to think she may never see her family again, and while the people of this town were not hers, she would still feel a Clover Hill-sized hole in her heart for a while, wouldn’t she?

Her pupils had taken over the whole of her eyes, turning the gray ponds into black pools of nothingness momentarily, and once more Dionysus and the feast swam into her vision.

“Sila, love.” He said to her, taking her face in his hands and smiling down at her. “You know in your secret heart what the right thing is, don’t you? You know the thing you must do, even if you don’t think you do.”

He leaned in to kiss her, and when his lips touched hers she came back to herself almost violently, her pupils shrinking to the size of pinpricks, eyes opened so wide it was almost terrifying.

“Silanis!” Wolfe exclaimed, flying over to her in an instant, just as her knees buckled. The little faerie saved her from a fall, helping her down gently. “Another vision?”

“Yes and no.” Silanis said. “I looked into my secret heart to see if I... If I were ready. But I think it is best, right now, if I don’t already know this man before he comes to the door. It would be less suspicious.”

Staring hard into the humans eyes, Wolfe nodded. She knew what she was talking about, and Wolfe hadn’t even considered that it would be a little strange if she already knew him. Besides that, if her parents saw her talking to him, they may suspect something amiss, and that risk could not be taken.

“Well and so.” Wolfe said, smiling. “Are you sure you’re okay, though? You look like you’ve seen not just one ghost, but an army of them!”

“I’ll be fine, Wolfe.” Came the reply, and it sounded true enough. “I just need to finish my stretches and eat. One question, though. Will Dian give me the ring, as a token of his fallen mistress?”

“Oh! That is a good question, indeed!” Wolfe replied, thinking for a moment. “A pretty trinket like that, and more to follow, may help convince your parents, wouldn’t you think? Yes, I’ll have him bring you the ring. Where is it?”

“Here...” Silanis had hidden the ring when she had gone to bed, and retrieved it now, from withing her dresser, below her clothing. “Take it to him, and in about an hour, maybe less, have him come to the door. I want a little bit longer with my parents.”

“I understand.” Wolfe agreed, nodding and taking the ring. “Not to worry.”

Then, with scarce more than a wave, Wolfe was out the window and back to the carriage to wait a moment for Dian to join her, and Silanis... Silanis left her room to go and break her fast with her mother and father one last time.

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 8:58 am


Also, as mentioned, here's the drawing I did of the box:

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Its more of a sketch, and I no longer have my fancy computer art equipments, but once I get my hands on at least a faster computer, I'll play with it in Photoshop.
PostPosted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 2:14 pm


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Chapter One

After eating dinner with her parents Silanis returned to her room, her ferret kicking up a little bit of a racket. Taking her food bowl and filling it, Silanis cooed to her ferret, Libra, and scratched under her chin just a little. Libra licked at her fingers, and then ravenously dug into her food. Silanis giggled softly before going into her bag to grab the small box she had found on her way home. Upon further inspection it looked mechanical, like some of the safes and jewelry boxes she had seen when she had visited the market at Lakshûr to the South when she was younger. This meant that the three buttons on the top were probably some sort of code, which meant there were only so many combination's to try before she got the sequence correct. Turning it over, she took another peek at the inscription. It seemed inconsequential, trifling. One son comes around; millions cannot stand to his power. Maybe it meant something, and maybe it didn’t. She thought on it quietly, trying to decide its usefulness in opening the box, but it made no sense.

Turning the box over and over to study it, she considered what her options were. Then, while she was about to give up, she noted the buttons were colored and something in her mind clicked. One son… Son… Sun! Of course! Her mind raced as she made the connection, and she scarce knew what she was doing before she pressed the yellow button. Hoping she was right, she held her breath and watched. Nothing happened, and her heart sank as she had felt for sure that she had figured it out.

When she turned the box back over to look at the inscription again and ponder it, however, her eyes widened and her breath hitched in her throat. With a choked yelp she dropped it. The words had changed somehow, and as far as she knew, there was no technology for something like that. Libra looked up from her food lazily, sniffed the air, and went back to her bowl with what seemed like a shrug.

Tentatively, Silanis picked the box back up and looked at the inscription to be sure her eyes hadn’t been playing tricks on her. There it was, defiantly staring back at her as if it had every right to say something different, and she couldn’t explain the feelings that evoked in her. There was no way, no conceivable way, that those words could have possibly changed when she pressed the button; she had never heard of anything like that.

But it was another useless sentence that seemed of little consequence, and Silanis was almost certain now that this was some sort of game of riddles, despite none of them being actual questions. Considering this new sentence carefully she remembered back to her childhood, visiting the fair in Grenview to the West. To the riddling competition that took place. They took the game very seriously, it was one of the most ancient, and she remembered hearing somewhere that riddles had been used for everything from a test of wits to making a wager to save your life. What could this one mean, then, by stating quite uselessly “see shells on the beach, and gulls in the sky?” The sheer irrelevance of it was nigh infuriating, and she was, in spite of the shock of it, rather displeased with how this box seemed to be working. Reason dictated that she shouldn’t hit a random button, for fear of what might happen were she to get the answer wrong, but yet she could not guess on her own just yet as to the correct answer. It only made sense that you would see shells on a beach and gulls in the sky, and yet the incontrovertible sentence seemed to manage a manner of ambiguity to it, which even still eluded her.

Silanis moved to take a break, shuffling through an old book of riddles to see if there were any of these sorts. As she flipped through the pages, lounging back on her bed with the box next to her, she didn’t seem to find anything of importance. This line still befuddled her, and she was growing impatient with it fast. What did it mean? She was tempted to throw the box at her large pile of stuffed dolls in the corner, but held back, fearing her aim not so good. In a huff she opened a dresser drawer and aimlessly started to ruffle through her clothing. She came upon a bathing suit at the bottom, and remembered the times her mom had taken her to the port at the tip of the peninsula, Port Canchâs, and she had gone swimming at the beach. Then it clicked in, and it took her a moment to realize she now had the answer. It was water that was what had been eluding her. She pushed the blue button and quickly turned it over to see what new riddle had taken its place in the inscription.

The words that awaited her confused her even more than the previous. It said, “The blade is not sharp, but can be very long.” This infuriated Silanis, because she knew nothing of weaponry, and there was no way she could ever figure out the answer to this question. Regardless, she began to list off all the weapons she could remember in reference to the word blade. Her list was terribly short, and not long after she realized none of what she had come up with corresponded with a color anyway. In a huff she sat upon her bed with her arms around her knees.

Why did the riddle have to be about weapons, she wondered, when that was one of the things she knew nothing of? She wanted desperately to see what would be on the inside at the end of it all, but of this she had no clue. What kind blade made sense with a color, and was not sharp? It couldn’t be blue again, but there was no silver or gray to push, and none of the colors would mix to make it. She closed here eyes, feeling very silly, and tried to clear her mind. Who did she know that she could ask about such things? Unfortunately there was no one whom she was able to think of off the top of her head.

But of course there had to be some simple answer to this, and she was just thinking much too hard on it. This couldn’t really be so impossible as it was making itself out to be, and she would surely be able to think of an answer on her own in time. She heaved a sigh, getting up to change into herpajama’s, and going through her own nightly ritual of bidding goodnight to the moon and stars. Perhaps she would be able to think more clearly in the morning, after breakfast and a quick run to wake herself up.


One spelling mistake that I could see from reading it through as I would normally read (without picking it apart)
Correct spelling - Pyjamas

I love it!! The first chapter is still keeping me wanting to read on, which is rare for a first chapter; usually the first couple of chapters of a book are quite slow.

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PostPosted: Thu Sep 03, 2009 2:27 pm


I just finished Chapter two, and I have to say that you have a very interesting take on mythical creatures.
I especially liked the explanation of all the magical creatures being labelled as witches, particularly the elves and their ears.

I also love the drawing of the box.
It's exactly how I imagined it to be when reading about it!

I shall hopefully get some time to read some more tomorrow, but I am very busy at the moment, and I have a friend's party tomorrow evening after work.
I will get it all read as soon as I can smile It's good.
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