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Alice Ate The Cake

 
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 16, 2009 7:23 pm


Please PLEASE PLEASE critique me to your best.

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(Read both. In whatever order you choose. It doesn't matter)

There's Always Two Sides to One Story.



MARCUS

MARY



(For this guild going to the beginning will not bring you back to the guild.)
PostPosted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 1:10 pm


I replied to both of them. Overall, it was very good. I noticed that you described Mary in detail, but not Marcus. Not saying that its a bad thing, but just someting I noticed.

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Alice Ate The Cake

 
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 17, 2009 9:06 pm


Thanks so much.


I didn't really describe Marcus, being as the story was mostly about Mary. But thanks for pointing that out, I may actually go back and edit it a little.

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