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PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 9:31 pm


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~Character Information~

Full Name: Satoshi Hiwatari
Actual Age: 350
Appearance Age: 21
Gender: Male
Division: Sixth
Seat: Fuku - Taicho (Lieutenant)
Element: Wind
Raitsu Color: Jade
Species: Shinigami

~Appearance~

Height: 5' 9''
Weight: 140 lbs
Hair: Silver
Eyes: Light Purple

Shinigami Uniform Changes

Shitagi: Stander issue colored but is Sleeveless
Kosode: Stander issue colored but is Sleeveless
Hakama: Stander issue
Hakama-himo: Royal Blue Sash
Tabi: Stander issue
Waraji: Traditional Chinese shoes
Extra Changes or additions: Three earrings in his left ear along with a kidou burned tattoo on the left side of his neck

~Background~


Satoshi Hiwatari was found near the Hokutan district. The third district part of the West Rukongai. He was found here by two Shinigami lovers. Minako and Kenji. Both were here training for a squad tournament for the new head of the Sixth Division. Once hearing the screams of the crying baby they stopped their training with one another to find the child. High above in a tree was a young baby, his cry produced a spiritual pressure that caused the winds to become angry and spout small yet powerful twister that ripped through the ground and even the tree he was in. As the young baby fell Minako dived forward and caught the boy despite being slashed by the wind. As she cradled the baby the winds died off as Kenji rushed to her aid. Many years later as Satoshi grew up he believed that both Minako and Kenji were his parents although they told him about the Soul Society and its history. As a child he was trained as Shinigami even before being enrolled into the Academy. This was a crime to the Soul Society's way, Kenji and Minako both forced Satoshi into promising never to uses his skills until his second year in the Academy and try to avoid fighting other students. Agreeing to this Kenji taught Satoshi the basics skills when it came to Kendo as well as controlling his Raitsu. While in the academy Satoshi kept to himself avoiding with making friends. Excelling at each of his classes when it came to kendo and kidou. When it came to hand to hand Satoshi was not very good at it. He kept to a distance and kept to throwing his opponent away from him. Upon graduating from the Academy Satoshi was requested to join many squads. He narrowed his choices down to two divisions. The Second Division and the Sixth Division. His love for the Demon Arts and with a combination of fighting was why he made this choice over the fifth division.

~Personality~
Quiet, keeps to himself. Easily aggravated when it comes to people who he deems an idiot.


~Techniques~

Hadou:
Hadou #1: Sho (Thrust)
Hadou #4: Byakurai (Pale Lighting)
Hadō #11: Tsuzuri Raiden (Bound Lightning)
Hadō #31: Shakkahō (Shot of Red Fire)
Hadō #33: Sōkatsui (Blue Fire, Crash Down)
Hadō #54: Haien (Abolishing Flames)
Hadō #58: Tenran (Orchid Sky)
Hadō #63: Raikōhō (Thunder Roar Cannon)

Bakudou:
Bakkudou #1: Sai (Restrain)
Bakudō #2: Kabe (Wall)
Bakkudou #4: Hainawa (Crawling Rope)
Bakkudou #8: Seki (Repulse)
Bakudou #9: Geki (Strike)
Bakudō #12: Fushibi (Ambush Flare)
Bakudō #21: Sekienton (Red Smoke Escape)
Bakudō #26: Kyakko (Curving Light)
Bakudō #30: Shitotsu Sansen (Beak-Stab Triple Beam)
Bakudō #37: Tsuriboshi (Suspending Star)
Bakudō #54: Uraawase
Bakudō #58: Kakushitsuijaku (Summoning of the Tracking Sparrows)
Bakudō #61: Rikujōkōrō (Six Rods Prison of Light)
Bakudō #62: Hyapporankan (Hundred Steps Fence)
Bakudō #63: Sajō Sabaku (Locking Bondage Stripes)
Bakudō #73: Tozanshou (Falling Mountain Crystal)
Bakudō #75: Gochūtekkan (Quintet of 1 kan Iron Pillars)

Abilities:
Shunpo (Flash Step)

~Zanpakuto~

Shikai obtained / Bankai not obtained


Zanpakuto Name: Uzumaku Tensei (Whirling Heavenly Voice)
Zanpakuto Spirit: Uzumaku has red eyes and Tensei has blue eyes
Zanpakuto Spirit True Form: True Form
Zanpakuto World: World
Uzumaku Tensei Sealed State
Release Command: "Tooru no mai jousoukiryuu; Uzumaku Tensei!" (Dance along the currents Uzumaku Tensei)
Uzumaku Tensei Shikai State
Shikai Ability: Uzumaku Tensei becomes a Tachi which utilizes the element of Wind and lightning to deliver its mighty blows. Once it changes into its released form the blade dissolves into the air becoming one with the air itself. The wind is controlled with the wielders eyes to move the wind around. For a faster and stronger result the wilder can start to use their hands for a more accurate result and any other part of their body for that matter. Its second ability is when the blade is off of the hilt the wilder can slash and stab the opponent and create an invisible blade made out of pure wind. Although when blood or a colored substance is placed on the invisible blade it is easily seen for attacks after that.

Attack: Senkei no Mae (Annihilation Dance)
This technique expels a high pressure of wind and air from the hilt of the blade that circles the enemy and tries to cut them to shreds. This skill is controlled with the wielders eyes to move the wind around. For a faster and stronger result the wilder can start to use their hands for a more accurate result.

Divine Gust (Kami Hitofuki) - A skill that controls a combination of wind and lightning, this attack rapidly rotates around the enemy in a sphere delivering great damage that rips the enemy to ribbons while electrifying them. The beauty of the skill is normally a distraction before the death of the enemy.

Bankai Name: Gakuso Tensei (Melodic Heavenly Voice)
Gakuso Tensei Appearance
Bankai Ability: In the Bankai form when the area takes on no real form other than his blade which looks like a lightning bolt. The wind picks up rapidly and the clouds become dark creating a oncoming storm. The clouds constantly flash with lightning. The users right hand and right eye controls the wind as the left hand and eye controls the lightning.

Attack: Radiant Wind (Kagayaki Kaze) - An attack that creates fields of wind that rapidly spin around the enemy and cuts them to ribbons. This skill can also be used as a defense used in the right ways.

Eternal Lightning (Eien Raikou) - The blade itself gains and aura of lightning that can be manipulated when fighting. Lighting is the called from the sky to strike or can be used in a wave form and slice in a circular motion. When an electric based attack is used against the sword in this form all damage is zero and give this blade more power.


Extra Weapons:
A holster of throwing knifes


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PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 9:37 pm



First, we don't have Rank, so remove that.
Second, you do not start in a Squad or a Seat, blank those out.
As a new member, you only start off with Kidou 1 - 10, so please limit your list to that. Note: We have a list that we use located in Squad 5 sub forum
You do not start of with Shunpou, remove that for now.
You also do not start off with your Shikai or your Bankai, so please put
*Not Obtained* in front of both, in red.

Now, your Shikai is too similar to Byakuya's from the original stories. The crew will have to review it and give you a judgment.

For now, fix the things listed and we will get back to you.





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Aku Kami Kurayami
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PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 9:45 pm



You also need to shave off the last part of your profile about gaining a seat until you have gained one.

You also might want to look at our Squad arrangements to make sure that you know what each one is.





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PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 10:34 pm


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Aku is a bit off in his judgment of your shikai. lol

Rather than being too similar to Byakuya's it just looks like you combined his with Matsumoto's...

Come on have some originality man.

Also your Bankai needs way more description and should actually relate and expand the ability of your Shikai, not be something completely different.
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MiTaurus

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 10:38 pm


Fine if everyone is going to cry about my zanpakuto I will just go and change it to make everyone happy. Geez.

Edit: Scratch that. I'm not changing it. I believe its fine and have used it many times as a Third Seat and have not had a single problem with it. Normally when I have a problem with someone and it deals with something I have created I found out they felt threatened by my weapon or attack and normal ask for me to change it. As for my originality issues. I say to hell with it. It comes from the actual role player. I show my originality when I am fighting people. I completely forget about the Anime. Its up to the Captain to tell me to change it. Thats all I have to say about that.
PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 11:09 pm


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Haha, well sorry for you I am a Vice-captain of the guild and my word goes the same as the captain of the guild. Plus she asked me to deliver the decision to you. So please go get your attitude in check, because we don't take kindly to it here. So if you want to keep your Shikai fine, but you need to then make your Bankai more relevant to it, or change your shikai to be more relevant to your Bankai.

If you don't want to be original then that's your choice I suppose but I know I look down on something that is so unoriginal and I'm sure others do too.


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PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 11:32 pm


s**t...
My head is hurting...

-sigh-
Alright. Let me deal with this problem before it escalates into something greater. I, along with some others, seriously don't want to deal with dramatics...
but let me make the final decision so we can all move on.

Koga, I would like for you to make your Shikai and Bankai relevant to each other. No one is threatened by your current Zanpaku-to, though for whatever other reason you may think. I WOULD like it to have some more originality to it....
Just like I said in the OOC, I'd like for you to chill. All of these attitudes flying around ain't really necessary and it will disrupt the peaceful harmony we have in the guild now.
So please, just bare with us... no one wants to pick and pluck at someone' profile and make them angry. =_=
PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 11:41 pm


Before I get on someone's bad side I going to say I edit both of them. I hope your happy with this one. Currently I don't care.

MiTaurus

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PostPosted: Wed Aug 12, 2009 11:48 pm



Accepted. 3nodding

Go and join up with the squad of your choosing.





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