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Music -Misfit-
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 11, 2009 12:14 pm


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I just wrote this a couple of minutes ago...tell me what you think? Help me out, I'm new to songwriting. =3
Oh, and the title kind of sucks; I've never been much for naming things. You can suggest a name for it, too, if you'd like.

Music
We move together just like fire and ice
like oil and water
like the sea and the sky.
A circling dance that seems as ancient as time
if you are the rhythm,
baby, I am your rhyme.

{CHORUS}
It's the beat of the bass
It's the pull of the drum
It's a spotlight on life's tedium
It's your sweet melody
and my own harmony
Our voices in sync
Music sets me free
Yeah, you set me free.

Our lips connecting is a shock to my brain
You're the pulse to my veins
I think I'm going insane.
You are the song I sing when I go to bed
So please don't fall asleep
Let's hear the chorus again

{CHORUS}

Oh, ah
Hear me sing
You've got a one-two step for everything
Ooh, oh
I don't know
'cause when you are involved, I lose control.

{CHORUS}

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PostPosted: Tue Aug 11, 2009 8:03 pm


Wow, those are great! I'd love to hear the melody! whee
It has a really nice rhythm to it, keep writing 'em!

ViRabbit


Music -Misfit-
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 11, 2009 8:06 pm


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Thank you! ^_^
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