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Groping through the gloom they came
Through the terror
Their grotesque dance forward seemed to sicken the air around them.
Though their arms were bound behind them
Their savage claws ripped at the flesh of their own backs.
Stepping, dragging, bodies undulating.
Senseless to all else but the scent of their soon to be victims
Some stumbling into the pits of pyre
That burned up out of chasms of hell that opened into the streets
For their eyeless countenances held nothing for them.

The sky seemed to decompose before them
Sending forth a warning like no other
The blue melted off and the clouds went sour,
And the failing colors molted into a blaze of hatred and horror.

Their putrid breath rattling against the roars of the furnace,
Out of the mouths which had devoured countless hopeless souls
Out of the mouths rancid with the decay of flesh
Out of the mouths that had so easily spoken lies and deceit
Before their fate was known.

Their sordid prey, stared desperately
Through broken windows and destruction.
Watching, waiting, agonizing
Because
There was nowhere to run.

The air pulsated
Each beat screamed through those with ears
And pierced into the hearts of those lying in wait
Incapacitated and asphyxiating with the fowl smoke in their noses.

The epoch had come
And so began the demise of the world.

You're good with alliteration!
Anyways, 's good! smile
Keep up the good work, I want to read more soon! biggrin

Definitely. But post them separately, sometimes when people post too much it causes things to crash....and a little country over to the west blows up. Which would be bad.