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Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 10:43 pm
It was a short story I wrote and never finished, this is the last chapter I wrote and it's my favorite one.
The story so far: The main character is a famous writer, she solves mysteries in her books that takes the police by surprise. Her next book is revolved around the Headless Horseman mystery, a man who skins his victims strewing their blood everywhere and leaves only a headless skeleton alive. She decides the name of her new book will be Skeleton man.
She goes through the evidence and there are actually some pretty scary scenes and soon the murdered starts "playing" with her, leaving her messages at new crime scenes.
Slowly she sifts through the evidence and finally finds the missing link, and it's shocking.
It turns out to be her childhood friend, Alex S. Harper, she finally figures this out on her way to a TV interview. Alex walks in on her and this is where the chapter begins.
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Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 11:16 pm
It was a dangerous game I couldn’t play, he locked the door behind him and dragged a chair over too it, I still pretended. “Whatcha doing? Keeping all the bad guys out?” But my hands shook, I stared through the mirror at him as he threw my bag with the pistol in the trash.
“You never did like to play guessing games,” Alex said, as the lid closed down, “Mainly because you were too impatient, and mostly because you were so horrible when it was your turn.”
I said nothing not looking at him through the mirror anymore, pretending to look at the makeup in front of me, choosing which colors. But he continued, “Yes, you didn’t like playing those games, but as you got older, oh, you played them all the time.”
I stopped fidgeting with things, I turned to him, adrenaline pumping, “Are you talking about my books?”
The look in his eyes made me turn back again, this wasn’t Alex, this was the Skeleton Man I was talking to, he knew that I knew his secret, and I was not getting out of this room alive. This was my grave.
“I’m talking about your love life, because you and I both know, you loved those people you wrote about.” Alex moved closer, I half expected him to flourish out a costume and turn into some diabolical reaper. No he was still my Alex. “You loved those murders, and you chased their games, and grew tired of them when you won. I worked so hard to make a perfect game”
He wrapped his arms around me and I flinched, the touch of a bone knife to my throat drew Goosebumps down my arms.
“They all screamed, those girls with eyes like yours, they all begged for mercy in the end, even the men I killed for my first times. They all wanted their life, but you’re different you know how to play don’t you.”
I froze, like always, like in the train when he had almost killed me, I couldn‘t move for the shudder that ran through my body. Was he going to now kill me now like he couldn’t then? I looked into his eyes, that’s why the last girls looked similar to me, he was practicing killing me.
He rubbed his stubble against my neck and I felt nauseous, I couldn’t turn away, the bone knife was there. He stood waiting for me to meet his gaze in the mirror, I finally got the courage.
“But you didn’t scream, and you never ran from me. And those eyes, those are the ones I want.” I wanted to look away again but I knew I shouldn’t.
“So what will you do now Alex?” My voice wavered more than I wanted it to.
“And there is my problem. Those eyes will not be saved you see, if I kill you.” Alex stared at my eyes, the eyes that were changing shade so rapidly I could feel it. “But to leave you alive, you are much too clever for that. We‘re at a standoff then. If I don‘t kill you I don‘t get what I want, but you….what will you do?”
I took a ragged breath, I had no idea, “Finish the game I suppose.”
Alex grabbed me so tightly I gave a yell, the bone cut across my shoulder, he laughed as he held me tightly. A laugh I didn’t know. Then he bit me, like he used to do when he was young and excited about things. Only this wasn’t as playful, and this time it drew blood.
“This. This is why I like playing with you.” He grinned, a little of my blood staining his teeth, “You’re always so fun to play with. Shall I let you go and we play a little more?”
I was sickened and sad all at the same time, I remembered all of our childhood, and the images of all those dead people, they blended together.
“But then you’ll go tell, and that’s not acceptable at all.”
I finally started to cry, it wasn’t from fear though, I turned and clutched his head to me, “Oh Alex.” was all I could say, how could such a cute innocent young boy turn this way? This was my fault was it? It was true, all that I said about his mother figure, I was his mother figure growing up, even in high school I took care of him, just as I started to research murders, he began committing them, all to get my attention.
Surprisingly enough, he pushed me down, there was such a stricken look on his face I didn’t know what he or myself was going to do.
“You aren’t supposed to play that way.” He raised his knife and I closed my eyes.
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Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 11:18 pm
Short version is short.
And yes, there are a lot of unexplained things in here.
One, she figured out that he had a complex with his mother. That he was always vying for her attention.
Cliffhanger isn't meant to be a cliffhanger, I could never decide if he killed her, (then killed himself) or if the cop came in to rescue her.
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Posted: Sat Jun 13, 2009 7:38 pm
Quote: I froze, like always, like in the train when he had almost killed me, I couldn‘t move for the shudder that ran through my body. Was he going to now kill me now like he couldn’t then? I looked into his eyes, that’s why the last girls looked similar to me, he was practicing killing me. O________O;
Sounds like an interesting story. Does she makes it?!!!
DDDDDDDDDD
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Posted: Mon Jun 15, 2009 3:52 pm
Tribor Quote: I froze, like always, like in the train when he had almost killed me, I couldn‘t move for the shudder that ran through my body. Was he going to now kill me now like he couldn’t then? I looked into his eyes, that’s why the last girls looked similar to me, he was practicing killing me. O________O;
Sounds like an interesting story. Does she makes it?!!!
DDDDDDDDDDI don't know gonk
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Posted: Mon Jun 15, 2009 4:35 pm
Noxious Weed Tribor Quote: I froze, like always, like in the train when he had almost killed me, I couldn‘t move for the shudder that ran through my body. Was he going to now kill me now like he couldn’t then? I looked into his eyes, that’s why the last girls looked similar to me, he was practicing killing me. O________O;
Sounds like an interesting story. Does she makes it?!!!
DDDDDDDDDDI don't know gonk gonk gonk gonk nuuuuuuuuuuuu! You should make up your mind @_@
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Posted: Mon Jun 15, 2009 9:47 pm
But but but.
If she dies, she never publishes the book and Alex gets away, which isn't a happy ending, but the only thing is, Alex doesn't want to lose her eyes, because they're so unique, so the only way she would die is if Alex was pushed to it.
Which would be where the police come in. But Alex could take her away.
Or She could fight for herself, and get injured, and Alex die.
The only thing is, me and her like Alex, so we don't want him to die, I even like the Skeleton Man.
So you see the predicament?
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Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 6:41 am
Noxious Weed But but but.
If she dies, she never publishes the book and Alex gets away, which isn't a happy ending, but the only thing is, Alex doesn't want to lose her eyes, because they're so unique, so the only way she would die is if Alex was pushed to it.
Which would be where the police come in. But Alex could take her away.
Or She could fight for herself, and get injured, and Alex die.
The only thing is, me and her like Alex, so we don't want him to die, I even like the Skeleton Man.
So you see the predicament? What if they get both into some kind of accident (ex: fall down the stairs) and they both get injured, but then Alex is seemingly dead? Then, she runs upstairs (or limps or something) and the police find her. But when they come back down Alex is GONE DUNDUNDUN
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Posted: Tue Jun 16, 2009 4:01 pm
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Posted: Thu Jun 18, 2009 4:27 pm
If it gets good ratings, yes! If not, no : (
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