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 Posted: Sat May 16, 2009 11:33 am
My daughter wrote this story. I have been incuraging her to write. So when I post her story, please read and leave feedback here in the tread. I will read back all the feedback to her, so please keep it where my ten year old can understand. Thanks.
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Posted: Sat May 16, 2009 12:52 pm
Read it and weep
My name is Isabella, but most call me Izzy. One of the popular girls boyfriend is my crush. I think he is the cutest guy in school. He writes poems, and every time I think he writes it for me, even though he writes them to his girlfreind Megan.
I sometimes skip class to write in my journal.
Today's entry: I just love it when I hear his poems as he reads them to her. I don't know why he likes her more, when she is so mean. I think that sometimes I could make her begone by just a zap.
That afternoon, some of my freinds and I went to my house. My brother, who is older, has a band and plays music in the garage. They all think that he is really good and will make a big hit someday. After listening to him and his band play, we went upstairs to hang out. As we sat and talked one of my freinds picked up my journal and read it outloud. I gasped at what she had just read aloud. Thinking to myself that it would be all over the school within a few days. They suggested that we should make it into a book, and have it copy righted.
In a few months the pages of my journal was filled. My freinds and I got together and had it published. It was titled 'Secrets of Izzy", and was put on the shelfs. It seemed to be a big thing, cuz everyone liked to read it. It was like they were not suppose to read it, but they did.
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Posted: Sat May 16, 2009 3:13 pm
I think that she did a good job, maybe she will continue on it.
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Posted: Sun May 17, 2009 12:27 pm
It's ok, she did a good job.
So did you prove read it and correct where it needed it?
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Posted: Sun May 17, 2009 5:18 pm
It's a good start. She already has the 3 Elements for the story's core. That being said the worst thing we could do is give advice. she should do rough draft of 100 pages first then let others read it. Advice to early will make her a lazy writer and will detract from her creativity. Also she should know up fount critics will be tough but not as tough as she will be to herself. She should keep writing even simple thoughts down. These random thoughts often will help fill in a story with color.
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Posted: Mon May 18, 2009 3:35 pm
Cap'n, this is for your daughter:
You rock, girl! Seriously, you ROCK!! Never let anyone stop you from writing, if that's what you want to do. I hope you continue this story (if not on paper or online, at least in your head). I'd give you two thumbs up and a big smile if you really made this story into a book. GO GIRL GO!!! blaugh blaugh blaugh blaugh
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Posted: Tue May 19, 2009 2:38 pm
I sure hope so too. I would love to hear some more about it.
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Posted: Tue May 26, 2009 2:44 pm
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Posted: Fri Jun 05, 2009 8:59 am
Ok, I will let her know when she comes home from school. I hope she will continue on the story. If she does I will post the rest here on the thread.
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Posted: Fri Jun 12, 2009 6:02 pm
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