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 Posted: Tue Mar 03, 2009 2:44 am
GENORDE THE PLACE 0F 3,3, AND 3
Chapter 1:No New Memories
Scene 1,Act 1: It's a midsummer night and the moons three quarters full with long thin clouds passing by the starry night sky and all is but quite in the forest. A white girl with streaming long blue hair and blue eyes, wearing a short white kimono dress with a red obi streams by being pursued by and short old woman and a horde of demons.
Old woman: After her!
The girl flies left and right through the thicket of trees gaining little to no ground away from her pursuers she starts to chant an incantation and a whirlpool appears in the middle of some trees not too far from her, she's almost to it when a fireball comes screaming in behind her hitting the tree right next to her, another one comes and then another now lighting's being added to the on slot of attacks. She gets hit not by one by both elements and is thrown into the whirlpool by them, you can hear the demons scream some in raged and some in victory, the portal that was a whirlpool closes and opens out to a new area with a midsummer's night with a new moon and a bright starry night, where there is a river and a small gorge that makes a waterfall with a small pond. The girl comes falling out of the portal knocked unconscious by the demons and falls straight into the pond with a gigantic splash. Last she is seen is washed up on that small forest shore by the pond.
End Scene
Scene 2: Fade to black light comes back inside a dark dingy cave where there is a small fire going, it has been five years since the first event happened, a white girl with long black hair and green eyes, she wakes and sits up, suddenly making her cover fall into her lap, drenched in cold sweat, a look of shock on her face she thinks to herself.
Girl: It was that same nightmare again. Why do I keep having that dream?
The girl puts her head in her hands
Girl: It seems so real and that woman why does she seem familiar to me?
The girl gets up off the matt and slides on her short white kimono dress and ties it with a short black sash, socks, and sandals and goes to the front of the cave where there is a waterfall. She walks out from behind it and jumps down from a cliff landing perfectly on the forest floor right beside the pond with one foot, she then proceeds to walk around the pond to get a better look at the waterfall and then bins down to wash her face.
End Scene
this is what I have so far what do you think? I am trying to write it in TV script format
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Posted: Tue Mar 03, 2009 11:18 am
I don't have a lot of experience with scripts, but all I'd say concerning the format is to make sure that everything you want not to be adlibbed (when spoken) be explicitly stated, and that the way everything looks needs to be very detailed. She washes up on a bank? What does the area look like? Etc?
Far from that though, I think this is a good start. I mean, the most important thing is to know exactly what's going on in your story, and you do. In terms of the sequence of the story it's clear, even if the language gets a little muddy sometimes. I think that with editing you've got something. Read some scripts, read read, that's the standard thing to say.
Keep going (:
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Your_NewLunarDoll Captain
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Posted: Wed Mar 04, 2009 12:09 am
I write screenplays as well as novels. (I've even worked on a TV format screenplay.) I suggest looking up how to completely format it before writing it.
And actually what Tensaibishonen is wrong, you don't need to give details on the area, unless their are specific parts you want the director to know about
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Posted: Mon Mar 09, 2009 12:50 am
She's right in the terms of writing a book dude, which is her specialty, and she even stated that she didn't have a great deal of experience with screenplays. Yes you are right, but you're also wrong in the fact she was wrong. I'm damned confusing I know, but it's 2 in the morning and I'm dead tired razz Keep the script coming.
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Posted: Thu Mar 12, 2009 3:07 am
thx for the help..and I've already read a bunch of screen play formats I went to a school for tv and radio communications, which I got my Communication Arts Associate's Degree in but no help there
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Posted: Thu Mar 12, 2009 7:01 pm
The thing about Gaia though, is it doesn't post your indents... So, you'd have to find a better way to show the transition between action and speach x.x;;
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 10:09 am
XEternally BoundX She's right in the terms of writing a book dude, which is her specialty, and she even stated that she didn't have a great deal of experience with screenplays. Yes you are right, but you're also wrong in the fact she was wrong. I'm damned confusing I know, but it's 2 in the morning and I'm dead tired razz Keep the script coming.
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Posted: Tue Mar 17, 2009 5:19 pm
z-bandit XEternally BoundX She's right in the terms of writing a book dude, which is her specialty, and she even stated that she didn't have a great deal of experience with screenplays. Yes you are right, but you're also wrong in the fact she was wrong. I'm damned confusing I know, but it's 2 in the morning and I'm dead tired razz Keep the script coming. It doesn't make either of us an expert -shrug- All I was saying was that anything the screenplay writer's vision needs to be clear in the screenplay if they want it portrayed. I don't see how that's wrong >>
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Your_NewLunarDoll Captain
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