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 Posted: Mon Jan 05, 2009 5:55 pm
Your Eyes
Your eyes ablaze,
They light the gloom,
Telling me you love me,
There’s no breathing room.
But who needs to breathe,
When I have your eyes,
Capture me inside them,
Take me by surprise.
Eyes like fire,
Set in flame,
And for my capture,
They’re to blame.
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Posted: Tue Jan 06, 2009 9:37 pm
Nice. I like it.
And I can definitely relate.
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Posted: Thu Jan 08, 2009 1:44 pm
yep, I'm sure. I'm so totally in love right now, so this poetry is becoming common.
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Posted: Sat Jan 10, 2009 9:46 am
Yes, this was very nice. I would have to say the last four lines were my favorite.
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Posted: Wed Mar 31, 2010 6:55 pm
I can definately relate, I'm totally falling for this guy and this really reminds me of him. I really liked it.
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Posted: Wed May 05, 2010 1:34 pm
Fantastic! The emotion in your poem came out perfectly clear and the way you described everything was great.
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Posted: Sat Jul 10, 2010 12:15 pm
I like it, you could really feel emotion there. The only thing i could say that may be an improvement is that the flow got kinda weird in line four, i think it was from "breathing".
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