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General TermOfSecurity0 Vice Captain
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 Posted: Wed Nov 26, 2008 7:12 pm
well write some poems so we can all give you constructive critism!
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Posted: Tue Feb 24, 2009 1:25 pm
Here goes:
You will be missed
Lost in the darkness
Somewhere
Where are you?
Can’t find you
Alone
Say my name
Ill say yours
Come find me
In the dark
My dear
Can you hear my cries?
You’re so far away
So distant
Where have you gone?
I miss you
You’re different
From how you
Used to be
Is this how it is now?
I see…
I guess Ill see you
Around
Goodbye
Is it the end?
I can deal with that
I guess…
Just remember
You will be missed
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yummeh-applesauces Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Feb 25, 2009 1:26 pm
I'd never have the mind to think of something like that. Well done! ^^
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Posted: Thu Feb 26, 2009 12:20 pm
Somewhere by Within Temptation inspired that, so it's your doing! biggrin
Here's another, shorter one:
Pain
Pain etches my brain
I’m waiting for the rain
Memory down the drain
Waiting in the rain
Rain falls and I cry
I’m going to die
The well runs dry
Why can’t I just fly
I’m going to cry
I’m going to fly
I’m going to die
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Lee_Fan _of_Shawn_Michael Captain
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Posted: Thu Feb 26, 2009 1:44 pm
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Posted: Thu Feb 26, 2009 3:05 pm
Lolz, when I read the first couple lines I figured that out.
I liked the second one too! ^^
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yummeh-applesauces Vice Captain
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Posted: Fri Feb 27, 2009 12:06 pm
stressed Wheres my critisicm?
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Posted: Fri Feb 27, 2009 5:03 pm
Is there any need for critisicm?
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yummeh-applesauces Vice Captain
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Posted: Mon Mar 02, 2009 8:37 am
Yes! How will I get better? Flattery is awesome, thanks so much, but really. I know you must not like something!
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Posted: Mon Mar 02, 2009 9:49 am
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yummeh-applesauces Vice Captain
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Posted: Tue Mar 03, 2009 1:40 pm
stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed stressed
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Posted: Tue Mar 03, 2009 2:37 pm
Well, once Lee FINALLY gets on she'll say something. I mean, to her there must be SOMETHING wrong.
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yummeh-applesauces Vice Captain
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Posted: Wed Mar 04, 2009 11:43 am
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Posted: Tue Mar 10, 2009 4:57 pm
Here is one of my song thingies................ sweatdrop
Are You Dreaming?
You kiss me,
Yet say her name,
Are you dreaming?
Roles reversed,
What happened to me,
Breaking your heart?
Now it feels as if,
You are shredding mine,
Is this your revenge?
Are you dreaming?
'Cause it seems as if,
I'm walking through a nightmare.
Once so close,
Now I guess its my fault,
Shoulda never let you go,
Still won't you just give me a chance?
Just give in,
You know you want to.
Stuck inside,
Trapped together,
In this blizzard,
Of memories.
Thought what I was doing,
Was so right,
Turns out I'm wrong,
Ain't the first time.
Are you dreaming?
'Cause it seems as if,
I'm walking through a nightmare.
Struggling,
To make you understand,
My pain,
You know how it feels,
How can you be so heartless?
Well I guess,
This is it,
Must it really end,
This way?
Are you dreaming,
'Cause it seems as if,
I'm walking through a nightmare.........
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Posted: Wed Mar 11, 2009 12:56 pm
I like it. Despite how much of a hypocrite this makes me, I don't see a problem.
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