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 Posted: Sat Oct 08, 2005 2:49 pm
~IS this ok??~
The Wind was cold as ice as Opus walked down the grey sidewalk were he say a girl the same age as him and went to go and talk to her.
"Ahh, Are you ok Arrhh Miss?" Said Opus.
As he spoked to her, she jumped.
"I......I...I didn`t see you there!" She said.
~now you contiue the story and i will jumps in were ever!~
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Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 3:06 pm
For the starter? Try for more imagry. Description is key in the starting post or message. It tells the setting, time period, mood, and about who and what your character is. The first message is always the longest. They can be over a page long.
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Posted: Thu Oct 20, 2005 4:28 pm
Karmi For the starter? Try for more imagry. Description is key in the starting post or message. It tells the setting, time period, mood, and about who and what your character is. The first message is always the longest. They can be over a page long. well it was just the top of my head..... sweatdrop
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Posted: Mon Oct 24, 2005 7:34 pm
Lol It's ok. Take it at constructive criticism. You can use it as a building block to a more thought out one if you are trying to go for a serious chain story. Or if you are just having fun with some friends. You can just use that.
It's just like writing the first chapter to a novel. You gotta revise and keep revising. It's the most discriptive section of a story, but it intrigues and makes people wonder and not give flat out answers.
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Posted: Tue Dec 06, 2005 9:13 pm
shampoo13 ~IS this ok??~ The Wind was cold as ice as Opus walked down the grey sidewalk were he say a girl the same age as him and went to go and talk to her. "Ahh, Are you ok Arrhh Miss?" Said Opus. As he spoked to her, she jumped. "I......I...I didn`t see you there!" She said. ~now you contiue the story and i will jumps in were ever!~ "It's okay." Said Opus. "Do not worry about it." The girl looked up at him shyly. "I'm reeeally, reeeeeally sorry."
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Posted: Thu Dec 15, 2005 7:49 pm
"I know! Thats why I said don't worry about it!!" He replied harshly. This was a bad move. The girl started to glare at him.
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