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PrinceCabbit
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PostPosted: Sat Sep 13, 2008 12:38 pm


These songs are not finished so please bare along if you would like to help please do so

ANOTHER TEAR DROP AWAY FROM A BROKEN NATION

To brings words together will be my end.
To bring life to a past will be the beginning.
To see life as it is is nothing but a sin.

Live life to see the end to love only yours.
Die trying to breath from all the suffocation.
Laugh about your life's very end.

To die nowing you were never in.
Leave now and never say another word?

NO now I must lash out!
Bringing these people down!
Leaving no trace I was ever there! (Chorus) ever there now.

Breaking down tears of a broken nation.
Saying dis pear to those that know me.
Telling lies to the ones that care.

Yell out lines from behind a spear.
The words that hurt bring me to this day.
I just don't know what to say.

When I touch this cold heart I only feel .
Pain this pain I know is you.
This feeling inside my heart is telling me no.

Breaking down tears of a broken nation.
Saying dis pear to those that know me.
Telling lies to the ones that care.

NO now I must lash out!
Bringing these people down!
Leaving no trace I was ever there! (Chorus) ever there now.

NO now I must lash out!
Bringing these people down!
Leaving no trace I was ever there! (Chorus) ever there with you

FOOLS

I place my face upon disgrace.
To see your tears run down my face.
As I walk among these crooked halls.
I see my blood run down the walls.

Pain and fear runs through my eyes.
As I listen to all your lies.
I walk among the path of light.
Leading to my death.

Pain! pain is in my fears.
Bringing he the darkness closer.
As close as it can get.
Then it stops to look at you and all I get is this.

Death! death to you! and death to me! for all the sins we`ve done.
Feast! feast upon your soul and tear it limb to limb!
Sin! sin is the one thing this world forgot!
Among us we live to die!To see the world as fate!

I place my face upon disgrace.
To see your tears run down my face.
As I walk among these crooked halls.
I see my blood run down the walls.

Pain and fear runs through my eyes.
As I listen to all your lies.
I walk among the path of light.
Leading to my death.

Pain! pain is in my fears.
Bringing he the darkness closer.
As close as it can get.
Then it stops to look at you and all I get is this.

Death! death to you! and death to me! for all the sins we`ve done.
Feast! feast upon your soul and tear it limb to limb!
Sin! sin is the one thing this world forgot!
Among us we live to die!To see the world as fate!
PostPosted: Sun Sep 14, 2008 6:20 pm


I'll be back. Promise!

Scourged Angel


Scourged Angel

PostPosted: Tue Sep 30, 2008 8:47 am


Another Tear Drop Away From a Broken Nation:
To brings words together will be my end., Brings should be changed to bring.

To see life as it is is nothing but a sin. I don't know if you want two is's in there. If you do you should but a comma or a semi-comma in.

To die nowing you were never in. Nowing should be knowing.

Saying dis pear to those that know me. Dis pear should be despair.

Yell out lines from behind a spear. What do you mean a spear?

It's a very good piece of writing. I like it a lot.

Fools:
Among us we live to die!To see the world as fate! Needs a space before To.

Capitalize after every exclamation mark.

Other than that it's a very good writing again. Good job on both of them.
PostPosted: Tue Oct 07, 2008 5:05 pm


thnx I will fix those

PrinceCabbit
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