Naiad_Acantha
Now I'm lying here in shadow, in the soft ground below
Longing to hear the words, I love and miss you so
I can feel you live and love
And because I fought you're safe
In that wonderous world above
Show me that though my blood has been split
Others do still stand tall
Tell me that I did not die in vain
Help me see the peace
I lived and died for grow
As I lie here
In a soldiers meadow
((Do not copy!))
*This is for the soldiers who give their lives for us.
mm 'kay. Well the first 5 lines are great. then you write 'show me that though my blood has been split' wich A. Has a typo, should be spilt, not split
xd and b. the rythm's completely off from the other lines you go from about 7 beats to 9, and then it kind of falls apart from there. So if you could fix the last 7 lines, it'd be amazing.
The 1st 4 lines are great though
4laugh
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