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 Posted: Sat Aug 09, 2008 8:05 pm
Winding paths traced withing ourselves
We who tread where the weary pray tell
Unto pasts do we requit
Rebirth anew foresooth forthwith
For it is we who shall return
Remade in trade and so it is said
For the paths we take may brake and take
and so again i travel this path alone
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Posted: Mon Aug 11, 2008 6:45 am
*falls over* that was amazing. Absolutely great. Although you have a spelling error in the first line, you added a 'g' to 'within'. But still, that was amazing!
Also, I don't know if this is on purpose or not, but your 'i' in the last line is lowercased.
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 1:06 pm
Eh, my bad my bad I was in sort of a rush when i wrote that down the other night. Oh and thanks for the compliment. Oh and your kinda right about the lower case i it gives the feeling of a broken spirit kind of like you dont feel so prepared and more vulnerable.
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Posted: Tue Aug 12, 2008 6:01 pm
No problem, I do it all the time.
I see, yes that definately does make sense. Anyway, it's great
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Posted: Sun Aug 17, 2008 10:46 am
That was a really good poem. Until now, I didn't realize other people wrote poetry. Well I realized it, I'd just never encountered one. It was really, really good.
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